for There You'll Be4/1 c8 Guest
Update thissssssssss...nowwwww why is it taking so long?!
Update thissssssssss...nowwwww why is it taking so long?!
3/27 c1 xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Goku and Chichi are better couple and they love each other .Bulma is just excess
Goku and Chichi are better couple and they love each other .Bulma is just excess
1/19 c8 Nina
I hope you'll finish this one day!;)
I hope you'll finish this one day!;)
12/20/2011 c8 koori no hime
are you going to continue this fanfic? I hope you do. I like it despite the fact that seeing either vegeta or goku hurt pains me.. :) Anyway, I'm waiting for your update :))
are you going to continue this fanfic? I hope you do. I like it despite the fact that seeing either vegeta or goku hurt pains me.. :) Anyway, I'm waiting for your update :))
3/16/2011 c8 laila
i think vegeta should be out of picture and bulma and goku together in chapter 9. bulma deserves goku.
i think vegeta should be out of picture and bulma and goku together in chapter 9. bulma deserves goku.
3/16/2011 c8 clair
next chapter please
next chapter please
2/9/2011 c8 
5Black Diamond07
mmmmMMMMMMm...yeah, I can't wait for Goku to show up cause Ms Bulma is sooooo in trouble! Shame, shame,shame! I thought this was suppose to be a Bulma/Goku fic, although I love the trist going on!
Your writing is awesome and I hope u continue this really soon!
4rm da blk chick$$$
5Black Diamond07mmmmMMMMMMm...yeah, I can't wait for Goku to show up cause Ms Bulma is sooooo in trouble! Shame, shame,shame! I thought this was suppose to be a Bulma/Goku fic, although I love the trist going on!
Your writing is awesome and I hope u continue this really soon!
4rm da blk chick$$$
8/2/2010 c1 Its Still Easy
I didn't even make it passed the third "scene". Honestly, that was horribly written. First off, nobody cares to read something that jumps from setting to setting and you attempting to use some sucky poetry that sounds like a tear drop writing song lyrics, was just annoying. You have to make the story gel, you have to add something in there that wraps up the end of one part of the story and introduces the next. There was no transition. 'I'm pushing out from this rounded eye, that's red because the salt inside' is NOT a transition. It's a joke that most readers would laugh at.
I would give you further critique but you went out of your way to make sure any educated writer wouldn't go to the next chapter.
I didn't even make it passed the third "scene". Honestly, that was horribly written. First off, nobody cares to read something that jumps from setting to setting and you attempting to use some sucky poetry that sounds like a tear drop writing song lyrics, was just annoying. You have to make the story gel, you have to add something in there that wraps up the end of one part of the story and introduces the next. There was no transition. 'I'm pushing out from this rounded eye, that's red because the salt inside' is NOT a transition. It's a joke that most readers would laugh at.
I would give you further critique but you went out of your way to make sure any educated writer wouldn't go to the next chapter.
5/26/2010 c8 1KitKat1310
oh my lord! this story is amazing i love it :D only found this the other day and haven't stopped reading it! So well written I was actually really upset thinking poor Goku had copped it, starting to wonder though if Vegeta knew he was alive all along...ooer! Please update soon xxx
1KitKat1310oh my lord! this story is amazing i love it :D only found this the other day and haven't stopped reading it! So well written I was actually really upset thinking poor Goku had copped it, starting to wonder though if Vegeta knew he was alive all along...ooer! Please update soon xxx
9/15/2008 c8 fighting monkey
This story is awesome. It's not too mushy either. Goku is in for one hell of a surprise when he gets back. I like seeing a main character enraged beyond belief for some reason. Rage and asskicking are very appealing. I wish you would update though. I don't like to be left hangin. I'm starting to like G/B pairings for some reason. I'm kind of tired of B/V now. Way too many of them and not enough of the other.
This story is awesome. It's not too mushy either. Goku is in for one hell of a surprise when he gets back. I like seeing a main character enraged beyond belief for some reason. Rage and asskicking are very appealing. I wish you would update though. I don't like to be left hangin. I'm starting to like G/B pairings for some reason. I'm kind of tired of B/V now. Way too many of them and not enough of the other.
12/26/2007 c8 CDC2
Oh man, Bulma's got it bad!
Poor Goku...
He's going to be devastated.
Can't wait to see what happens =P
This is a very interesting fic.
Plenty of humour, drama, romance and action.
I've also noticed that in a lot of fanfics, there's always slow bits that tend to drag on for ages, then lead up to something good.
You've done a very good job of keeping the whole thing very entertaining.
Keep up the good work!
Oh man, Bulma's got it bad!
Poor Goku...
He's going to be devastated.
Can't wait to see what happens =P
This is a very interesting fic.
Plenty of humour, drama, romance and action.
I've also noticed that in a lot of fanfics, there's always slow bits that tend to drag on for ages, then lead up to something good.
You've done a very good job of keeping the whole thing very entertaining.
Keep up the good work!