for Star Wars: Sonic Crossing11/21/2012 c15 conor
make more chaptors
make more chaptors
7/24/2012 c15 claire p
LOVED IT
LOVED IT
3/23/2012 c14 
26The Chuckinator
Knuckles is Darth Rankomis? What an unexpected plot twist; how did he fall to the Dark Side? This is a great story!
26The ChuckinatorKnuckles is Darth Rankomis? What an unexpected plot twist; how did he fall to the Dark Side? This is a great story!
10/23/2011 c12 3SonicAnime2010
sorry for not reviewing as much on this one as I normally would but I've been a bit busy. Now anyways about this chapter, its pretty good but there is one thing I'd like to address, when Tails appeared before the Senate, he introduced himself as Tails, granted thats what everyone calls him and as such he's adjusted to what nickname, his given name is Miles Prower, wouldnt it make a bit more sense for him to be introduced by that name and include Tails as a nickname? Other than that theres some good stuff, the Rogues are acting like I thought they would being guns-for-hire. Uncle Chuck's back, Sonic's apparently got some cool power used to heal Chuck its all interesting and neat, I look forward to the next post
3SonicAnime2010sorry for not reviewing as much on this one as I normally would but I've been a bit busy. Now anyways about this chapter, its pretty good but there is one thing I'd like to address, when Tails appeared before the Senate, he introduced himself as Tails, granted thats what everyone calls him and as such he's adjusted to what nickname, his given name is Miles Prower, wouldnt it make a bit more sense for him to be introduced by that name and include Tails as a nickname? Other than that theres some good stuff, the Rogues are acting like I thought they would being guns-for-hire. Uncle Chuck's back, Sonic's apparently got some cool power used to heal Chuck its all interesting and neat, I look forward to the next post
10/6/2011 c10 Obsidian Ruby
This story...well...It's a good try. The idea is cool and all, but your story is choppy and lacks structure as well as voice. The storyline is all over the place, and I lost track of what was happening around Chapter 3. You're randomly throwing in characters now, like in ten when you threw in Revan. And you haven't mentioned the best character in Sonic the Hedgehog yet. Yes, I'm talking about Shadow. All in all, this story sounds like a super choppy summary of a movie or game. Maybe you should try adding longer paragraphs and more suspense between events. The story just goes by too fast. You should have made each battle at least 2 chapters and added more detail, like this:
"Sonic jumped up and twisted around to kick the Dark Lord in the back of the head. As Sonic landed, the sly sith was already ready to strike..."
Next on the list of needed improvements: Grammar. There aren't very many complex or compound sentences, and you don't have enough commas.
I hope I didn't bore you. I hope you remember my constructive criticism and apply the correct changes to your future chapters!
This story...well...It's a good try. The idea is cool and all, but your story is choppy and lacks structure as well as voice. The storyline is all over the place, and I lost track of what was happening around Chapter 3. You're randomly throwing in characters now, like in ten when you threw in Revan. And you haven't mentioned the best character in Sonic the Hedgehog yet. Yes, I'm talking about Shadow. All in all, this story sounds like a super choppy summary of a movie or game. Maybe you should try adding longer paragraphs and more suspense between events. The story just goes by too fast. You should have made each battle at least 2 chapters and added more detail, like this:
"Sonic jumped up and twisted around to kick the Dark Lord in the back of the head. As Sonic landed, the sly sith was already ready to strike..."
Next on the list of needed improvements: Grammar. There aren't very many complex or compound sentences, and you don't have enough commas.
I hope I didn't bore you. I hope you remember my constructive criticism and apply the correct changes to your future chapters!
9/28/2011 c9 SonicAnime2010
No... why oh why did you have to kill off Uncle Chuck... He was so cool too... Killing Uncle Chuck off is really going to spur some anger from fans of the comics.. Its just sad... Personally I don't approve of it... I'm thinking I know who the sith lord is, not gonna say anything yet. You're using characters from the comics with the locations from the games, there is a difference in the continuities, I'd advise not getting the 2 mixed because otherwise it might get confusing.
No... why oh why did you have to kill off Uncle Chuck... He was so cool too... Killing Uncle Chuck off is really going to spur some anger from fans of the comics.. Its just sad... Personally I don't approve of it... I'm thinking I know who the sith lord is, not gonna say anything yet. You're using characters from the comics with the locations from the games, there is a difference in the continuities, I'd advise not getting the 2 mixed because otherwise it might get confusing.
9/16/2011 c8 SonicAnime2010
Ah, using a bit of Archie with the Julie-su I like it. In the archie comics I think Julie was Knux's girlfriend so that actually makes sense in some context, so points there for originality and canon context with Julie-su. Nice bit with the canon context with the Chaotix and their abilities, I applaud you, this is one of the better written Sonic crossovers. anyways great chapter i look forward to the next one
Ah, using a bit of Archie with the Julie-su I like it. In the archie comics I think Julie was Knux's girlfriend so that actually makes sense in some context, so points there for originality and canon context with Julie-su. Nice bit with the canon context with the Chaotix and their abilities, I applaud you, this is one of the better written Sonic crossovers. anyways great chapter i look forward to the next one
9/6/2011 c7 SonicAnime2010
Well well, looks like the separatists somehow managed to hire the babylon rogues on their side, and Amy's been captured too darn, i hope she and Sonic get reunited.. Nice little twist to it.. Nice chapter looking forward to the next one
Well well, looks like the separatists somehow managed to hire the babylon rogues on their side, and Amy's been captured too darn, i hope she and Sonic get reunited.. Nice little twist to it.. Nice chapter looking forward to the next one