for Millennium Starlights, Stage On!
96/28/2011 c1 LadySunami
My first thought when I read the description was, "WTF?" My second was "H*ll yes!" This whole thing promises to be tons of fun!
As I said when I reviewed your other story though, Bakura needs a bit more snark. Part of the reason he's such a fun character is he's kinda a jerk. If you want him to be a jerk with a heart of gold, that's fine, but be sure not to forget the jerk part. Try to make him more annoyed about the whole Pegasus situation. It should be almost painful for him to be polite. Maybe he only bothers trying because of Ryou. I can imagine him getting really annoyed at the decor and Ryou saying, "Please try to be nice, Bakura. You don't want to make enemies your first day here, do you?"
My first thought when I read the description was, "WTF?" My second was "H*ll yes!" This whole thing promises to be tons of fun!
As I said when I reviewed your other story though, Bakura needs a bit more snark. Part of the reason he's such a fun character is he's kinda a jerk. If you want him to be a jerk with a heart of gold, that's fine, but be sure not to forget the jerk part. Try to make him more annoyed about the whole Pegasus situation. It should be almost painful for him to be polite. Maybe he only bothers trying because of Ryou. I can imagine him getting really annoyed at the decor and Ryou saying, "Please try to be nice, Bakura. You don't want to make enemies your first day here, do you?"