for Rockman Days: Side Days8/31/2011 c1 lixiaofossil
Babies? She's carrying twins? Please don't make her ends up like Padmé Amidala.
Babies? She's carrying twins? Please don't make her ends up like Padmé Amidala.
8/15/2011 c3 
11Iron-Mantis
Slice of life and training scenes were great, also like how you handle the girl bit. PS when you write that villain chap (Base on Shriek, that batman beyond villain) have him stupidly talk smack on kazuki dad, and learn the HARD way why he ought not to have done that.
11Iron-MantisSlice of life and training scenes were great, also like how you handle the girl bit. PS when you write that villain chap (Base on Shriek, that batman beyond villain) have him stupidly talk smack on kazuki dad, and learn the HARD way why he ought not to have done that.
8/15/2011 c3 7snake screamer
Good explaination of the hasuma family tree and how Kazuki overcame the corruptive power of genki and controls it now is Awesome!
7snake screamerGood explaination of the hasuma family tree and how Kazuki overcame the corruptive power of genki and controls it now is Awesome!
8/12/2011 c3 198Kamen Rider Chrome
OK, my review for this chap. Overall it's good but lemme get into detail. Also, I know I helped out with some of the scenes so I'll skip those parts.
OK, Kazuki has started to become part of the family and is learning their style. We see the emergence of Kazuki's Genki and he's getting GenJyuKen training from Ryuji.
Anyway, aside from the badass training scene I'd like to comment on the slice of life thing. What you can do is to have the girls tell their classmates but there could be a few girls who won't give up and suggest maybe Kazuki take them as lovers because he might not be able to have much fun with a pregnant Kotonoha. He either declines or loses his temper. I'll leave that to you to decide.
Anyway, I suggest that Kazuki should do battle with his inner GenJyuKen self to completely conquer it and maybe Kazuki makes up his own style from Dragon-Ken. Oh wait, he already is. The Mythical Beast Seiryuu Fist.
Also, a suggestion is that some stuck-up rich boy at the academy challenges Kazuki because of his growing popularity. Remember that chapter of Reborn, the first one, with that kendo guy? Uber pwnage but without someone losing their pants.
Maybe also Kazuki can talk about how important his dad was in his life. Some emotional flashbacks would be a nice touch too.
Overall details, grammar and spelling are good, but only coz you got me as a beta. I don't wanna pat myself in the back but aren't you lucky you have me.
Now, how would GenJyuKen affect his Rockman form when he returns him. Would he have a new form like...Rockman Seiryuu Gold?
Finally, I'd like to say I look forward to a future chapter of any of your works.
198Kamen Rider ChromeOK, my review for this chap. Overall it's good but lemme get into detail. Also, I know I helped out with some of the scenes so I'll skip those parts.
OK, Kazuki has started to become part of the family and is learning their style. We see the emergence of Kazuki's Genki and he's getting GenJyuKen training from Ryuji.
Anyway, aside from the badass training scene I'd like to comment on the slice of life thing. What you can do is to have the girls tell their classmates but there could be a few girls who won't give up and suggest maybe Kazuki take them as lovers because he might not be able to have much fun with a pregnant Kotonoha. He either declines or loses his temper. I'll leave that to you to decide.
Anyway, I suggest that Kazuki should do battle with his inner GenJyuKen self to completely conquer it and maybe Kazuki makes up his own style from Dragon-Ken. Oh wait, he already is. The Mythical Beast Seiryuu Fist.
Also, a suggestion is that some stuck-up rich boy at the academy challenges Kazuki because of his growing popularity. Remember that chapter of Reborn, the first one, with that kendo guy? Uber pwnage but without someone losing their pants.
Maybe also Kazuki can talk about how important his dad was in his life. Some emotional flashbacks would be a nice touch too.
Overall details, grammar and spelling are good, but only coz you got me as a beta. I don't wanna pat myself in the back but aren't you lucky you have me.
Now, how would GenJyuKen affect his Rockman form when he returns him. Would he have a new form like...Rockman Seiryuu Gold?
Finally, I'd like to say I look forward to a future chapter of any of your works.
7/30/2011 c2 Kamen Rider Chrome
The first two chapters. The story is a bit slow but there's some action. We get to see Kazuki and Kotonoha get lovey-dovey and Kazuki ends up in a comedic harem anime situation where he's the only guy in his entire class. Can't wait for what hijinks will happen. Ryuki is gonna act like a great parental figure for the young hero and Kazuki faces the villains of this world as the Blue Dragon. Also, Emiko (one of my faves) designs Kazuki's new costume. This spinoff is starting out nicely. You've introduced the base elements to work on and I hope it becomes as good as the original Rockman Days series.
And that is all I have to say. There isn't anymore...until later.
Rating 8/10...it's not perfect but above average. There's stuff like details and stuff you need to work on, but I can follow with the plot.
The first two chapters. The story is a bit slow but there's some action. We get to see Kazuki and Kotonoha get lovey-dovey and Kazuki ends up in a comedic harem anime situation where he's the only guy in his entire class. Can't wait for what hijinks will happen. Ryuki is gonna act like a great parental figure for the young hero and Kazuki faces the villains of this world as the Blue Dragon. Also, Emiko (one of my faves) designs Kazuki's new costume. This spinoff is starting out nicely. You've introduced the base elements to work on and I hope it becomes as good as the original Rockman Days series.
And that is all I have to say. There isn't anymore...until later.
Rating 8/10...it's not perfect but above average. There's stuff like details and stuff you need to work on, but I can follow with the plot.
3/6/2011 c1 5milordo-z 2.0
AWESOME! i love it! so tell me how will kazuki meet someone who last name is Asia?
5milordo-z 2.0AWESOME! i love it! so tell me how will kazuki meet someone who last name is Asia?