10/28/2011 c1 Dantelover051386
That was just depressing as ** all. I mean it was well wrote, but tragic. its obvious that edward at some point left jazz and i can see the effect it must have had on jazz, but seriously. if jazz had changed so much that he turned into a shadow of a cruel man than he doesnt deserve edward. I mean we all make our mistakes in life and if you are to angry and let yourself change and become a bitter person then thats on you. I know and from my own personally experience that breakups are hard. Ive been left behind, ive even been someones dirty secret because my love was to scared to come out of the closet and i get those reasons. coming out of the cloest is personal and theres a tremendous amount of fear envolved. like how your family or friends will react. Ive even been cheated on. it truly hurts. so before anyone says i dont understand. I do. maybe more than some. What im sayin is if you let yourself become consummed by that breakup or that person leaving you...you become someone your not. bitter and angry and mad at the world and everyone out there and you blame only one person. the person that left you. yes, edward made the worlds biggest mistake and that is something that he will have to live with for the rest of his life. something that he will have to come to terms with himself. but jazz on the other hand seems to have let edward leaving him change him. even edward didnt really recognize him. a shell of the man he once was and yes, edward will more than likely blame himself for that, but jazz has to take responsibility for that as well. jazz wouldnt even let edward say one word. not even a im sorry. even if jazz would not accept it, he let his anger and bitterness get in the way and inturn rejected edward. not to mention it would seem that peter or who ever the ** he is has turned jazz into his little submissive **. i mean he wouldnt really let edward speak to jazz at all. like it was controling him. peter was acting more controling than protective especially given how jazz looked. eyes dull, thin face...ect. i have a feelin peter is abusive and controling. i mean just given jazz and how he looked didnt scream ive moved on and im blissfully happy. did it. he looked small, thin, dull eyes...that didnt scream joy and happiness to me.

well, like i said it was well wrote, but depressing. I know all to well that in reality fate can be a nasty **. i know for she handed me a nasty lot in life with love. thus i know HEA'S are so very rare in reality. with my characters i make sure they have there HEA, but i always after a spot of trouble or two or three. at least in fiction our characters can live and be happy.

6/23/2011 c1 sleepallday
Hmm, very interesting beginning to a story, I would love to read more:)

5/17/2011 c1 10kgq
OK hear it goes loved it never cried so hard think I did the ugly cry God damn it I want the rest of this story I want to know what happened to make them this way I want to know what they do to make it right please continue love your boys this was an amazing little story

4/1/2011 c1 Raeya
Congratulations with your second place! Love your story. So lovely to hear you are planning to continue it. Can't wait to see what has happened and what will happen.