for In my mind10/31/2012 c10 
12ReadingRaven019
great chapter. Can't wait to see what happens next. I wish this one was longer. update soon!
12ReadingRaven019great chapter. Can't wait to see what happens next. I wish this one was longer. update soon!
10/29/2012 c9 1narniadreamer1
*gasp* a chapter now way! lol yes im still reading its to good to give up even waiting so long its worth it :) keep it up :)
1narniadreamer1*gasp* a chapter now way! lol yes im still reading its to good to give up even waiting so long its worth it :) keep it up :)
10/28/2012 c9 12ReadingRaven019
Great chapter. Glad Merlin is safe and sound now. I can't wait for the next chapter. update soon please!
12ReadingRaven019Great chapter. Glad Merlin is safe and sound now. I can't wait for the next chapter. update soon please!
8/29/2012 c8 brinaynay
cliffhangers are the worst best thing ever gotta love to hate em cant wait for more ill be waiting :)
cliffhangers are the worst best thing ever gotta love to hate em cant wait for more ill be waiting :)
8/15/2012 c8 narniadreamer1
i love it! very intresting update soon?
i love it! very intresting update soon?
8/15/2012 c8 Vanessa
wat wait? tats it? loves it though.
wat wait? tats it? loves it though.
8/15/2012 c8 ReadingRaven019
wow it's been a while. I hope you update sooner this time. I love this story and have missed it. Update soon pretty please!
wow it's been a while. I hope you update sooner this time. I love this story and have missed it. Update soon pretty please!
7/27/2012 c7 8StrangelyPenned
I'd be quite interested to see where this goes, to be honest. I mean, it's a great plot line and everything.
There's just a few things - using double quotation marks (" ") instead of the singular ones (' ') gives the whole story a more professional look. Always make sure you put a full-stop at the end of the sentences, because again, it gives the story a better feel.
Pertaining to your actual writing, I think you write brilliantly. (I like how you don't put thoughts in ' ' by the way.) However, perhaps a wider use of words - think about synonyms if you are continually using one word, because a small change can make a big difference.
Also, this is to do with your writing style - I think you should focus a lot on expanding on the detail, writing longer chapter, slowing the story a little. It's brilliant, I love it and I can't wait for the next chapter - however it could be moving a little fast.
Please tell me if I sound too criticising - I just want to help. I love your story though, I can't wait for an update!
8StrangelyPennedI'd be quite interested to see where this goes, to be honest. I mean, it's a great plot line and everything.
There's just a few things - using double quotation marks (" ") instead of the singular ones (' ') gives the whole story a more professional look. Always make sure you put a full-stop at the end of the sentences, because again, it gives the story a better feel.
Pertaining to your actual writing, I think you write brilliantly. (I like how you don't put thoughts in ' ' by the way.) However, perhaps a wider use of words - think about synonyms if you are continually using one word, because a small change can make a big difference.
Also, this is to do with your writing style - I think you should focus a lot on expanding on the detail, writing longer chapter, slowing the story a little. It's brilliant, I love it and I can't wait for the next chapter - however it could be moving a little fast.
Please tell me if I sound too criticising - I just want to help. I love your story though, I can't wait for an update!
5/21/2012 c7 12ReadingRaven019
AHHH! You can't leave it there! Please update soon! I can't wait to see how he gets out of this!
12ReadingRaven019AHHH! You can't leave it there! Please update soon! I can't wait to see how he gets out of this!
5/20/2012 c7 2readernurse
ya think, Arthur? This is really not looking good for them...Please tell me they come back if Gwaine kills Catherine...they need to come back.
Great story, very well written. Do you have a medical background? I recognize a lot of the medical mumbo-jumbo from my pharmacology class. :) please update soon!
2readernurseya think, Arthur? This is really not looking good for them...Please tell me they come back if Gwaine kills Catherine...they need to come back.
Great story, very well written. Do you have a medical background? I recognize a lot of the medical mumbo-jumbo from my pharmacology class. :) please update soon!
5/14/2012 c6 12ReadingRaven019
Great chapter. I'm glad Gwaine didn't get poisoned and that he's there at all. Please update soon. I can't wait to see what happens next!
12ReadingRaven019Great chapter. I'm glad Gwaine didn't get poisoned and that he's there at all. Please update soon. I can't wait to see what happens next!
5/14/2012 c6 11Magic Cabbage
I did not see that coming.
Well I totally guessed that she put something in Gwaine's drink, but I thought she was sending him to Merlin too. Didn't think she had evil intentions. Huh.
Great chapter!
11Magic CabbageI did not see that coming.
Well I totally guessed that she put something in Gwaine's drink, but I thought she was sending him to Merlin too. Didn't think she had evil intentions. Huh.
Great chapter!