for Watch8/2/2012 c1 
4ksbg
I'm horrified, the poor butterfly :O...but the rest is amazing! good job. loved the "mummy" thing
4ksbgI'm horrified, the poor butterfly :O...but the rest is amazing! good job. loved the "mummy" thing
7/30/2012 c1 1Pink Schmetterling
Wow, that WAS very dark. Roger seems kind of like a normal but brooding little boy until the ending. I like Jack's characterization a lot...very much the nose-in-the-air, snooty kid. Funny that they grew up to be (what I imagine as) friends. Their friendship came from humble beginnings, I guess.
The ending was...wow. Really powerful. You can see how Roger grew up to be the person he was. It's scary seeing that from a little boy, and the way he "calmly steps on what remains of the butterfly" is incredibly disturbing. This story just has a dark, foreboding feel to it, even from the way the dialogue is italicized rather than in quotations. Stunning story...definitely going on my favorites.
1Pink SchmetterlingWow, that WAS very dark. Roger seems kind of like a normal but brooding little boy until the ending. I like Jack's characterization a lot...very much the nose-in-the-air, snooty kid. Funny that they grew up to be (what I imagine as) friends. Their friendship came from humble beginnings, I guess.
The ending was...wow. Really powerful. You can see how Roger grew up to be the person he was. It's scary seeing that from a little boy, and the way he "calmly steps on what remains of the butterfly" is incredibly disturbing. This story just has a dark, foreboding feel to it, even from the way the dialogue is italicized rather than in quotations. Stunning story...definitely going on my favorites.
6/22/2011 c1 26Lillith Aurora
Wow, this is dark. But it fits Roger, of course. I love how Roger seems like a normal little boy until the butterfly incident. Wonderful job.
26Lillith AuroraWow, this is dark. But it fits Roger, of course. I love how Roger seems like a normal little boy until the butterfly incident. Wonderful job.
6/22/2011 c1 21echoing noise
Really loved the power struggle here, and the way of presenting the dialouge as italics. The ending was... impressive. I wish I could stay more, but at the moment I sem completly unable to write a decent review. Good job, keep writing.
21echoing noiseReally loved the power struggle here, and the way of presenting the dialouge as italics. The ending was... impressive. I wish I could stay more, but at the moment I sem completly unable to write a decent review. Good job, keep writing.
5/9/2011 c1 lottie
i really like that, it seems exactly like what roger would have been like :3
i really like that, it seems exactly like what roger would have been like :3
5/6/2011 c1 36TASHAx
You know, I've never read LotF but I was in a physical theatre play of it.
Very well written, Lizzie, my lovely. Sinister in a very childlike way. I love the style of writing too, it fit the narrative very well.
Good work, you! ;)
36TASHAxYou know, I've never read LotF but I was in a physical theatre play of it.
Very well written, Lizzie, my lovely. Sinister in a very childlike way. I love the style of writing too, it fit the narrative very well.
Good work, you! ;)
5/1/2011 c1 toolazytologin59
woah...this story makes some sense. it was cool the way it was written. I get how Roger enjoyed killing the butterfly. like it! you should add more!
woah...this story makes some sense. it was cool the way it was written. I get how Roger enjoyed killing the butterfly. like it! you should add more!