for In The Shadows9/22/2011 c20 Guest
WHEN IS HE GONNA FIND OUT? DX
WHEN IS HE GONNA FIND OUT? DX
9/21/2011 c20 
12P.T. Piranha
Dang it is he gonna find out or not? How much longer can he keep dancing around this issue?
And oh yeah I forgot he got a cat.
12P.T. PiranhaDang it is he gonna find out or not? How much longer can he keep dancing around this issue?
And oh yeah I forgot he got a cat.
9/21/2011 c20 51Anne Camp aka Obi-quiet
Yeah, this won't end well. And Boredom is the worst cure for curiosity.
51Anne Camp aka Obi-quietYeah, this won't end well. And Boredom is the worst cure for curiosity.
9/21/2011 c20 1Hellotoday
Great job as always I don't know how you do it:D
I'm to tired to read Broken Mirror tonight but I'll be sure to read and review tommorow okay Moofy?
1HellotodayGreat job as always I don't know how you do it:D
I'm to tired to read Broken Mirror tonight but I'll be sure to read and review tommorow okay Moofy?
9/11/2011 c19 51Anne Camp aka Obi-quiet
I don't much care for the last sentence. It just seemed a little too sudden and a little too convenient. I would have liked for it to be a bit smoother of a transition, like say he thinks of a line from the book and then starts thinking about living twice and making the impossible possible.
And another thing: Even if all logic was practically screaming at him that it was impossible, he couldn't of lived twice.
It should be "...he couldn't have lived twice." If you don't want to say 'have' then it should be spelled "...he couldn't 'ave lived twice."
Otherwise, good chapter. :)
51Anne Camp aka Obi-quietI don't much care for the last sentence. It just seemed a little too sudden and a little too convenient. I would have liked for it to be a bit smoother of a transition, like say he thinks of a line from the book and then starts thinking about living twice and making the impossible possible.
And another thing: Even if all logic was practically screaming at him that it was impossible, he couldn't of lived twice.
It should be "...he couldn't have lived twice." If you don't want to say 'have' then it should be spelled "...he couldn't 'ave lived twice."
Otherwise, good chapter. :)
9/11/2011 c19 3TheTravelWriter
And here I was worried that you wouldn't have time to write any stories for a few months(some authors do that). Anyway, excellent chapter. I love the suspense and the fact that he keeps getting closer and closer to the truth and then...cliffhanger. You, my good friend, are the evil mistress of cliffhangers. I can't seem to find any faults in your story at all! Right now you are on the list of
'Best Fanfics' along with 'Story of the Century' and that is a really high mark since I am quite the critic. Keep on going! I can't wait to see what comes next!
3TheTravelWriterAnd here I was worried that you wouldn't have time to write any stories for a few months(some authors do that). Anyway, excellent chapter. I love the suspense and the fact that he keeps getting closer and closer to the truth and then...cliffhanger. You, my good friend, are the evil mistress of cliffhangers. I can't seem to find any faults in your story at all! Right now you are on the list of
'Best Fanfics' along with 'Story of the Century' and that is a really high mark since I am quite the critic. Keep on going! I can't wait to see what comes next!
9/10/2011 c19 1Hellotoday
Dang it! You sure do know how to pick the best spots for suspence! Darn it! This chapter was really really good! I loved this chapter because of all of the slight revelations going on in it! I can't wait to see what happens next!:D
1HellotodayDang it! You sure do know how to pick the best spots for suspence! Darn it! This chapter was really really good! I loved this chapter because of all of the slight revelations going on in it! I can't wait to see what happens next!:D
9/9/2011 c18 Pride the Arrogant
Wow what an amazing story. I only just got into Fullmetal when I was showed an episode with Pride in it. I instantly loved it and Pride is my fav character. This story i so well written and few people have written stories about after the promised day but this is so well written that i have read it countless times already and have yet to get sick of it. I love the way that you portray selim as a human its so cute. I really hope that you update the story soon i cant wait till he find out the truth. Until then see you
Wow what an amazing story. I only just got into Fullmetal when I was showed an episode with Pride in it. I instantly loved it and Pride is my fav character. This story i so well written and few people have written stories about after the promised day but this is so well written that i have read it countless times already and have yet to get sick of it. I love the way that you portray selim as a human its so cute. I really hope that you update the story soon i cant wait till he find out the truth. Until then see you
9/3/2011 c18 51Anne Camp aka Obi-quiet
Well, so far I'm enjoying the pace and the idea behind the whole thing. I had a similar idea myself and was planning on posting it soon, so I have to admit I find it rather interesting. :)
51Anne Camp aka Obi-quietWell, so far I'm enjoying the pace and the idea behind the whole thing. I had a similar idea myself and was planning on posting it soon, so I have to admit I find it rather interesting. :)
9/2/2011 c2 Anne Camp aka Obi-quiet
Interesting. The reason I found this fic is because I'm writing a Selim fic of my own and I wanted to see what else was out there. My story has the Elrics react a little differently, but I really like how you did it here. Well thought out and only a few minor mistakes (IE: "could of" instead of "could have", etc).
I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this.
Interesting. The reason I found this fic is because I'm writing a Selim fic of my own and I wanted to see what else was out there. My story has the Elrics react a little differently, but I really like how you did it here. Well thought out and only a few minor mistakes (IE: "could of" instead of "could have", etc).
I'm looking forward to seeing where you take this.
8/18/2011 c18 Some Random Reader
This is an awesome story :D I really love this story it feels like a nice continuation of the series everyones in character and Selim acts so cute. I knew in the end Pride could'nt have lost his memories! How do you think that bird got injured anyway! C: Hope he turns evil again lol :) Happy 1 year anniversary btw! The truth will be revealed! Wonder how and what will happen :D
My favorite story :D nice to know other people are total Pride fangirls just like me C: Update Soon!
This is an awesome story :D I really love this story it feels like a nice continuation of the series everyones in character and Selim acts so cute. I knew in the end Pride could'nt have lost his memories! How do you think that bird got injured anyway! C: Hope he turns evil again lol :) Happy 1 year anniversary btw! The truth will be revealed! Wonder how and what will happen :D
My favorite story :D nice to know other people are total Pride fangirls just like me C: Update Soon!
8/18/2011 c18 iFanboy
Yes! You finallly updated! o omg! I wonder if he's gonna ask someone about homuculus(sp?)
Yes! You finallly updated! o omg! I wonder if he's gonna ask someone about homuculus(sp?)
8/17/2011 c18 3TheTravelWriter
Watch out Selim, the voices in peoples heads tend to tell them to kill people! This is absolutely brilliant! Happy first anniversary to your story Moofy-Fan!
3TheTravelWriterWatch out Selim, the voices in peoples heads tend to tell them to kill people! This is absolutely brilliant! Happy first anniversary to your story Moofy-Fan!
7/30/2011 c17 1Hellotoday
Oh! Oh! I really, really like where this is going! Please Please Please have Selim confide to Al about the dreams sometime soon! Please! I really would like to see what happens after that happens!:D
1HellotodayOh! Oh! I really, really like where this is going! Please Please Please have Selim confide to Al about the dreams sometime soon! Please! I really would like to see what happens after that happens!:D