for Fighting your fate1/27/2011 c1 Bluebellbird
clutching my soiled neckerchief in one hand, and my self-reproach in the curl of my fist.
love this sentence! Great work!
clutching my soiled neckerchief in one hand, and my self-reproach in the curl of my fist.
love this sentence! Great work!
11/12/2010 c1 FACEBOOK HAS YOU
YOU!
Have written nothing.
YOU!
Have written nothing.
10/20/2010 c1 LIES
Something else I've noticed. Why doesn't your profile (much as I hate profiles, prefering anonymity to "Copy And Paste This") say you play the viola? It says violin and flute. Have some pride, Merlinfan93.
Can I take the opportunity to tell you how much I despise your username? I don't know why, but having to type this particular name when addressing you makes me want to kill people.
And WRITE, GIRL, WRITE! Fanfiction is largely ** and useless, but WRITE!
Something else I've noticed. Why doesn't your profile (much as I hate profiles, prefering anonymity to "Copy And Paste This") say you play the viola? It says violin and flute. Have some pride, Merlinfan93.
Can I take the opportunity to tell you how much I despise your username? I don't know why, but having to type this particular name when addressing you makes me want to kill people.
And WRITE, GIRL, WRITE! Fanfiction is largely ** and useless, but WRITE!
10/20/2010 c1 Go back to bed America
...I'm so glad we're free.
(Not enough space for all that in the title box)
Well the first thing that strikes me is that Merlin's done well to get rid of the bloody lemming. Crashes into anything (and everything) when not under supervision? Not a good possession in your inventory, I reckon. You'd be exhausted, trying to alert yourself to dangers before it stumbles, Final Destination style, through the pointed end of a cello spike (if you don't let me know how the thing dies, the conspiracy theories will keep coming), removing it's own head accidentally in the process by way of a terrifying guillotine style serrated edge kitchen drawer.
You don't just ASK to be Keeper Of The World: it must be granted to you, as if you were an unsuspecting extra in Harry Potter 17.5 or something. Don't try to be smart with universal responsibility.
p.s. Like my Bill Hicks quote?
p.p.s. Lemmings don't fall off cliffs, that's a myth.
...I'm so glad we're free.
(Not enough space for all that in the title box)
Well the first thing that strikes me is that Merlin's done well to get rid of the bloody lemming. Crashes into anything (and everything) when not under supervision? Not a good possession in your inventory, I reckon. You'd be exhausted, trying to alert yourself to dangers before it stumbles, Final Destination style, through the pointed end of a cello spike (if you don't let me know how the thing dies, the conspiracy theories will keep coming), removing it's own head accidentally in the process by way of a terrifying guillotine style serrated edge kitchen drawer.
You don't just ASK to be Keeper Of The World: it must be granted to you, as if you were an unsuspecting extra in Harry Potter 17.5 or something. Don't try to be smart with universal responsibility.
p.s. Like my Bill Hicks quote?
p.p.s. Lemmings don't fall off cliffs, that's a myth.
10/18/2010 c1 
2merlinfan93
I could easily kill a horse by deafening it with my viola playing and making it bash into a tree to get away.
Merlin just fell asleep, and the horse is like a lemming and crashes into everything if it has nobody controlling it-it's a pretty stupid horse.
You told me you had loads of possible titles! Just tell me one so I can be Keeper of the World again.
2merlinfan93I could easily kill a horse by deafening it with my viola playing and making it bash into a tree to get away.
Merlin just fell asleep, and the horse is like a lemming and crashes into everything if it has nobody controlling it-it's a pretty stupid horse.
You told me you had loads of possible titles! Just tell me one so I can be Keeper of the World again.
10/15/2010 c1 UN DEUX TROIS DIS MIROIR NOIR
How the hell does someone ACCIDENTLY kill a horse? They tend to sense when they need to run away, and the average horse is a bit big to accidently crush with your steamroller. Not that Mr.Merlin or whoever is necessarily into flattened animal freakery, but it's not as if you've indicated otherwise...
How the hell does someone ACCIDENTLY kill a horse? They tend to sense when they need to run away, and the average horse is a bit big to accidently crush with your steamroller. Not that Mr.Merlin or whoever is necessarily into flattened animal freakery, but it's not as if you've indicated otherwise...
10/6/2010 c1 I hate Nick Clegg
Hang on, I've just noticed the bloody title.
"Fighting Your Fate"... Oh dear. Are you Stephanie Meyer's ghostwriter?
I hereby renounce your status as Keeper of the World. You are now condemmed to live forever in a fictional prison of my own imagination (Grantham Town Centre). Goodbye.
Hang on, I've just noticed the bloody title.
"Fighting Your Fate"... Oh dear. Are you Stephanie Meyer's ghostwriter?
I hereby renounce your status as Keeper of the World. You are now condemmed to live forever in a fictional prison of my own imagination (Grantham Town Centre). Goodbye.
10/4/2010 c1 Don'tBeEvilJustBeCorporate
AND SHE'S BACK. AHA!
Well, you've got a lot better, I must say. The last one was alright-ish, but we both know you'd have never won a Pulitzer Prize. And now you've transformed, suddenly, into this [Theatrical, melodramatic voice] PROFOUND BEING.
"And my self-repoach in the curl of my fist." Oh the wondrous depth of the sentence! The few short words that contain the very essence of being! Life is in your hands now, C.S, do with it as you see fit, for you are the keeper of the world!
I suppose I'm suitably impressed.
My favourite bit, though, is "LIZARD'S ELBOW". That's appalling! I think it's the worst metaphor I've ever heard in my whole life- I love it.
AND SHE'S BACK. AHA!
Well, you've got a lot better, I must say. The last one was alright-ish, but we both know you'd have never won a Pulitzer Prize. And now you've transformed, suddenly, into this [Theatrical, melodramatic voice] PROFOUND BEING.
"And my self-repoach in the curl of my fist." Oh the wondrous depth of the sentence! The few short words that contain the very essence of being! Life is in your hands now, C.S, do with it as you see fit, for you are the keeper of the world!
I suppose I'm suitably impressed.
My favourite bit, though, is "LIZARD'S ELBOW". That's appalling! I think it's the worst metaphor I've ever heard in my whole life- I love it.
10/2/2010 c1 ForzaDelDestino
Oh, this is so sad, but it's nicely written, and I hope you will continue (even if the next chapters are angsty as well). The Emrys family is now in a fix; what can they do without a horse? I'm sure Merlin will come up with something, but what...? I'd like to find out.
I can't guess which book this is based on. Give us a hint?
Oh, this is so sad, but it's nicely written, and I hope you will continue (even if the next chapters are angsty as well). The Emrys family is now in a fix; what can they do without a horse? I'm sure Merlin will come up with something, but what...? I'd like to find out.
I can't guess which book this is based on. Give us a hint?
10/2/2010 c1 22Katherine Moonhawk
Tess of the D'Urbervilles.You seem to be a good writer, but it's a shame you're deciding not to be particularly original- I hope you'll write something else soon.
22Katherine MoonhawkTess of the D'Urbervilles.You seem to be a good writer, but it's a shame you're deciding not to be particularly original- I hope you'll write something else soon.