for Sketches12/30/2012 c15 
97lowi
This brought such a smile upon my lips. I can see Ron acting exactly as this, and it's so cuteeeee damnit. (even though I feel awfully bad for Hermione - but Ron's adorableness (word?) is just too brilliant.)
97lowiThis brought such a smile upon my lips. I can see Ron acting exactly as this, and it's so cuteeeee damnit. (even though I feel awfully bad for Hermione - but Ron's adorableness (word?) is just too brilliant.)
12/24/2012 c15 78Ralinde
I like what you're doing here, though I have to admit I'm not /that/ much of a fan of really really short stories like this. I liked the one about Voldemort (the last line) and the one about Charlie/Bellatrix (because that's an intriguing pairing) the best.
78RalindeI like what you're doing here, though I have to admit I'm not /that/ much of a fan of really really short stories like this. I liked the one about Voldemort (the last line) and the one about Charlie/Bellatrix (because that's an intriguing pairing) the best.
12/14/2012 c15 76imagined-experiences
Awwww! That's so cute! I love it! Thank you! (You could have called me tat though xD Or where you wishing it to the VA's song?)
76imagined-experiencesAwwww! That's so cute! I love it! Thank you! (You could have called me tat though xD Or where you wishing it to the VA's song?)
12/14/2012 c15 259Inkfire
This was really sweet, once again you managed to pack a lot of meaning and emotion in so few words. I liked the tenderness of Ron's behaviour and how mad he thinks Hermione to be ;) -hearts-
259InkfireThis was really sweet, once again you managed to pack a lot of meaning and emotion in so few words. I liked the tenderness of Ron's behaviour and how mad he thinks Hermione to be ;) -hearts-
7/25/2012 c14 252reminiscent-afterthought
Hmm...I'll have to think more on this. It seems like a poem of sorts, but at the same time not. I think it goes into the category of poetic prose...unless the italics are taken to be part of the ffn defintion of freeverse. Either way, it does contain poetic qualities.
A minor point of inconsistency: you don't start the first line with a capital or any others, but the last line does possess one. It might be a structural thing, but I don't see the reason for emphasising that "then".
I like how the ending reads incompletely; still wondering what happens and really drawing how things can never be so set in stone.
I also don't think emphasising "his" in the third line really helps along with the line; it flows better without the italics. But I love the emphasis on the next line, it really lets the idea drift off. I was expecting punctuation at the end of that line though a the next is a little separate, somewhat juxtaposed, but it has an intersting melody about it without the punctuation too, so this is one of those rare cases where it would work either way.
252reminiscent-afterthoughtHmm...I'll have to think more on this. It seems like a poem of sorts, but at the same time not. I think it goes into the category of poetic prose...unless the italics are taken to be part of the ffn defintion of freeverse. Either way, it does contain poetic qualities.
A minor point of inconsistency: you don't start the first line with a capital or any others, but the last line does possess one. It might be a structural thing, but I don't see the reason for emphasising that "then".
I like how the ending reads incompletely; still wondering what happens and really drawing how things can never be so set in stone.
I also don't think emphasising "his" in the third line really helps along with the line; it flows better without the italics. But I love the emphasis on the next line, it really lets the idea drift off. I was expecting punctuation at the end of that line though a the next is a little separate, somewhat juxtaposed, but it has an intersting melody about it without the punctuation too, so this is one of those rare cases where it would work either way.
7/25/2012 c14 103BlueEyes444
Ohmygoshhhhhhhh, this was seriously perfect! :D Beautiful, beautiful, and more beautiful. :D I loved it so much! :D
103BlueEyes444Ohmygoshhhhhhhh, this was seriously perfect! :D Beautiful, beautiful, and more beautiful. :D I loved it so much! :D
7/25/2012 c1 252reminiscent-afterthought
I wish I saw this challenge.
Anyway, I love how it's written. The repetition of "he is Voldermort" really drives home his character, interestingly enough. The lack of deep emotion, of the capacity of love and remorse and all those complicated things that make "humanity".
The only thing I don't like is the length of the last line. The extra descriptors seem somewhat unnecessary. I think you could have written it as [And so he leaves the weak orphan behind.] - and it would have had a stronger impact. Nitpicky thing though.
252reminiscent-afterthoughtI wish I saw this challenge.
Anyway, I love how it's written. The repetition of "he is Voldermort" really drives home his character, interestingly enough. The lack of deep emotion, of the capacity of love and remorse and all those complicated things that make "humanity".
The only thing I don't like is the length of the last line. The extra descriptors seem somewhat unnecessary. I think you could have written it as [And so he leaves the weak orphan behind.] - and it would have had a stronger impact. Nitpicky thing though.
7/2/2012 c3 10Caveat Lector 52
I wasn't sure what to think of this one at first, but after reading it again with the prompt in mind, it started to makes a strange sort of sense, and said quite a lot about the characters.
10Caveat Lector 52I wasn't sure what to think of this one at first, but after reading it again with the prompt in mind, it started to makes a strange sort of sense, and said quite a lot about the characters.
6/28/2012 c4 85autumn midnights
This is excellent! Personally, I could never write anything this short and still manage to get the point across (in 100-200 words, yes, but not 30). But you've done it quite well; I can really see what you're doing here. I don't think I've read Charlitrix before, actually, but the idea is intriguing. I love your description of Bellatrix as beautiful but deadly, because that does seem to be very true. I think you describe her quite well, and really show her personality and appearance through Charlie's eyes. I like the slight mention of how they're on opposite sides in the line 'in opposition, this time', because that's obviously a key factor in every fanfiction with one Dark character and one Light one. Overall, this was a really good drabble, nice job!
85autumn midnightsThis is excellent! Personally, I could never write anything this short and still manage to get the point across (in 100-200 words, yes, but not 30). But you've done it quite well; I can really see what you're doing here. I don't think I've read Charlitrix before, actually, but the idea is intriguing. I love your description of Bellatrix as beautiful but deadly, because that does seem to be very true. I think you describe her quite well, and really show her personality and appearance through Charlie's eyes. I like the slight mention of how they're on opposite sides in the line 'in opposition, this time', because that's obviously a key factor in every fanfiction with one Dark character and one Light one. Overall, this was a really good drabble, nice job!