for wings & Magic? weird10/4/2010 c1 
19Minn-Maigi
Question: did you review my story under the alias DarkAceisawesome? I only ask because the person in question mentioned how Devi was married to DA.
Anywho, I understand it's your first fic, but I'd encourage you to do some proof-reading; Your grammer could use a bit of work. There are some run-on sentences and capitalization is off. (Also, I notice you have a habit of not using periods). I know it seems like negligible little details, but trust me, if you have a well-written story (grammer-wise) it'll encourage much more people to read it. (And it'll be easier to follow the plot! Two-for one!) ;D
Don't take this the wrong way, after all, it is your first fic. The plot can have potential depending on where you choose to go with it. Don't give up. With practice you'll get better.
19Minn-MaigiQuestion: did you review my story under the alias DarkAceisawesome? I only ask because the person in question mentioned how Devi was married to DA.
Anywho, I understand it's your first fic, but I'd encourage you to do some proof-reading; Your grammer could use a bit of work. There are some run-on sentences and capitalization is off. (Also, I notice you have a habit of not using periods). I know it seems like negligible little details, but trust me, if you have a well-written story (grammer-wise) it'll encourage much more people to read it. (And it'll be easier to follow the plot! Two-for one!) ;D
Don't take this the wrong way, after all, it is your first fic. The plot can have potential depending on where you choose to go with it. Don't give up. With practice you'll get better.