for Chaotic Clarity12/17/2011 c1 cookiecuttercutie
i love this story! more please
i love this story! more please
11/26/2011 c4 
25Coka Cookie Cola
oh noes yami's still in the coma! :o and i'm deeply saddened that atem's feeling terribly depressed; he has letia though :p anyways, please continue the good work! I LOVE it so far! ^_^
25Coka Cookie Colaoh noes yami's still in the coma! :o and i'm deeply saddened that atem's feeling terribly depressed; he has letia though :p anyways, please continue the good work! I LOVE it so far! ^_^
10/27/2011 c4 11NJPickleFiend
Glad Letia's dad's doing ok, but now he's had a stroke? Man, he just can't get a break. Well, I understand how she feels.
Poor Atem. He's suffering so much... At least Letia's there for him. He needs the support. They both do.
Not much to say for this pairing... Hmmm... O_o
Yay! Jenna! I love Jenna. XD Heheheh, yeah you and Yugi BE lovey dovey... I'll bet Karin's filming you secretly anyway. XD N'aww, but I do love this pairing.
Omg, why do I have nothing to say this time...?
Loving the interactions between Kaiba and Mokuba, but it's sad he does do so much work and doesn't take time off...
Ooooh, fanservice. XD
Aaaaaaaand, gooooood job, Leena! Fainting like that... Figures... XD
Darkotter Of Odin's City is now one of my favorite of your reviewers... just for mentioning Leena's name... I do get agitated when people don't have more constructive things to say... It's like they only read parts with their favorite character or something... Meh, I'm venting...
Awesome chapter... WHY is my brain so lame right now? I'm sorry, I seriously can't think of anything else to say. _ But I did mention all the characters cuz I loves them all, so I'se happy.
Awesome job! Keep it coming! I want to see what happens with Yami and when the conflict comes in. D It's still very early in the story, but I'm anticipating something big!
HAPPY WRITING!
11NJPickleFiendGlad Letia's dad's doing ok, but now he's had a stroke? Man, he just can't get a break. Well, I understand how she feels.
Poor Atem. He's suffering so much... At least Letia's there for him. He needs the support. They both do.
Not much to say for this pairing... Hmmm... O_o
Yay! Jenna! I love Jenna. XD Heheheh, yeah you and Yugi BE lovey dovey... I'll bet Karin's filming you secretly anyway. XD N'aww, but I do love this pairing.
Omg, why do I have nothing to say this time...?
Loving the interactions between Kaiba and Mokuba, but it's sad he does do so much work and doesn't take time off...
Ooooh, fanservice. XD
Aaaaaaaand, gooooood job, Leena! Fainting like that... Figures... XD
Darkotter Of Odin's City is now one of my favorite of your reviewers... just for mentioning Leena's name... I do get agitated when people don't have more constructive things to say... It's like they only read parts with their favorite character or something... Meh, I'm venting...
Awesome chapter... WHY is my brain so lame right now? I'm sorry, I seriously can't think of anything else to say. _ But I did mention all the characters cuz I loves them all, so I'se happy.
Awesome job! Keep it coming! I want to see what happens with Yami and when the conflict comes in. D It's still very early in the story, but I'm anticipating something big!
HAPPY WRITING!
10/27/2011 c3 NJPickleFiend
I'm so sorry I haven't reviewed in like forever! I'm so lazy! I can't forgive myself for this but maybe I can make amends by finally reviewing...
I love how Ryou talks to Doris. I could imagine him doing that. I want to see a pic of Doris! You should draw Ryou dear and Doris the rabbit! 8D
Poor Ryou. He's so beloved by his family that they taunt him mercilessly. It's only cuz they luffs him verreh muchly.
I also want to see what Sabah looks like. Right now, I'm picturing Lois Smith as Aunt Meg from the 1996 film Twister. Only albino like.
Lol, silly Faye, he's not talking about the rabbit. He's talking about chu! I love how sweet and sensitive and loving Faye and Ryou are. They're very relaxing to read about, very calming on the mind, even when their world is doing back flips.
You used my line! 8D "It was the best of Yugi, it was the worst of Yugi..." I didn't think you were going to take me seriously when you asked, but I couldn't help but do a little dance like "That's my line, that's my line, lalalalalala!"
I love Karin's character. She provides much-needed comic relief. I guess one of the reasons WHY I like her so much is because I can relate to her so well... in the sporadic, crazy thoughts she tends to have. "Does this shot make his hair look like a sea urchin or a starfish?" Lol, poor Karin, your beloved photos, deleted! What ever will you do? Take some more! XD Be a rebel!
I really do get that family feel between Yugi and Karin. You've captured that quite beautifully. Actually makes me think of my own family.
Your description of Thistle's hair made me thirsty. Congratulations. Now I want a caramel mocha latte!
I could see Karin being a photojournalist, or maybe even just a photographer. She should be Tea and Yami's wedding photographer! XD If he ever wakes up. We all miss you, Yami, even us readers.
Heheheh, god, Leena, you're so out of shape! Maybe Mokuba can race you around the ship a few times and you'll be able to keep up. XD
N'awwww, Kaiba lovin'! Cherish it, Leena, this is probably about as public as it will get for now.
Heheheheh, love the sarcastic quips going back and forth. Leena and Seto are happy together, you can just tell. But it seems he's got something on his mind. Wonder what it is. Heheheheheheheh... 3
I just keep going "Awww!" every time there's some Kaiba-Mokuba-Leena interaction. They're already assimilating like a family. It's cute. She's got her own little place there with them.
Wow, I'm insanely jealous of the room. It sounds so pretty and luxurious and expensive. XD
Uh oh, Leena, looks like Seto's got some plans for you. 3 heheheheheheheh. Good luck. But he's being a gentleman. Leena, you don't have to worry. You're safe with Kaiba Boy. 3
Loved this chapter but I can't fave it more than once, even though I really really want to. T^T Can't wait for the next installments! Awesome job! Happy writing!
I'm so sorry I haven't reviewed in like forever! I'm so lazy! I can't forgive myself for this but maybe I can make amends by finally reviewing...
I love how Ryou talks to Doris. I could imagine him doing that. I want to see a pic of Doris! You should draw Ryou dear and Doris the rabbit! 8D
Poor Ryou. He's so beloved by his family that they taunt him mercilessly. It's only cuz they luffs him verreh muchly.
I also want to see what Sabah looks like. Right now, I'm picturing Lois Smith as Aunt Meg from the 1996 film Twister. Only albino like.
Lol, silly Faye, he's not talking about the rabbit. He's talking about chu! I love how sweet and sensitive and loving Faye and Ryou are. They're very relaxing to read about, very calming on the mind, even when their world is doing back flips.
You used my line! 8D "It was the best of Yugi, it was the worst of Yugi..." I didn't think you were going to take me seriously when you asked, but I couldn't help but do a little dance like "That's my line, that's my line, lalalalalala!"
I love Karin's character. She provides much-needed comic relief. I guess one of the reasons WHY I like her so much is because I can relate to her so well... in the sporadic, crazy thoughts she tends to have. "Does this shot make his hair look like a sea urchin or a starfish?" Lol, poor Karin, your beloved photos, deleted! What ever will you do? Take some more! XD Be a rebel!
I really do get that family feel between Yugi and Karin. You've captured that quite beautifully. Actually makes me think of my own family.
Your description of Thistle's hair made me thirsty. Congratulations. Now I want a caramel mocha latte!
I could see Karin being a photojournalist, or maybe even just a photographer. She should be Tea and Yami's wedding photographer! XD If he ever wakes up. We all miss you, Yami, even us readers.
Heheheh, god, Leena, you're so out of shape! Maybe Mokuba can race you around the ship a few times and you'll be able to keep up. XD
N'awwww, Kaiba lovin'! Cherish it, Leena, this is probably about as public as it will get for now.
Heheheheh, love the sarcastic quips going back and forth. Leena and Seto are happy together, you can just tell. But it seems he's got something on his mind. Wonder what it is. Heheheheheheheh... 3
I just keep going "Awww!" every time there's some Kaiba-Mokuba-Leena interaction. They're already assimilating like a family. It's cute. She's got her own little place there with them.
Wow, I'm insanely jealous of the room. It sounds so pretty and luxurious and expensive. XD
Uh oh, Leena, looks like Seto's got some plans for you. 3 heheheheheheheh. Good luck. But he's being a gentleman. Leena, you don't have to worry. You're safe with Kaiba Boy. 3
Loved this chapter but I can't fave it more than once, even though I really really want to. T^T Can't wait for the next installments! Awesome job! Happy writing!
10/7/2011 c4 2Queen-Otaku-007
YAY! Another chapter. When I saw the email alert, i squealed. It was so exciteing, like when you get a christmas present! :D Anywayz, another amazing chapter, you never cease to amaze me :D. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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2Queen-Otaku-007YAY! Another chapter. When I saw the email alert, i squealed. It was so exciteing, like when you get a christmas present! :D Anywayz, another amazing chapter, you never cease to amaze me :D. Can't wait for the next chapter.
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10/7/2011 c4 Darkotter Of Odin's City
Don't worry, this is just one of your fans still signed into her "I don't want flames for trying to help a new author" account.
Anyway...
...Did you just kill Yami? I somehow think you did. But that's because I'm pessimistic.
Or if you didn't, you could give us a tiny bit of the story from Yami's perspective in his coma. T'wo
Also, Leena=XD (Gales of laughter) Yay fainting!
Don't worry, this is just one of your fans still signed into her "I don't want flames for trying to help a new author" account.
Anyway...
...Did you just kill Yami? I somehow think you did. But that's because I'm pessimistic.
Or if you didn't, you could give us a tiny bit of the story from Yami's perspective in his coma. T'wo
Also, Leena=XD (Gales of laughter) Yay fainting!
10/6/2011 c4 Jeniashi
-Is to lazy to log in..Forgive my laziness ;A; -
Anyways..this chapter made my day :)
I loved it it was so cute ^^
And Jenna is so cute with Yugi ^w^
You do such a good job keeping the characters in character.
-Heeehee if Niko moved to Domino I think Yugi would be surprised at how much of a 360 Lynol does in the way he acts-
UPDATES SOON O u O
-Is to lazy to log in..Forgive my laziness ;A; -
Anyways..this chapter made my day :)
I loved it it was so cute ^^
And Jenna is so cute with Yugi ^w^
You do such a good job keeping the characters in character.
-Heeehee if Niko moved to Domino I think Yugi would be surprised at how much of a 360 Lynol does in the way he acts-
UPDATES SOON O u O
9/11/2011 c2 1insane.sanity8393
So, I have spent the better part of today reading the majority of Am I Lovesick and this, and I have to say I am highly impressed. I haven't found many stories on here that captivate me quite like these two have. I was riveted by the suspense of the last one and I'm really coming to love the OCs. I also love the way you describe things; you are extraordinarily poetic, which is something I have really come to value in an author. You do very well at keeping characters separated and giving them their own story lines. I also like the multiple point of views in each chapter; it gives the reader a good amount of variety. One thing I noticed on the end of Am I Lovesick is that you forgot to put breaks in between different point of views, which led to a little confusion on my part. But otherwise, I am really enjoying this story and I am very curious to see where you're planning to take it, especially with Mary-Alice out and about (even though she's on an island). Lovely work!
1insane.sanity8393So, I have spent the better part of today reading the majority of Am I Lovesick and this, and I have to say I am highly impressed. I haven't found many stories on here that captivate me quite like these two have. I was riveted by the suspense of the last one and I'm really coming to love the OCs. I also love the way you describe things; you are extraordinarily poetic, which is something I have really come to value in an author. You do very well at keeping characters separated and giving them their own story lines. I also like the multiple point of views in each chapter; it gives the reader a good amount of variety. One thing I noticed on the end of Am I Lovesick is that you forgot to put breaks in between different point of views, which led to a little confusion on my part. But otherwise, I am really enjoying this story and I am very curious to see where you're planning to take it, especially with Mary-Alice out and about (even though she's on an island). Lovely work!
9/6/2011 c2 11NJPickleFiend
Yay for chapter 2! N'awww, I don't blame you for writer's block. ^^ *pet pet* I had severe writer's block on the chapter 1 review... ^^; hence why it kinda sucks...
I like how Tea attempts to go back to normal life... It shows life continues on, but now her life is so dreadfully dull and painful without Yami there. Wow, I never knew she drank, even if just once. She must be at the lowest point of her life, emotionally. She suffers so much, and she really thinks its her fault? Poor Tea. And look, a familiar face! Well, first time we've ever seen Mai! At first I thought she seemed like a total B, but she is trying to support Tea in any way she can, in her own way. I hope she finds a bigger role somewhere. ;3 Ah, I love polarshipping... that IS JoeyxMai, right? I got that right?
Aww, Akefia and Ace... I love this couple, too, and would like to see more of them. Ace is quitting smoking for Ake? How cute! She really is dedicated to making the relationship work, ne? And yet, they're brawling... Typical. XD Heheheheh, naughty, naughty Akeace... Or Acefia...? Hmmm, I'll find a name for them, you just wait. D
Interrupted by a bunny. Epic fail. XD Lol, silly, Ake, we don't eat rabbits! ...Oh, wait, you still can, though, right? They're... venison, is it called? Awwww, Ryou's adorable. ^^ And so is Doris. The name would normally make me wince, not sure why, but for the bunny, it's cute. ^^
And on to Mokuba! I wonder what Kaiba's announcing... Or makybe it's park procedure or something. I dunno. Heheheheh... I love how Mokuba is so observant. I've read some fics about Kaiba neglecting Mokuba by spending too much time at work, but I like how he finds time for Mokuba, and Mokuba finds time to be there for him rather than Kaiba just being so workaholic and stuff like in those fics.
Kaiba? Nervous? XD Hmmm, I wonder what he would have to be nervous about? Could it POSSIBLY have something to do with that mysterious box?
Duh. XD
Uh, ohs, seems like Kaiba's having issues. Socially, he would be a bit awkward, wouldn't he? It's just not his nature to up and propose to just anyone, so he'd obviously have to figure out just how he would do it. He has his own style of "romantic"... Kaiba romance... why did I just think of them going to his theme-park on a date...? Ego. XD
Heheh, "chooka chooka" is a funny word. XD
Aww, Mokuba's so dedicated to his brother. It's awesome he wants to help. How would you help, Mokie, ne? Are you the casanova of proposals? This ought to be good. XD
And NOW, without further ado...
HAPPY BIRTHDAY! YAY! You get two birfday reviews and something special, too! Something top secret and surpriseful! Check your email, it's a-coming!
11NJPickleFiendYay for chapter 2! N'awww, I don't blame you for writer's block. ^^ *pet pet* I had severe writer's block on the chapter 1 review... ^^; hence why it kinda sucks...
I like how Tea attempts to go back to normal life... It shows life continues on, but now her life is so dreadfully dull and painful without Yami there. Wow, I never knew she drank, even if just once. She must be at the lowest point of her life, emotionally. She suffers so much, and she really thinks its her fault? Poor Tea. And look, a familiar face! Well, first time we've ever seen Mai! At first I thought she seemed like a total B, but she is trying to support Tea in any way she can, in her own way. I hope she finds a bigger role somewhere. ;3 Ah, I love polarshipping... that IS JoeyxMai, right? I got that right?
Aww, Akefia and Ace... I love this couple, too, and would like to see more of them. Ace is quitting smoking for Ake? How cute! She really is dedicated to making the relationship work, ne? And yet, they're brawling... Typical. XD Heheheheh, naughty, naughty Akeace... Or Acefia...? Hmmm, I'll find a name for them, you just wait. D
Interrupted by a bunny. Epic fail. XD Lol, silly, Ake, we don't eat rabbits! ...Oh, wait, you still can, though, right? They're... venison, is it called? Awwww, Ryou's adorable. ^^ And so is Doris. The name would normally make me wince, not sure why, but for the bunny, it's cute. ^^
And on to Mokuba! I wonder what Kaiba's announcing... Or makybe it's park procedure or something. I dunno. Heheheheh... I love how Mokuba is so observant. I've read some fics about Kaiba neglecting Mokuba by spending too much time at work, but I like how he finds time for Mokuba, and Mokuba finds time to be there for him rather than Kaiba just being so workaholic and stuff like in those fics.
Kaiba? Nervous? XD Hmmm, I wonder what he would have to be nervous about? Could it POSSIBLY have something to do with that mysterious box?
Duh. XD
Uh, ohs, seems like Kaiba's having issues. Socially, he would be a bit awkward, wouldn't he? It's just not his nature to up and propose to just anyone, so he'd obviously have to figure out just how he would do it. He has his own style of "romantic"... Kaiba romance... why did I just think of them going to his theme-park on a date...? Ego. XD
Heheh, "chooka chooka" is a funny word. XD
Aww, Mokuba's so dedicated to his brother. It's awesome he wants to help. How would you help, Mokie, ne? Are you the casanova of proposals? This ought to be good. XD
And NOW, without further ado...
HAPPY BIRTHDAY! YAY! You get two birfday reviews and something special, too! Something top secret and surpriseful! Check your email, it's a-coming!
9/6/2011 c1 NJPickleFiend
OK, on to the real review!
I just noticed the fake review I sent in had "kitsune2891" as the username... I sent my pokefarm username. -_-
Yay, it's finally here! The sequel! I'm so psyched to read more of this! The story continues and there's more danger at every turn? Count me in! XD Alrighty, let's get on with this review!
I've been waiting for some nice Thistle-action! Have I mentioned I love that kid? I'm sure I have, but I just wanna say it again. I love that kid! XD
And I love your description. Every time, I get absorbed into the world you create and it's almost as if I'm there staring at the characters and watching them go about their business. I like being able to relate to the characters and the world they inhabit, and you just make the readers feel right at home with Thee. I also love how you incorporate scent into the picture. Faye's signature scent of English roses, white tea and raspberries... That make me want tea badly now. XD Hmmmmm...
I could so picture this scenario:
"Thistle Rumi, it's your birthday today! What are you going to do?"
And Thee would smile sweetly at the camera, cock her head to the side and squeal, "I'm going to KaibaLand!" That would be a cute picture... Hmmmmm... I'm 'hmmm'-ing a lot, huh? XD
I love Faye's sisterly side. She's like the mother Thistle needs. And you couldn't catch Mary-Alice dead saying anything like that and not meaning it in a "I'mma kill youuuuu" sense. I love all the sisterly luff. 3
ZOMG Ryou's there! Yay! He and Faye is a couple now, huh? Told ya, Faye! You and Ryou-kun can't hide what's inside! It's so normal for Ryou to be around the Rumi house, he belongs there. It's very touching. I luff these fluffy moments...
I'm also saying "I love, I love, I love" a lot, hmmm? I mean, huh? XD Well, it's true! I get all giddy inside when I see that nice little [New Chapter/Story Alert] on my phone, and then reading your writing, I start doing mental back flips, squealing my brains out, screaming "The fluff! THE FLUFF!"
Wow, I wonder where Mary-Alice is. It's almost like an alternate universe. You have civilization across a vast ocean, and she's stuck on a garbage heap of a town. With creepy pervy biker people. Looks like she's making new friends. ^^; Of course, leave it to crazy Mary-Alice to prey on her own flesh and blood. Bad psycho, bad! Though I can't help but applaud her, or, rather, you, for her twisted mind. I love M.A.'s character so much and despise her too. It's one of those hate to love, love to hate relationship things, I guess.
And you totally made me think Atemu really was in a fantasy setting... but it was only a movie set? XD I should have known. Though I'd love to see this movie he stars in. I love that about your writing; you pull us into all these different world and make it all blend in seamlessly, transitioning perfectly from one scene to the next, no matter whether one is gory and the other fluffy. I give you kudos for that. Kudos! And lots of hugs!
I feel so bad for Karin and Yugi, not knowing that Yami is incapacitated. So blissfully unaware that he is in critical condition and comatose. We all feel for them, and we all want Yami to get better. I wonder what will snap him out of this... What will happen to bring Yami back?
As for Ygui's part, I don't have much to say. The song is adorable, as fits Yugi. I'm glad he and Jenna are together, I always said they make a sweet couple. I just feel that there isn't much to Yugi's part but maybe that's intentional... I guess we'll have to see in future chapters...
Hmm, I guess there's just one last thing to comment on now...
HAPPY BIRTHDAY! *glomp*
OK, on to the real review!
I just noticed the fake review I sent in had "kitsune2891" as the username... I sent my pokefarm username. -_-
Yay, it's finally here! The sequel! I'm so psyched to read more of this! The story continues and there's more danger at every turn? Count me in! XD Alrighty, let's get on with this review!
I've been waiting for some nice Thistle-action! Have I mentioned I love that kid? I'm sure I have, but I just wanna say it again. I love that kid! XD
And I love your description. Every time, I get absorbed into the world you create and it's almost as if I'm there staring at the characters and watching them go about their business. I like being able to relate to the characters and the world they inhabit, and you just make the readers feel right at home with Thee. I also love how you incorporate scent into the picture. Faye's signature scent of English roses, white tea and raspberries... That make me want tea badly now. XD Hmmmmm...
I could so picture this scenario:
"Thistle Rumi, it's your birthday today! What are you going to do?"
And Thee would smile sweetly at the camera, cock her head to the side and squeal, "I'm going to KaibaLand!" That would be a cute picture... Hmmmmm... I'm 'hmmm'-ing a lot, huh? XD
I love Faye's sisterly side. She's like the mother Thistle needs. And you couldn't catch Mary-Alice dead saying anything like that and not meaning it in a "I'mma kill youuuuu" sense. I love all the sisterly luff. 3
ZOMG Ryou's there! Yay! He and Faye is a couple now, huh? Told ya, Faye! You and Ryou-kun can't hide what's inside! It's so normal for Ryou to be around the Rumi house, he belongs there. It's very touching. I luff these fluffy moments...
I'm also saying "I love, I love, I love" a lot, hmmm? I mean, huh? XD Well, it's true! I get all giddy inside when I see that nice little [New Chapter/Story Alert] on my phone, and then reading your writing, I start doing mental back flips, squealing my brains out, screaming "The fluff! THE FLUFF!"
Wow, I wonder where Mary-Alice is. It's almost like an alternate universe. You have civilization across a vast ocean, and she's stuck on a garbage heap of a town. With creepy pervy biker people. Looks like she's making new friends. ^^; Of course, leave it to crazy Mary-Alice to prey on her own flesh and blood. Bad psycho, bad! Though I can't help but applaud her, or, rather, you, for her twisted mind. I love M.A.'s character so much and despise her too. It's one of those hate to love, love to hate relationship things, I guess.
And you totally made me think Atemu really was in a fantasy setting... but it was only a movie set? XD I should have known. Though I'd love to see this movie he stars in. I love that about your writing; you pull us into all these different world and make it all blend in seamlessly, transitioning perfectly from one scene to the next, no matter whether one is gory and the other fluffy. I give you kudos for that. Kudos! And lots of hugs!
I feel so bad for Karin and Yugi, not knowing that Yami is incapacitated. So blissfully unaware that he is in critical condition and comatose. We all feel for them, and we all want Yami to get better. I wonder what will snap him out of this... What will happen to bring Yami back?
As for Ygui's part, I don't have much to say. The song is adorable, as fits Yugi. I'm glad he and Jenna are together, I always said they make a sweet couple. I just feel that there isn't much to Yugi's part but maybe that's intentional... I guess we'll have to see in future chapters...
Hmm, I guess there's just one last thing to comment on now...
HAPPY BIRTHDAY! *glomp*