for Halo Reach5/4/2012 c2 
3anipotter13
Good start so far. Don't be too upset by the negative comments; some people don't know how to give constructive critisism. I think you have a good idea but you could benefit from a beta reader who could help with spelling. :)
3anipotter13Good start so far. Don't be too upset by the negative comments; some people don't know how to give constructive critisism. I think you have a good idea but you could benefit from a beta reader who could help with spelling. :)
10/17/2010 c2 1bakaXdesu
lol...i thought it was good but there were alot of mis-spells like hummer...its humor...unless you were going for that then i applaud you
1bakaXdesulol...i thought it was good but there were alot of mis-spells like hummer...its humor...unless you were going for that then i applaud you
10/15/2010 c2 Josky
Also: Keyes is dead (absorbed by the Flood, then killed by John to get an access key or something), and your character is a Mary-Sue ("a mutant that can't die". Next you'll be saying I'm Chuck Norris). If I were you, I'd read the actual books and play the games. Because clearly you have little to no idea of the Master Chief's character. The Chief would never say "gross". He's basically a killing machine; almost nothing grosses him put.
Also: Keyes is dead (absorbed by the Flood, then killed by John to get an access key or something), and your character is a Mary-Sue ("a mutant that can't die". Next you'll be saying I'm Chuck Norris). If I were you, I'd read the actual books and play the games. Because clearly you have little to no idea of the Master Chief's character. The Chief would never say "gross". He's basically a killing machine; almost nothing grosses him put.
10/15/2010 c1 Josky
Hrm... well... you could try reading a book... and grammar and spelling need improvement...
Hrm... well... you could try reading a book... and grammar and spelling need improvement...
10/6/2010 c2 10bldude
What the Anonymoose said.
Although interesting idea on having noble six survive into halo CE via other means.
10bldudeWhat the Anonymoose said.
Although interesting idea on having noble six survive into halo CE via other means.
9/29/2010 c2 the anonymoose
I'm gonna' be frank with you.
this story makes no sense whatsoever.
on top of that, the master chief, the guy who has killed so many covenant in so many gruesome ways saying people hunting each other and butchering cows is gross? Gotta say that this must have sounded much better in your head.
I'm gonna' be frank with you.
this story makes no sense whatsoever.
on top of that, the master chief, the guy who has killed so many covenant in so many gruesome ways saying people hunting each other and butchering cows is gross? Gotta say that this must have sounded much better in your head.