for Black Amber4/3/2012 c18 
15pokemaster101
There's no way this story is complete, dude. (I call everyone dude.)
Keep it up, though! 8DDDDD
15pokemaster101There's no way this story is complete, dude. (I call everyone dude.)
Keep it up, though! 8DDDDD
9/2/2011 c19 FlameSpear
ok you have 3 choices.
1.Continue the story.
or 2.Stop going on with the story
or 3.Help me dominate the world with my cookies if you stop. :D *troll-face*
ok you have 3 choices.
1.Continue the story.
or 2.Stop going on with the story
or 3.Help me dominate the world with my cookies if you stop. :D *troll-face*
8/30/2011 c19 10Hey Its Melmel
You made a video? *gasped*
OMFG! XD
,
,
,
uh...I couldnt find the link.
Where is it? *desperate*
10Hey Its MelmelYou made a video? *gasped*
OMFG! XD
,
,
,
uh...I couldnt find the link.
Where is it? *desperate*
8/30/2011 c18 Hey Its Melmel
This is my favorite chapter eveer! XD
Until i could feel the tension between them. Damn!
I thought Light was gonna die.
Thanks God, he didnt.
Great Job. XD You've made me so tense. :3
This is my favorite chapter eveer! XD
Until i could feel the tension between them. Damn!
I thought Light was gonna die.
Thanks God, he didnt.
Great Job. XD You've made me so tense. :3
8/19/2011 c17 Hey Its Melmel
Sorry, i'm late! I was in my busy week. With try out and some ** like that. ;_;
Omygodd! Noo! Beyondd! X(
Dont!
Damn, Takeo! I HATE HIM!
At first i thought Beyond approved L's relationship with Light. ;_;
But, DAMN!
BEYOND! Let them be! They're happy! Dont listen to Takeo.
Dude, this chapter is sad. .
But i cant wait to read more. :D
Continuee!
Sorry, i'm late! I was in my busy week. With try out and some ** like that. ;_;
Omygodd! Noo! Beyondd! X(
Dont!
Damn, Takeo! I HATE HIM!
At first i thought Beyond approved L's relationship with Light. ;_;
But, DAMN!
BEYOND! Let them be! They're happy! Dont listen to Takeo.
Dude, this chapter is sad. .
But i cant wait to read more. :D
Continuee!
8/15/2011 c17 4Zexionienzo
oh hot damn. this is extreamly fantastical. i wasnt sure at first, cause i was confussed with the whole slave thigny, but it makes snese now because they're obviously not in the normal world of...death note. i dont know. but this is soooooooo good! i love it so much! please update soon!
4Zexionienzooh hot damn. this is extreamly fantastical. i wasnt sure at first, cause i was confussed with the whole slave thigny, but it makes snese now because they're obviously not in the normal world of...death note. i dont know. but this is soooooooo good! i love it so much! please update soon!
8/9/2011 c15 10Hey Its Melmel
Waaa...this should be rated M! That lemon scene was hot! It turned me on! Really. *hardcore!nosebleed*
Waw, L's a virgin? O_O I though he wasnt! XD *dang, kinky though* I thought Takeo has taken it. :\ Oh dang. i guess i was wrong. But i am happy! XD Light's his first! Yay! *dances*
When Light said "I don't know how, but I will. Even if kill me, just to see you get out of those gates will be good enough for me"
Holy sweet. Sounded sad. ;_; 'tears-leaking' statement! . Light will sacrifice everything to get L free. LIGHT! You're so..so...*burst into tears*
I cant wait to see the next! I knw Takeo's watching that 'sex' scene! Oh-ow. Light is in trouble. O_O
MORE! PLEASE!
10Hey Its MelmelWaaa...this should be rated M! That lemon scene was hot! It turned me on! Really. *hardcore!nosebleed*
Waw, L's a virgin? O_O I though he wasnt! XD *dang, kinky though* I thought Takeo has taken it. :\ Oh dang. i guess i was wrong. But i am happy! XD Light's his first! Yay! *dances*
When Light said "I don't know how, but I will. Even if kill me, just to see you get out of those gates will be good enough for me"
Holy sweet. Sounded sad. ;_; 'tears-leaking' statement! . Light will sacrifice everything to get L free. LIGHT! You're so..so...*burst into tears*
I cant wait to see the next! I knw Takeo's watching that 'sex' scene! Oh-ow. Light is in trouble. O_O
MORE! PLEASE!
8/1/2011 c14 Hey Its Melmel
AAA! FINALLY!XD
I LOVE Chapter 13-14! sO..AWAWAWAW! *fangirling*
So cute, especially when L saved Ligt from drowning into the water. touchy! touchy. *sniffles*
how the heck Light knw L's name? DANG GENIUS! XO *throwing pebbles at Light*
UPDATE! Need to see Light vs Takeo XD haghaghaghag!
AAA! FINALLY!XD
I LOVE Chapter 13-14! sO..AWAWAWAW! *fangirling*
So cute, especially when L saved Ligt from drowning into the water. touchy! touchy. *sniffles*
how the heck Light knw L's name? DANG GENIUS! XO *throwing pebbles at Light*
UPDATE! Need to see Light vs Takeo XD haghaghaghag!
7/27/2011 c14 1Veskus
Great! :3 I love this story because its so origional, please write more soon. -Psycho
1VeskusGreat! :3 I love this story because its so origional, please write more soon. -Psycho
7/11/2011 c12 10Hey Its Melmel
Light, so smart! You're so frickin Smart talking to a dog! *rofl*
SO LOVE THIS CHAPTER! XD this is adorable! Imagining Light talking to a dog is hilarious!
Dammit, Light failed to confess his feelings to L. :S Hhhahha, poor you, Light! Just keep talking to that dog. *laughs again*
More! More! More! :D
10Hey Its MelmelLight, so smart! You're so frickin Smart talking to a dog! *rofl*
SO LOVE THIS CHAPTER! XD this is adorable! Imagining Light talking to a dog is hilarious!
Dammit, Light failed to confess his feelings to L. :S Hhhahha, poor you, Light! Just keep talking to that dog. *laughs again*
More! More! More! :D
7/1/2011 c11 Hey Its Melmel
God, I love this story! XD So much!
FOr some odd reasons, i do enjoy seeing L being 'bullied' or some thing like that. *evil chuckles* (I'm evil. So what?)
Oh, Hyosuke is scared with Beyond?
Gahh, it's a mistake B wasn't there. Poor L. XD So vulnerable without his brother.
Everything is happening in the wrong time! XO
When L and Light together, Beyond warned Light not to get so close with L. Even though Light is harmless! And then, Hyosuke. Hyosuke is harmful. But Beyond wasnt around.
Rawr! Who need to be blamed? *dont mind me, please! XD *
Continue! :D Pliz! pliz! pliz!
God, I love this story! XD So much!
FOr some odd reasons, i do enjoy seeing L being 'bullied' or some thing like that. *evil chuckles* (I'm evil. So what?)
Oh, Hyosuke is scared with Beyond?
Gahh, it's a mistake B wasn't there. Poor L. XD So vulnerable without his brother.
Everything is happening in the wrong time! XO
When L and Light together, Beyond warned Light not to get so close with L. Even though Light is harmless! And then, Hyosuke. Hyosuke is harmful. But Beyond wasnt around.
Rawr! Who need to be blamed? *dont mind me, please! XD *
Continue! :D Pliz! pliz! pliz!
6/20/2011 c10 Hey Its Melmel
More! XD Amazing as ever!
Oh, Light. You're dead! If Takeo caught you. *i hope it wont*
*dramatically speechless cause i can't speak english well. :( actually, there're many things in my mind about this. but...i dont know how to write it! XD My english sucks ;_;*
So, pliz understand how much i adore this! XD
More! XD Amazing as ever!
Oh, Light. You're dead! If Takeo caught you. *i hope it wont*
*dramatically speechless cause i can't speak english well. :( actually, there're many things in my mind about this. but...i dont know how to write it! XD My english sucks ;_;*
So, pliz understand how much i adore this! XD
6/19/2011 c2 13xImperfectPerfectionistx
First ups, I freaking adore this story. But the slave thing bugs me. I mean, is it meant to be Canon to the actual slave trade? 'cause we didn't brutally whip our slaves and march them for hours 'cause people didn't want screwed beaten slaves, they wouldn't buy them. Also, when it was going down, the british tended to trade with like America and the likes, not themselves Haha. But, anyway, I love this and write more words please.
13xImperfectPerfectionistxFirst ups, I freaking adore this story. But the slave thing bugs me. I mean, is it meant to be Canon to the actual slave trade? 'cause we didn't brutally whip our slaves and march them for hours 'cause people didn't want screwed beaten slaves, they wouldn't buy them. Also, when it was going down, the british tended to trade with like America and the likes, not themselves Haha. But, anyway, I love this and write more words please.
6/14/2011 c9 10Hey Its Melmel
Omygod! L and Beyond. :o Poor them!
It was so sad...;_; I feel sorry for them.
C'mon L! I know you can survive! :D Smbdy will save you!
10Hey Its MelmelOmygod! L and Beyond. :o Poor them!
It was so sad...;_; I feel sorry for them.
C'mon L! I know you can survive! :D Smbdy will save you!