for Inconvenience2/19/2011 c3 
4JadedxEyes
Though short chapters are great for keeping readers interested, it wouldn't hurt if they were a little bit longer! Just a bit more description, if possible. Other than that, I really like your writing style, showing the point of view for each character. I think you really get their personalities spot-on:)
4JadedxEyesThough short chapters are great for keeping readers interested, it wouldn't hurt if they were a little bit longer! Just a bit more description, if possible. Other than that, I really like your writing style, showing the point of view for each character. I think you really get their personalities spot-on:)
2/16/2011 c2 JadedxEyes
Hey, I don't think you're bad at this at all! I know it's hard for a story to gain popularity, but keep going with it. You've got a good storyline and a blunt writing style. Don't give up!
Hey, I don't think you're bad at this at all! I know it's hard for a story to gain popularity, but keep going with it. You've got a good storyline and a blunt writing style. Don't give up!