for Let Me Protect You5/1/2012 c15 
10Lexus Manna
I like it! I now know how to describe sex in my royai fanfic I am writing...Thanks!
10Lexus MannaI like it! I now know how to describe sex in my royai fanfic I am writing...Thanks!
10/14/2011 c28 awwww
Awwwwww this story is soooo heart-warming I really enjoy reading it
but is this the ending or you will continue?
Awwwwww this story is soooo heart-warming I really enjoy reading it
but is this the ending or you will continue?
9/2/2011 c28 1UrgeToDance
Aww, so cute. 3 I really enjoyed this story. Makes me want to write my own RizaxRoy fanfic. ^.^
1UrgeToDanceAww, so cute. 3 I really enjoyed this story. Makes me want to write my own RizaxRoy fanfic. ^.^
6/13/2011 c28 Guest
Wow. That really felt like a journey... Congratulations on your story! Considering the extremes, I think you stayed true to their characters and I have to admit the ending was absolutely heartwarming :). A few grammar mistakes throughout the whole thing, you might want to get someone to read through it.
Wow. That really felt like a journey... Congratulations on your story! Considering the extremes, I think you stayed true to their characters and I have to admit the ending was absolutely heartwarming :). A few grammar mistakes throughout the whole thing, you might want to get someone to read through it.
5/21/2011 c23 Random Reviewer
The OOC-ness RUINS the plot. Riza is not in character. She's the kind to fight and not back down until the-end-of the-world-and-a-day, and this FF places her in all the wrong lights. From what we've seen of her in the anime and manga, hurting her [even when she's weapon-less] wouldn't be so easy. The more your attempt to hurt her, the more she'd fight because she believes she has a duty to get back to and protect Mustang.
There's also too much focus on her 'hurt.' Good stories balance elements. Unless you're aiming for this story to be a cry-all-the-time kind of tragedy, please balance the emotions. Don't get repetitive.
Other than that... your spacing, punctuation and grammar are all fairly good.
The OOC-ness RUINS the plot. Riza is not in character. She's the kind to fight and not back down until the-end-of the-world-and-a-day, and this FF places her in all the wrong lights. From what we've seen of her in the anime and manga, hurting her [even when she's weapon-less] wouldn't be so easy. The more your attempt to hurt her, the more she'd fight because she believes she has a duty to get back to and protect Mustang.
There's also too much focus on her 'hurt.' Good stories balance elements. Unless you're aiming for this story to be a cry-all-the-time kind of tragedy, please balance the emotions. Don't get repetitive.
Other than that... your spacing, punctuation and grammar are all fairly good.
4/19/2011 c5 RizaMustang85
I have only got to chapter 5 but I am in love with the way that you write. A wonderful stroy so far.
I have only got to chapter 5 but I am in love with the way that you write. A wonderful stroy so far.
4/3/2011 c15 WTF
The girl just got raped and now you're gonna have mustang ** her? What the hell?
The girl just got raped and now you're gonna have mustang ** her? What the hell?
3/26/2011 c28 JainaSolo2o
Well for a forst story it wasn't half bad. There were s few gramarical errors. Also the story wa a little back and forth between the different view points, an extra space or symbol would help. Other than that I loved it keep the stories coming. Just a little constructive critasism no hard feelings :)
Well for a forst story it wasn't half bad. There were s few gramarical errors. Also the story wa a little back and forth between the different view points, an extra space or symbol would help. Other than that I loved it keep the stories coming. Just a little constructive critasism no hard feelings :)
2/11/2011 c28 1x-PoisonousKisses-x
This is amazing =)
I would say more but there are no words to describe my love for this story =P
1x-PoisonousKisses-xThis is amazing =)
I would say more but there are no words to describe my love for this story =P
2/5/2011 c28 Ramen Time
thank you so much. i **in love
you man. XD im glad he finally told
her, took him long enough lol cant
wait to see what happens next!
thank you so much. i **in love
you man. XD im glad he finally told
her, took him long enough lol cant
wait to see what happens next!
2/3/2011 c27 grimmy lover
* gasping like a fish out of water *... stops... * high pitched scream * INCREDIBLE MAGNIFICENCE ! XDXDXD I LOVEN IT LIKE STARBUCKS COFFEE ! AWESOMEST JOB EVER !
* gasping like a fish out of water *... stops... * high pitched scream * INCREDIBLE MAGNIFICENCE ! XDXDXD I LOVEN IT LIKE STARBUCKS COFFEE ! AWESOMEST JOB EVER !