for To the Stars and Back again12/26/2011 c22 newby6320
Hi PhantomBrat,
You've managed to amaze me yet again with another wonderful story. The premise of To the Stars and Back Again is really interesting and I've very impressed with how logical you've made this three way crossover. I'm especially impressed by the part about Yami's father sealing the StarGate because Yami was a Child of Ra. I'm really curious to see what that means for the Pharaoh and everyone and wonder whether the Gou'ald might come after him because of it. I can't wait to see what happens next and will be anxiously awaiting the next update. Thank you for sharing your work. It has been a pleasure to read.
BTW: I've got a couple suggestions for if you ever decide to revise or remake this story.
You have a lot of characters in this story, and while that makes it interesting, it can also confuse the reader at times. You might consider going through and cutting out all but the characters you consider most essential to the story.
The scene in chapter 20 where the Tok'ra spy is rescued is very abbreviated. While I understand the need to get to the rescue of Danni and Yami quickly, it would be very interesting to see this scene expanded. It would be an excellent opportunity to show how the team works together and the ways in which the teens are incorporated into missions.
Well, suggestions are just suggestions, and as the author you should just do what you think best, it's a great story either way. You really have talent for drawing out the personalities of the characters.
PS: Now you have as many reviews as chapters ;)
Hi PhantomBrat,
You've managed to amaze me yet again with another wonderful story. The premise of To the Stars and Back Again is really interesting and I've very impressed with how logical you've made this three way crossover. I'm especially impressed by the part about Yami's father sealing the StarGate because Yami was a Child of Ra. I'm really curious to see what that means for the Pharaoh and everyone and wonder whether the Gou'ald might come after him because of it. I can't wait to see what happens next and will be anxiously awaiting the next update. Thank you for sharing your work. It has been a pleasure to read.
BTW: I've got a couple suggestions for if you ever decide to revise or remake this story.
You have a lot of characters in this story, and while that makes it interesting, it can also confuse the reader at times. You might consider going through and cutting out all but the characters you consider most essential to the story.
The scene in chapter 20 where the Tok'ra spy is rescued is very abbreviated. While I understand the need to get to the rescue of Danni and Yami quickly, it would be very interesting to see this scene expanded. It would be an excellent opportunity to show how the team works together and the ways in which the teens are incorporated into missions.
Well, suggestions are just suggestions, and as the author you should just do what you think best, it's a great story either way. You really have talent for drawing out the personalities of the characters.
PS: Now you have as many reviews as chapters ;)
12/13/2010 c14 
2Leviathan of the Sea
WOW! YUGIOH, STARGATE SG1, and DANNY PHANTOM. Cool! Are there going to be more crossovers? You don't have to tell me if it ruins any surprises!
2Leviathan of the SeaWOW! YUGIOH, STARGATE SG1, and DANNY PHANTOM. Cool! Are there going to be more crossovers? You don't have to tell me if it ruins any surprises!
11/16/2010 c8 Luiz4200
"I see what you mean," came the reply. "Selmac saved my life, and for that I literally owe it to him."
"Who's Selmac," I asked.
"She's my symbiote. Without it, I would have died from the cancer that was killing me,"
Reminds me of Eddie Brock and Venom.
"I see what you mean," came the reply. "Selmac saved my life, and for that I literally owe it to him."
"Who's Selmac," I asked.
"She's my symbiote. Without it, I would have died from the cancer that was killing me,"
Reminds me of Eddie Brock and Venom.