for Fallen Angel7/18/2011 c1 anon
Thank YOU! FINALLY, SOMEONE THAT KNOWS ALEX and can actually write a canon Alex story! It hasn't been done in years so thank YOU! He's my favourite character but has recently been butchered and made into things he clearly isn't and written extremely out of character but you not only gave us this IN canon piece but also to everything thing there is a season which I'll be reviewing next. I just wanted to applaud you on an ace job well done!
Thank YOU! FINALLY, SOMEONE THAT KNOWS ALEX and can actually write a canon Alex story! It hasn't been done in years so thank YOU! He's my favourite character but has recently been butchered and made into things he clearly isn't and written extremely out of character but you not only gave us this IN canon piece but also to everything thing there is a season which I'll be reviewing next. I just wanted to applaud you on an ace job well done!
7/10/2011 c1 
18SJlikeslists
"No one ever really dies at the Centre"
Except, it seems, when you don't want them to die. Grr . . . Anyway . . .
I didn't want it to go that way, but it makes perfect sense to me that if the PTB ever decided that such an action was a viable plan they would act on it too quickly for there to be much chance of getting any warning (where's Angelo when you need him!)
I was taken by surprise, saddened, angered, and frustrated all in the course of less than 300 words. That's impressive that you managed to evoke that slew of emotional responses with that length.
The staccato rhythm of the sentences also worked well for the mood of the piece.
18SJlikeslists"No one ever really dies at the Centre"
Except, it seems, when you don't want them to die. Grr . . . Anyway . . .
I didn't want it to go that way, but it makes perfect sense to me that if the PTB ever decided that such an action was a viable plan they would act on it too quickly for there to be much chance of getting any warning (where's Angelo when you need him!)
I was taken by surprise, saddened, angered, and frustrated all in the course of less than 300 words. That's impressive that you managed to evoke that slew of emotional responses with that length.
The staccato rhythm of the sentences also worked well for the mood of the piece.
6/21/2011 c1 Katie L. Garcia
My heart stopped and then broke. But you told the story in a beautiful way and showed us what Alex would REALLY do and I can respect that. Thanks and write more.
My heart stopped and then broke. But you told the story in a beautiful way and showed us what Alex would REALLY do and I can respect that. Thanks and write more.
6/17/2011 c1 AJ
Okay, so you and I haven't always gotten along, but this is really good and thankfully it isn't a mary sue, lol, I can't help it. I hate mary sues but you're right, I was harsh and while I don't like that Alex finished her, it is exactly what he would do. You pegged it right!
Alex wouldn't wait, and it's shameless review whoring to string a reader along for 13 poorly written chapters of MP in captivity when Alex would have killed MP immediately and unlike Lyle, Alex is NOT a rapist. Oh, and that whole satanic sacrifice thang has been done before and much, much better.
So, thanks for keeping it real and maybe we can be friends.
Okay, so you and I haven't always gotten along, but this is really good and thankfully it isn't a mary sue, lol, I can't help it. I hate mary sues but you're right, I was harsh and while I don't like that Alex finished her, it is exactly what he would do. You pegged it right!
Alex wouldn't wait, and it's shameless review whoring to string a reader along for 13 poorly written chapters of MP in captivity when Alex would have killed MP immediately and unlike Lyle, Alex is NOT a rapist. Oh, and that whole satanic sacrifice thang has been done before and much, much better.
So, thanks for keeping it real and maybe we can be friends.
6/17/2011 c1 Ben98
I'm back! Something very weird came to me and I had to tell you! The stupid trolls [twisted, megan, redfile #9, evie, Mr.X] all came on the scene about the same time? They did!
Has anyone else noticed? It makes me wonder if all of those trolls were created by a person who is writing? How sad?
Don't want to start nothing but those trolls haven't said a bad word about the story that was added to MP and is still being updated and that story began around the time they all came on the scene.
And there's plenty bad to say about that story. Alex is out of character, would have killed her immediately, he's not a rapist, it's out of canon, it's medically inaccurate and filled with grammatical errors! Sayin' man!
I'm back! Something very weird came to me and I had to tell you! The stupid trolls [twisted, megan, redfile #9, evie, Mr.X] all came on the scene about the same time? They did!
Has anyone else noticed? It makes me wonder if all of those trolls were created by a person who is writing? How sad?
Don't want to start nothing but those trolls haven't said a bad word about the story that was added to MP and is still being updated and that story began around the time they all came on the scene.
And there's plenty bad to say about that story. Alex is out of character, would have killed her immediately, he's not a rapist, it's out of canon, it's medically inaccurate and filled with grammatical errors! Sayin' man!
6/16/2011 c1 anonymous 2u
Oh, I love you! I love how dark and accurate this is, how clean and crisp the writing is. No typos. No nonsense. It's in character, and in canon. I love you!
Oh, I love you! I love how dark and accurate this is, how clean and crisp the writing is. No typos. No nonsense. It's in character, and in canon. I love you!
6/14/2011 c1 red file 9
Oh, your story is good, but too short. It's the best Alex vs. Jarod/MP fic EVER!
Oh, your story is good, but too short. It's the best Alex vs. Jarod/MP fic EVER!
6/11/2011 c1 Shane
This was brilliant! WOW! Thank you so much for keeping Alex in character and the story in canon, this is the best Alex fic EVER!
This was brilliant! WOW! Thank you so much for keeping Alex in character and the story in canon, this is the best Alex fic EVER!
6/11/2011 c1 Tabetha
Thank you so much for this!
Thank you so much for this!
6/8/2011 c1 Natalie
I don't like that she died but it is a very real possibility that she will be killed and I believe it would break Jarod. Your grammar, punctuation, the commas, all of it was great. I've been all over the internet today reading new updated stories and this is the best Alex fic there is, it's grammatically perfect and medically accurate, unlike the other one if you catch my drift.
I don't like that she died but it is a very real possibility that she will be killed and I believe it would break Jarod. Your grammar, punctuation, the commas, all of it was great. I've been all over the internet today reading new updated stories and this is the best Alex fic there is, it's grammatically perfect and medically accurate, unlike the other one if you catch my drift.
6/8/2011 c1 CuriosityKilledCat
First: thank you for continuing on despite the trolls; any idiot can write, but it takes a bigger person to continue writing when you are being personally attacked and it's obviously unrelated to your story, plot, etc. Second: I usually like a nice long read, but I was intrigued when I saw that this was about Alex, my favourite character. I'm so glad I clicked it and I'm very pleased with YOUR characterisations of Alex (yours are the best!)and while it ended tragically for the good guys ( I can only imagine the impact the loss will have on Sydney, Broots and Jarod's psychological health [and the ramifications for Sydney and Broots when Jarod is in the Centre and broken] but it will very difficult on all fronts.), it was still one of those stories that stick with a person forever. Thank you for sharing!
First: thank you for continuing on despite the trolls; any idiot can write, but it takes a bigger person to continue writing when you are being personally attacked and it's obviously unrelated to your story, plot, etc. Second: I usually like a nice long read, but I was intrigued when I saw that this was about Alex, my favourite character. I'm so glad I clicked it and I'm very pleased with YOUR characterisations of Alex (yours are the best!)and while it ended tragically for the good guys ( I can only imagine the impact the loss will have on Sydney, Broots and Jarod's psychological health [and the ramifications for Sydney and Broots when Jarod is in the Centre and broken] but it will very difficult on all fronts.), it was still one of those stories that stick with a person forever. Thank you for sharing!
6/7/2011 c1 Tonay Hamilton aka Muriel
Forgot my login info! (also forgot where my keys are, forgot to call my dad and didn't water the damn plants) but I had to tell you what an impression this story has made on me and my co-workers. You wrote Alex just as TP writers did, just as steve and craig intended: a sociopath murderer! That is what Alex is! This is canon, plausible, possible, and if Alex were to ever set out after Miss Parker and wasn't, by some miracle, saved, then yes, this would be the outcome. The trolls can piss off!
Forgot my login info! (also forgot where my keys are, forgot to call my dad and didn't water the damn plants) but I had to tell you what an impression this story has made on me and my co-workers. You wrote Alex just as TP writers did, just as steve and craig intended: a sociopath murderer! That is what Alex is! This is canon, plausible, possible, and if Alex were to ever set out after Miss Parker and wasn't, by some miracle, saved, then yes, this would be the outcome. The trolls can piss off!
6/7/2011 c1 Lori
This is very sad but very much in character so my verdict is.. Your story is awesome Phenyx!
The BEST stories always get the trolls, it's the same on every site. I think it's sour grapes, jealously because you're so much better...hold your head up and and be proud of what you've done. Everyone knows that Alex would kill Parker in a heartbeat, he even pulled the trigger and shot Mr. Parker and he wouldn't have waited to kill her, not a second time, not after Jarod had stopped him once. You gave us the real Alex. The trolls are retarded...they've both pulled this shit before!
Keep writing!
This is very sad but very much in character so my verdict is.. Your story is awesome Phenyx!
The BEST stories always get the trolls, it's the same on every site. I think it's sour grapes, jealously because you're so much better...hold your head up and and be proud of what you've done. Everyone knows that Alex would kill Parker in a heartbeat, he even pulled the trigger and shot Mr. Parker and he wouldn't have waited to kill her, not a second time, not after Jarod had stopped him once. You gave us the real Alex. The trolls are retarded...they've both pulled this shit before!
Keep writing!
6/7/2011 c1 Megan
mmm...I do't tink Alex would do that.
mmm...I do't tink Alex would do that.
6/7/2011 c1 twisted
This was very disappointing...what a waste of time...and Alex was out of character.
This was very disappointing...what a waste of time...and Alex was out of character.