9/23/2012 c1 31TEKNAM
Very interesting start.

I have to wonder, though, if you got Zell's first name from a certain knuckle brawler from Final Fantasy VIII? ;)

In any case, very nicely done. No spelling errors to be seen, good grammar... my only problem with this is the descriptive quality. There's more you could have done with the spar between Yoruichi, Tifa and Zell by spacing the paragraphs out and using more descriptions. You could have fleshed it out much farther and gotten more of a kick-ass fight out of it, but it's your story. I respect the way you write. _

Very nice! _ 12.5/10 for now... I'm quite certain that will be raising soon enough. _

2/6/2011 c1 41yugioh5d
Another awesome first chapter for a new story. I really like how you write your stories as they are very well done. I can hardly wait to read the next chapter to this story and your Tekken Dead or Alove story as they are very entertaining . As for your request for my hero of time story i will write you into it in a later chapter. I can hardly wait to see what sort of story will write for your Green Lantern Totally spies crossover. Do have plans for my Hero of Time story but i wanted to know if i should write sam Clover and Alex's mom Carmen into my story as by the fourth chapter it would be three years since Alex to Hyrule which by that time she and Princess Zelda have gotten married and will mark the first appearance of Ganondorf into the story. Please let me know what you think and good luck with this story and your others your biggest fan Yugioh5d