for A Hidden World3/9 c12 
3SnowyDawn17
I like the idea here. - this kinda story is a nic change from what i usually read/write...
3SnowyDawn17I like the idea here. - this kinda story is a nic change from what i usually read/write...
3/3 c12 2impmon fan girl
I have a suggestion for you, maybe you could write a sequel to this story where Danny and Dani go to Hogwarts.
2impmon fan girlI have a suggestion for you, maybe you could write a sequel to this story where Danny and Dani go to Hogwarts.
6/12/2012 c5 Georuler
From what I have seen, you have fallen into the perilous hole of just describing without any great detail. There are few descriptions of emotions, scenery, or anything other than plot expositions. Your spelling, and grammar are somewhat good. What I suggest is to write your chapters as they are and then read over them again. As you do so, go into more detail in order to convey and explain them better.
From what I have seen, you have fallen into the perilous hole of just describing without any great detail. There are few descriptions of emotions, scenery, or anything other than plot expositions. Your spelling, and grammar are somewhat good. What I suggest is to write your chapters as they are and then read over them again. As you do so, go into more detail in order to convey and explain them better.
3/3/2012 c5 8RaeSoul
I just started reading this story, and so far I like it. A little fast paced, but still okay.
As for when Dani's age, she is 12, not 7.
but so far so good, (still reading though)
Rae
8RaeSoulI just started reading this story, and so far I like it. A little fast paced, but still okay.
As for when Dani's age, she is 12, not 7.
but so far so good, (still reading though)
Rae
2/21/2012 c12 2Zii Raevyn
If your soul feed on review, does that me it's a parasite?
Thanks for posting the chapter, it was very satisfying ^.^
2Zii RaevynIf your soul feed on review, does that me it's a parasite?
Thanks for posting the chapter, it was very satisfying ^.^
2/20/2012 c12 5Seven of Clubs
Hmm. More like The Chosen One should be put in quotations, so it works out either way. XD
5Seven of ClubsHmm. More like The Chosen One should be put in quotations, so it works out either way. XD
2/20/2012 c12 Sakurayuuki19
hey waz up
can u write more of this story plz? if u can
i love harry potter and danny phantom
i hope i can read more of ur stories
ttyl
-yuuki kuran
queen of the night
hey waz up
can u write more of this story plz? if u can
i love harry potter and danny phantom
i hope i can read more of ur stories
ttyl
-yuuki kuran
queen of the night
2/20/2012 c12 SmileyFace
Well as a plot twist you have have Danny and dani get. Avid somehow and be sent off to hog warts, which would be like a whole other story arc. Meh, it's cliche, I know, but anything to make this fic longer!
Well as a plot twist you have have Danny and dani get. Avid somehow and be sent off to hog warts, which would be like a whole other story arc. Meh, it's cliche, I know, but anything to make this fic longer!