5/30/2011 c1 15Michelle the Editor
That was an awesome fight, and I'm already getting an idea of Ibis's character, thank you! As I've said before, though, commas are your friends, and you need some. The lack thereof makes sentences confusing, for example, when the Zord first falls out of the sky, it's the one with the dazed brown eyes, not Ibis. Also, one cannot both be frantic and cool. Sometimes you're a little redundant as well. All in all, though, I love this!