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12cindella204
Interesting perspective on Clove, but it totally makes sense.
-cindella204
12cindella204Interesting perspective on Clove, but it totally makes sense.
-cindella204
7/10/2011 c1 63gethsemane342
Very haunting and insightful view of Clove. You really described this well and the parentheses made an excellent contrast. I also liked the connections with Cato and how the training works.
Concrit: 2 really small things I spotted. First one is that surely it would make more sense for Clove and Cato to be sent at 18 rather than 16? Older the tribute, the higher the chance of success.
Other thing is "she wishes she had never come into this damn Games" should be "these damn Games".
Like I said, both are very, very minor points and you know you've done well if those are the only things that can be improved on in a fic ;)
Keep on writing,
Geth
63gethsemane342Very haunting and insightful view of Clove. You really described this well and the parentheses made an excellent contrast. I also liked the connections with Cato and how the training works.
Concrit: 2 really small things I spotted. First one is that surely it would make more sense for Clove and Cato to be sent at 18 rather than 16? Older the tribute, the higher the chance of success.
Other thing is "she wishes she had never come into this damn Games" should be "these damn Games".
Like I said, both are very, very minor points and you know you've done well if those are the only things that can be improved on in a fic ;)
Keep on writing,
Geth
4/22/2011 c1 3the pen my sword
oh my god that was amazing truly utterly amazing. I loved how you had the little pernthasis I am a terrible speller so that is probably wrong but i love the whole format and it was just written amazing great job!
3the pen my swordoh my god that was amazing truly utterly amazing. I loved how you had the little pernthasis I am a terrible speller so that is probably wrong but i love the whole format and it was just written amazing great job!
4/3/2011 c1 52RipredtheGnawer
Ahh.
That's a cry of sympathy.
I never thought of Clove this way before. Wonderful job, congratulations on finally writing for Starvation, and nicely done for third! I've never gotten a mention.
Soooooooooo good, I feel really sad now, it was so profound.
52RipredtheGnawerAhh.
That's a cry of sympathy.
I never thought of Clove this way before. Wonderful job, congratulations on finally writing for Starvation, and nicely done for third! I've never gotten a mention.
Soooooooooo good, I feel really sad now, it was so profound.
4/1/2011 c1 22koalakoala
I generally don't lke Clove, or Cato/Clove, but this was lovely. I like how she isn't so bloodthirsty and cruel as some other fics paint Careers into being. Her characteration was refreshingly realistic.
The formatting is also great, it worked really well with your interpretation of the prompt.
22koalakoalaI generally don't lke Clove, or Cato/Clove, but this was lovely. I like how she isn't so bloodthirsty and cruel as some other fics paint Careers into being. Her characteration was refreshingly realistic.
The formatting is also great, it worked really well with your interpretation of the prompt.
3/31/2011 c1 30Penelope Wendy Bing
Ooh, good job. I really liked it. It was really well executed! I think I'm going to fave it.
Keep writing for the Starvation prompts!
-P.W. Bing
30Penelope Wendy BingOoh, good job. I really liked it. It was really well executed! I think I'm going to fave it.
Keep writing for the Starvation prompts!
-P.W. Bing
3/29/2011 c1 39Lavender Flame
(Sorry for taking so long to review, I'm behind on the entries.)
Ah... interesting. I love reading about Clove, and you developed her past well. I like how you give us more information about a character that we know so little about. This is the first time I've seen her written as the daughter of a victor/victors. Fascinating.
I also very much enjoyed your formatting, with the little one-line parentheses. It was an interesting touch.
Also, I loved the detail. All of the little things that you added-her first word, etc. It really added to the piece.
Overall, this was very interesting. I hope you had fun writing it and I'm so glad you entered. Nice work.
39Lavender Flame(Sorry for taking so long to review, I'm behind on the entries.)
Ah... interesting. I love reading about Clove, and you developed her past well. I like how you give us more information about a character that we know so little about. This is the first time I've seen her written as the daughter of a victor/victors. Fascinating.
I also very much enjoyed your formatting, with the little one-line parentheses. It was an interesting touch.
Also, I loved the detail. All of the little things that you added-her first word, etc. It really added to the piece.
Overall, this was very interesting. I hope you had fun writing it and I'm so glad you entered. Nice work.
3/7/2011 c1 42Kate of Carlay
I really like Clove as a character and you've added some nice depth to her. Styling was a great way of having that undertone of almost ...I'm not sure how to describe it.
Great Work!
Nice piece fpr the competition
KATE
42Kate of CarlayI really like Clove as a character and you've added some nice depth to her. Styling was a great way of having that undertone of almost ...I'm not sure how to describe it.
Great Work!
Nice piece fpr the competition
KATE
3/6/2011 c1 3ForeverFoxface
Just felt that I needed to review because something about this story stirred a deep feeling inside of me that I really don't ever feel, and that's saying something.
I always believed that Clove was actually someone - not just a Career whose bloodlust outweighed her judgment and good sense. I believe you captured her very essence perfectly here, and I agree that her character is very interesting.
Thank you so much for writing this excellent fic. :) Please write more!
3ForeverFoxfaceJust felt that I needed to review because something about this story stirred a deep feeling inside of me that I really don't ever feel, and that's saying something.
I always believed that Clove was actually someone - not just a Career whose bloodlust outweighed her judgment and good sense. I believe you captured her very essence perfectly here, and I agree that her character is very interesting.
Thank you so much for writing this excellent fic. :) Please write more!
3/3/2011 c1 20misticalcookie
You made her human! Thanks! I always hate how the Careers are shown as merciless killers, because they have feelings too.
Aside from some spelling/grammar errors, this was "epic"
20misticalcookieYou made her human! Thanks! I always hate how the Careers are shown as merciless killers, because they have feelings too.
Aside from some spelling/grammar errors, this was "epic"
3/3/2011 c1 6Azlira
I am very impressed at what you write "pretty quickly"... xD this was so sad.. you managed to make me feel so terrible for clove, which I would have thought was difficult, considering what kind of character she is in the book.. =/ nice job!
6AzliraI am very impressed at what you write "pretty quickly"... xD this was so sad.. you managed to make me feel so terrible for clove, which I would have thought was difficult, considering what kind of character she is in the book.. =/ nice job!
3/3/2011 c1 3EStrunk
Dismal. Wow. I guess you are going for some sympathy for Clove and I must say - you got it. I like how you start her out arrogant, but eventually her humanity is crushed. Scary.
3EStrunkDismal. Wow. I guess you are going for some sympathy for Clove and I must say - you got it. I like how you start her out arrogant, but eventually her humanity is crushed. Scary.
3/3/2011 c1 S e
I liked the way that you wrote that piece. Although it was a little sad, it is a little happier for her rather than in the book. I like how it gives her a chance to tell her story( of course that you came up with) and why she didn't fight back as hard as she could.( and she eventually got what she wanted.
I liked the way that you wrote that piece. Although it was a little sad, it is a little happier for her rather than in the book. I like how it gives her a chance to tell her story( of course that you came up with) and why she didn't fight back as hard as she could.( and she eventually got what she wanted.