for The menace5/4 c8 soupydoo1
Ugh! but a very good job. Read most of it, skipped some, and went for the ending. Because to me Jasper is so dirty, rotten, a scoundrel if there ever was one. I find the story sickening for me. But as I said very well-written.
I was not raised to read about such things in such lingering detail. A very sad tale of Jasper, gone too wrong, even though I like looking at different characterizations of Jasper.
Oops! Just noticed I put this at the end of Chapter 8 and meant to put it at the end of Chapter 9.
Ugh! but a very good job. Read most of it, skipped some, and went for the ending. Because to me Jasper is so dirty, rotten, a scoundrel if there ever was one. I find the story sickening for me. But as I said very well-written.
I was not raised to read about such things in such lingering detail. A very sad tale of Jasper, gone too wrong, even though I like looking at different characterizations of Jasper.
Oops! Just noticed I put this at the end of Chapter 8 and meant to put it at the end of Chapter 9.
4/30 c9 Guest
Please continue this
Please continue this
4/12 c9 
4kirifox
Oh Jasper, your strategic mind may have just saved the day. Bella is going to look to your for her salvation.
Will you be updating any time soon? This is an awesome story and I can't wait to see where you will take it next!
4kirifoxOh Jasper, your strategic mind may have just saved the day. Bella is going to look to your for her salvation.
Will you be updating any time soon? This is an awesome story and I can't wait to see where you will take it next!
2/28 c9 Belatrix233
hi! i'm wondering if you'll finish this story, since it's been a full year of your last posting of a new chapter? i hope you will 'cause i really love the first 9 chapters so far and would like to see it finished!
hi! i'm wondering if you'll finish this story, since it's been a full year of your last posting of a new chapter? i hope you will 'cause i really love the first 9 chapters so far and would like to see it finished!
2/13 c9 8GeezerWench
Gee (says I), I wonder what Bella will decide?
What a manipulator he is!
Sure hope you update this one of these days.
8GeezerWenchGee (says I), I wonder what Bella will decide?
What a manipulator he is!
Sure hope you update this one of these days.
2/13 c8 GeezerWench
I've been enjoying Jasper taking a kinder view toward Bella.
And his plans for the future.
Interesting idea you have here about the maker's mark ans how an older vampire is needed to break the bond between a sire and his progeny.
I've been enjoying Jasper taking a kinder view toward Bella.
And his plans for the future.
Interesting idea you have here about the maker's mark ans how an older vampire is needed to break the bond between a sire and his progeny.
2/13 c6 GeezerWench
what do I think of Esme? Hell, she should have stayed with Marcus! LOL
No, don't think Jasper has "defeated" Bella yet. I expect he'll be whipped in no time. Perhaps he already is. He just doesn't know it yet.
what do I think of Esme? Hell, she should have stayed with Marcus! LOL
No, don't think Jasper has "defeated" Bella yet. I expect he'll be whipped in no time. Perhaps he already is. He just doesn't know it yet.
2/13 c3 GeezerWench
Jasper was quite a bastard back in the "good ol' days." Makes you wonder why he ever left Maria, since he enjoyed it so much.
Jasper was quite a bastard back in the "good ol' days." Makes you wonder why he ever left Maria, since he enjoyed it so much.
2/13 c2 GeezerWench
I liked how Jasper pointed Bella's truck back into town to make it look like she had dropped him off and was on her way back to town.
I also liked how he wouldn't let go of Bella to deal with Alice. And he felt deception from her and wouldn't go with her. He didn't fall for her shit.
:)
I liked how Jasper pointed Bella's truck back into town to make it look like she had dropped him off and was on her way back to town.
I also liked how he wouldn't let go of Bella to deal with Alice. And he felt deception from her and wouldn't go with her. He didn't fall for her shit.
:)
2/13 c1 GeezerWench
Been a long time since you updated, Hon. Hope you get inspired again.
I like the way this starts. Jasper blaming Bella for the problems with the family - making Edward run off and all that stuff.
I think the dialog is just a little stiff, but I know that can be hard to write.
Eager to see where this goes and what he does to her.
Been a long time since you updated, Hon. Hope you get inspired again.
I like the way this starts. Jasper blaming Bella for the problems with the family - making Edward run off and all that stuff.
I think the dialog is just a little stiff, but I know that can be hard to write.
Eager to see where this goes and what he does to her.
1/19 c9 dettyfan
Fantastic story, love B/J pairing, and a dark Major Whitlock Jasper. Caius is also a favourite. I hope you will update soon your story, as is well written and the AU created is very compelling and imaginative. Thank you.
Fantastic story, love B/J pairing, and a dark Major Whitlock Jasper. Caius is also a favourite. I hope you will update soon your story, as is well written and the AU created is very compelling and imaginative. Thank you.
1/6 c9 1darkmoonsfalcon
Man do I love a manipulative Jasper... lol... I would so pick him even without the threat of death looming like the sword of Damacles. But then I like my men wicked.. grin... please please please continue this sooon!
1darkmoonsfalconMan do I love a manipulative Jasper... lol... I would so pick him even without the threat of death looming like the sword of Damacles. But then I like my men wicked.. grin... please please please continue this sooon!