for The Good Left Undone5/22 c39 ManlyMonk
Yesh, Kishimoto, Kishimoto. You know why he is introducing the Hokages and Sasuke? BECAUSE he can't find a real plot line to even out the OVERPOWERED villains in the manga. I mean, seriously, Obito can use that tele jutsu and phase ability 24/7 yet he does not get tired one bit and suddenly Kabuto can summon all of those edo tensei back to life. First of all, how the ** would Kabuto have the DNA necessary for all of those people, and even if they are brought back to life, how the fudge do they have their weapons? So that is why, counter super op with super op. Anyways, nice chapter and happy that you're back!
Yesh, Kishimoto, Kishimoto. You know why he is introducing the Hokages and Sasuke? BECAUSE he can't find a real plot line to even out the OVERPOWERED villains in the manga. I mean, seriously, Obito can use that tele jutsu and phase ability 24/7 yet he does not get tired one bit and suddenly Kabuto can summon all of those edo tensei back to life. First of all, how the ** would Kabuto have the DNA necessary for all of those people, and even if they are brought back to life, how the fudge do they have their weapons? So that is why, counter super op with super op. Anyways, nice chapter and happy that you're back!
5/22 c39 Elim Garak
Not bad but there are a couple of sentences in there that are ginormous. Split them up. For example:
"She was now taller, and was also starting to fill out from the thin stick of a teenager to a woman, even her lekku were growing, now three times longer than before, before her training on Boz Pity they barely reached her shoulders, now they reached to her lower shoulder blades and were entwined around each other like a braid."
This could be three separate sentences.
Not bad but there are a couple of sentences in there that are ginormous. Split them up. For example:
"She was now taller, and was also starting to fill out from the thin stick of a teenager to a woman, even her lekku were growing, now three times longer than before, before her training on Boz Pity they barely reached her shoulders, now they reached to her lower shoulder blades and were entwined around each other like a braid."
This could be three separate sentences.
5/22 c39 
1Vallavarayan
heh-kishimoto has never done anything on a logic basis. it has always been more base on what will bring in more readers. people found naruto's stupidity funny in the beginning, and he exacerbated it to extreme with hinata's shyness.
here, he is not pledging to either one, simply to keep both naruhina fans(the normal humans) and the narusaku fans(the masochists) reading his **.
nice story btw.
1Vallavarayanheh-kishimoto has never done anything on a logic basis. it has always been more base on what will bring in more readers. people found naruto's stupidity funny in the beginning, and he exacerbated it to extreme with hinata's shyness.
here, he is not pledging to either one, simply to keep both naruhina fans(the normal humans) and the narusaku fans(the masochists) reading his **.
nice story btw.
5/22 c39 Kael Hyun
Ive been a NaruSaku fan ever sense I saw how little Hinata really is in the manga and when she is its ether as a doormat or a plot device. Sakura, while she may have anger issues, at least is has Character traits that are understandable. Plus you can see there growing relationship in the 3rd chapter.
Ive been a NaruSaku fan ever sense I saw how little Hinata really is in the manga and when she is its ether as a doormat or a plot device. Sakura, while she may have anger issues, at least is has Character traits that are understandable. Plus you can see there growing relationship in the 3rd chapter.
5/22 c39 Hootyman
I get thee feeling you're gradually going to turn Naruto into more of a leader as you go along, maybe even making him the future leader, or atleast the major face of the Rebel Alliance later on, and I gotta say if it goes that way it's gonna be epic. Also about your comment at the end about the manga, I totally agree, and I swear to god if he does something too crazy and out of the blue like making it sasuhina later on I'm gonna become a serial killer or something!
I get thee feeling you're gradually going to turn Naruto into more of a leader as you go along, maybe even making him the future leader, or atleast the major face of the Rebel Alliance later on, and I gotta say if it goes that way it's gonna be epic. Also about your comment at the end about the manga, I totally agree, and I swear to god if he does something too crazy and out of the blue like making it sasuhina later on I'm gonna become a serial killer or something!
5/22 c39 Guest
l like this chapter, it seems like a good filler scene.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
l like this chapter, it seems like a good filler scene.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
5/22 c39 2Lazurman
Can't wait for the epic confrontation between the ninja...
I wonder if Wookies can use chakra...
2LazurmanCan't wait for the epic confrontation between the ninja...
I wonder if Wookies can use chakra...
5/22 c39 Sage of wind Dragons
yeah Kishimoto loves jerking the chain... and I have to feel that Sasuke was floundering for something cool to say and just went with it while keeping a poker face, really I laughed when he said that, it was sorta funny.
Probabbly just Naruto making a joke and all in the heat of the moment considering the thing with Hinata already did but who knows? its probably going to end up unresolved after all.
you Know I do have to wonder how in gods hell the empire is in such good shape to be a big threat through something other than sheer number seeing as the sheer amount of jedi alive as well as all the other things that have cut the empires growth a bit from out form under. I mean it hasent even been half a decade yet right? how in the hell has the empire already got such wide spread forces? did Sideous grant Vader to be put in charge of the Inquesitors? or did he find already partially trained members?
I kind am wonder where the executioners are but I get it if you don't want to use them at all/yet.
so the bounty hinter groups, Black sun, Admirals, Shinobi, Vader&assorted darkside agents and Sideous and emperors hands as well as any new developmental super soldier programs as well as the entire empires regular forces...
I think the empire needs an up front foe, they did fight a few of those right? I mean it wasent always rebels and such people that they fought.
I wonder how the Assorted aliances of goodish guys would do in such a situation?
Hell Im still surprised that Obi wan , Yoda, along with naruto and his jedi friends haven't slip into Palpatines throne and killed him yet, I mean Yoda and Sideous were mostly matched, and Kenboi was already a match with a blade and has had a couple years to get stronger in the force and stay in shape... add In narutos Kage bushin with is already made to distract an army I mean hell...
but that Just put Vader in charge of the empire and thus more chaoticness, as it is, however I guess the galaxy isn't quite ready to go back to a republic yet so it be meinglesss in some ways...
well I guess Sideous is a REALLY good sensor that such powerful beings like Kenobi, Yoda, or Naruto cant even get in the same solar system without him being aware and thus sending the dogs of war after them.
SO! narutos close band of friends is getting a tad big, and I hope this Wookie isn't a chewbaca replacement or anything, or Id warn you off from that and all.
anyway I look forword to what Sideous is going to do to remind the silly Sasuke that he can have his own loyal ninjas and everything but that Sideous is the one in CHARGE.
I wonder the shinobi really don't have any defenses when it comes to the mental attack that the jedi can dish out can they? it be a shame if one of Sasukes recruits has some sleeper agent brainwashing going on or is vulnerable to Sideous just plucking information out of their heads(after all he could do that to pretty much all of them ) and then using it to make his own ninche of Shinobi, far slower progress of course but...
Sideous brought a galaxy to its knees, So hes a dangerous and shady individual.
actually ins some ways people like Sasuke and Naruto would actually make Sideous MORE dangerous cause in his early carrer Sideous's plots and clock and dagger ability was unparalled and once the Empire came in full swing Sidoeus didn't have any true threats, Kenobi and Yoda were biding their time and everything else for Sideous was clean up in a lot of way, a whole lot of work but If I think that just a bit that Sideous got a tad lazy , just smidge as he ruled out in the open unparalleled for a good long while.
Sasuke , naruto and this entire different political climate should keep Sideous on his toes ready to unleash everything...
with will make him far more fun.
hopefully he doesn't get into cloning an army of force sensatives, cause if he pulls that off and gets it stated the galaxy is pretty much sqrewed...
well that would only be ONE big thing that sideous plans could bring the end to all resistance.
Really Sideous just needs to find the good guys Alliance and force them into a large scale battle to ** that up for a long while but still...
well cant wait to see where this goes, as well as the ways youlll make it less akward for Star wars to fight ninjas and all.
good luck till next time and it was great to see you releasing a new chapter!
yeah Kishimoto loves jerking the chain... and I have to feel that Sasuke was floundering for something cool to say and just went with it while keeping a poker face, really I laughed when he said that, it was sorta funny.
Probabbly just Naruto making a joke and all in the heat of the moment considering the thing with Hinata already did but who knows? its probably going to end up unresolved after all.
you Know I do have to wonder how in gods hell the empire is in such good shape to be a big threat through something other than sheer number seeing as the sheer amount of jedi alive as well as all the other things that have cut the empires growth a bit from out form under. I mean it hasent even been half a decade yet right? how in the hell has the empire already got such wide spread forces? did Sideous grant Vader to be put in charge of the Inquesitors? or did he find already partially trained members?
I kind am wonder where the executioners are but I get it if you don't want to use them at all/yet.
so the bounty hinter groups, Black sun, Admirals, Shinobi, Vader&assorted darkside agents and Sideous and emperors hands as well as any new developmental super soldier programs as well as the entire empires regular forces...
I think the empire needs an up front foe, they did fight a few of those right? I mean it wasent always rebels and such people that they fought.
I wonder how the Assorted aliances of goodish guys would do in such a situation?
Hell Im still surprised that Obi wan , Yoda, along with naruto and his jedi friends haven't slip into Palpatines throne and killed him yet, I mean Yoda and Sideous were mostly matched, and Kenboi was already a match with a blade and has had a couple years to get stronger in the force and stay in shape... add In narutos Kage bushin with is already made to distract an army I mean hell...
but that Just put Vader in charge of the empire and thus more chaoticness, as it is, however I guess the galaxy isn't quite ready to go back to a republic yet so it be meinglesss in some ways...
well I guess Sideous is a REALLY good sensor that such powerful beings like Kenobi, Yoda, or Naruto cant even get in the same solar system without him being aware and thus sending the dogs of war after them.
SO! narutos close band of friends is getting a tad big, and I hope this Wookie isn't a chewbaca replacement or anything, or Id warn you off from that and all.
anyway I look forword to what Sideous is going to do to remind the silly Sasuke that he can have his own loyal ninjas and everything but that Sideous is the one in CHARGE.
I wonder the shinobi really don't have any defenses when it comes to the mental attack that the jedi can dish out can they? it be a shame if one of Sasukes recruits has some sleeper agent brainwashing going on or is vulnerable to Sideous just plucking information out of their heads(after all he could do that to pretty much all of them ) and then using it to make his own ninche of Shinobi, far slower progress of course but...
Sideous brought a galaxy to its knees, So hes a dangerous and shady individual.
actually ins some ways people like Sasuke and Naruto would actually make Sideous MORE dangerous cause in his early carrer Sideous's plots and clock and dagger ability was unparalled and once the Empire came in full swing Sidoeus didn't have any true threats, Kenobi and Yoda were biding their time and everything else for Sideous was clean up in a lot of way, a whole lot of work but If I think that just a bit that Sideous got a tad lazy , just smidge as he ruled out in the open unparalleled for a good long while.
Sasuke , naruto and this entire different political climate should keep Sideous on his toes ready to unleash everything...
with will make him far more fun.
hopefully he doesn't get into cloning an army of force sensatives, cause if he pulls that off and gets it stated the galaxy is pretty much sqrewed...
well that would only be ONE big thing that sideous plans could bring the end to all resistance.
Really Sideous just needs to find the good guys Alliance and force them into a large scale battle to ** that up for a long while but still...
well cant wait to see where this goes, as well as the ways youlll make it less akward for Star wars to fight ninjas and all.
good luck till next time and it was great to see you releasing a new chapter!
5/22 c39 7Jrf Steel
Great chapter! Awesome idea keeping Salorrack around. I think I've said it before but everyone needs a wookie friend.
7Jrf SteelGreat chapter! Awesome idea keeping Salorrack around. I think I've said it before but everyone needs a wookie friend.
5/22 c39 Jebest4781
been a while since the last update and anyways this chapter once again turned out great. like how it turned out and like more of the character developments. seems that Sasuke (who could regain his memories at one point) and his group will work for the Emperor for now until the time is right to kill the old bastard. also love the omake for this chapter and I think you should do this more often with either our favorite group or with some of the other people in this story for fun situations and such.
been a while since the last update and anyways this chapter once again turned out great. like how it turned out and like more of the character developments. seems that Sasuke (who could regain his memories at one point) and his group will work for the Emperor for now until the time is right to kill the old bastard. also love the omake for this chapter and I think you should do this more often with either our favorite group or with some of the other people in this story for fun situations and such.
5/22 c39 Mesterio
Can't get enough of this fic. If your having trouble writing then check out other fics or listen to crazy epic sounding music like stuff by Two Steps From Hell. That always puts my head in a mood to wander.
Can't get enough of this fic. If your having trouble writing then check out other fics or listen to crazy epic sounding music like stuff by Two Steps From Hell. That always puts my head in a mood to wander.
5/22 c35 Akuma-Heika
Surprised there wasn't a larger increase in Naruto's midiclorians. Based on how your Jedi described him it sounded like when Jacen Solo became one with the force to a lesser degree. A demigod instead of a god.
Surprised there wasn't a larger increase in Naruto's midiclorians. Based on how your Jedi described him it sounded like when Jacen Solo became one with the force to a lesser degree. A demigod instead of a god.
5/22 c38 Akuma-Heika
I decided no, my own beta reader even gave me a good way of doing it, but I still decided no. The reason behind it is that I have been reading fanfiction for a long time, and 90% of all good stories who suddenly become harems are destroyed because of them. There are a few good ones that show how the human mind reacts and so on, but I feel that if I do this then it will take the story from what I want, and turn it into something else entirely.
I think you could have pulled it off. A little sad you are not. Had not realized you had a poll or I would have voted. I am in agreement that a harem can pull a fic down but I am in the opinion that it isn't the harem that causes it but the lack of the writers skill and that the fic would have been pulled down regardless. The harem merely gives an out for an excuse.
I decided no, my own beta reader even gave me a good way of doing it, but I still decided no. The reason behind it is that I have been reading fanfiction for a long time, and 90% of all good stories who suddenly become harems are destroyed because of them. There are a few good ones that show how the human mind reacts and so on, but I feel that if I do this then it will take the story from what I want, and turn it into something else entirely.
I think you could have pulled it off. A little sad you are not. Had not realized you had a poll or I would have voted. I am in agreement that a harem can pull a fic down but I am in the opinion that it isn't the harem that causes it but the lack of the writers skill and that the fic would have been pulled down regardless. The harem merely gives an out for an excuse.