for Cover ups and Lies3/11/2012 c11 kirara the great
awesomenot complianing or anything but mabye you should go over the story again after you type it to make sure that its all corect
awesomenot complianing or anything but mabye you should go over the story again after you type it to make sure that its all corect
1/23/2012 c1 
189ULYFERAL
Writing constantly helps only a little in improving your skills. What you desperately need is proper critiquing by your readers. Telling you the story is great but not helping you correct your appalling grammar is not helping you improve your work nor make you a better writer.
Proper critiquing, editing your work using Grammar/Spell Checking on whatever word processing program you have, checking out how to write tutorials, and paying attention in English class, and write all the time, and use a Beta who will help critique your work, are all the ways you can learn to be a great writer.
You have a great imagination and the plot for this story is cool. Now all you have to do is learn to find your voice and style which also means learning to correct your work along the way.
Good luck.
189ULYFERALWriting constantly helps only a little in improving your skills. What you desperately need is proper critiquing by your readers. Telling you the story is great but not helping you correct your appalling grammar is not helping you improve your work nor make you a better writer.
Proper critiquing, editing your work using Grammar/Spell Checking on whatever word processing program you have, checking out how to write tutorials, and paying attention in English class, and write all the time, and use a Beta who will help critique your work, are all the ways you can learn to be a great writer.
You have a great imagination and the plot for this story is cool. Now all you have to do is learn to find your voice and style which also means learning to correct your work along the way.
Good luck.
1/13/2012 c10 123purpledragon6
Wicked awesome story! Her name is spelled Felina though. But still great story!
123purpledragon6Wicked awesome story! Her name is spelled Felina though. But still great story!
11/27/2010 c1 Trekker 77
Please continue this story, it's a good start. Don't worry about the errors, we all make them. I've only written 3 stories myself, so I know how hard it is to write. Do your best, my friend!
Please continue this story, it's a good start. Don't worry about the errors, we all make them. I've only written 3 stories myself, so I know how hard it is to write. Do your best, my friend!