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46Devin Trinidad
Ingenius as to how you bowed the Death Note's rules to your fanfic. Great job!
46Devin TrinidadIngenius as to how you bowed the Death Note's rules to your fanfic. Great job!
10/7/2012 c9 22Arysthae
Haha, this was amusing and had a great plot behind it. I think, perhaps that Near crying was something a little OOC , but really, the story called for it! It was executed well, the plot was great and ...just well done! I love it!
Arysthae
22ArysthaeHaha, this was amusing and had a great plot behind it. I think, perhaps that Near crying was something a little OOC , but really, the story called for it! It was executed well, the plot was great and ...just well done! I love it!
Arysthae
3/14/2012 c9 8limegreenwordmachine
I really thought you were gonna have to pull one of those things where the author doesn't disclose what the characters actually do. I thought you would have to either kill Near or wiggle out of actually saying how he defeated the notebook. But you didn't, and I really liked your solutions. Once I got the drift, it became clear what was going on. And it was genius - I've never seen (eh, read) anybody exploit the technicalities like that. Honestly, I hope that others have the brains to do it and not get hung up in drama and I'm just checking the wrong corners of FanFiction.
I also love your characterization of Near. It's so...accurate, but thoroughly adorable. I gotta admit, Near has always struck me as so huggable. I also love Linda, who's a bubbly thing, isn't she?
And also, you brought Mello back! And it made sense!
For the sake of leaving a well-rounded review, I suppose I have to find something to politely criticize. The biggest thing I can think of is that once you used the word "plaintiffly" in place of "plaintively". And I really would have liked to know what happened in the future. I guess all stories have to actually end at some point, though, so I'll use my headcanon for that.
Seriously, this is the best story I've read in MONTHS.
8limegreenwordmachineI really thought you were gonna have to pull one of those things where the author doesn't disclose what the characters actually do. I thought you would have to either kill Near or wiggle out of actually saying how he defeated the notebook. But you didn't, and I really liked your solutions. Once I got the drift, it became clear what was going on. And it was genius - I've never seen (eh, read) anybody exploit the technicalities like that. Honestly, I hope that others have the brains to do it and not get hung up in drama and I'm just checking the wrong corners of FanFiction.
I also love your characterization of Near. It's so...accurate, but thoroughly adorable. I gotta admit, Near has always struck me as so huggable. I also love Linda, who's a bubbly thing, isn't she?
And also, you brought Mello back! And it made sense!
For the sake of leaving a well-rounded review, I suppose I have to find something to politely criticize. The biggest thing I can think of is that once you used the word "plaintiffly" in place of "plaintively". And I really would have liked to know what happened in the future. I guess all stories have to actually end at some point, though, so I'll use my headcanon for that.
Seriously, this is the best story I've read in MONTHS.
1/8/2012 c2 61Sashocirrione
I think you've got the voice of Near figured out very well. This seems like him. I also like the characters you've got involved in this story and the plot twists. Thanks for writing this.
61SashocirrioneI think you've got the voice of Near figured out very well. This seems like him. I also like the characters you've got involved in this story and the plot twists. Thanks for writing this.
10/23/2011 c9 feet.in.jam.mmmm
AHHHHH Mello's alive again! And Near and co didn't die! YES FOR THE AWESOME STORY!
AHHHHH Mello's alive again! And Near and co didn't die! YES FOR THE AWESOME STORY!
10/23/2011 c4 feet.in.jam.mmmm
Loll how about he erases his name before he dies? Maybe that would work (not the special eraser, but just rub his name BEFORE he dies).
And Linda is funny :)
Loll how about he erases his name before he dies? Maybe that would work (not the special eraser, but just rub his name BEFORE he dies).
And Linda is funny :)
10/23/2011 c3 feet.in.jam.mmmm
Ehh I just realised Near can make Ryuk, like, his slave. Just give him loads of apples.
Ehh I just realised Near can make Ryuk, like, his slave. Just give him loads of apples.
10/21/2011 c9 4Reader-anonymous-writer
So, Near, is misspelling rule retroactive?
Why doesn't Sidoh drop Death Note in humans' world to get chocolate, like Ryuk gets apples?
~+ One way or the other, I will cease to be L at the conclusion of this case.
Near's wish with Shinigami?
~+ The human whose name is written in this note shall die.
Change name; stop being human; erase the name from the note; or return to life after death. Logical.
~+ You cannot kill humans with less than 12 minutes of life left (in human calculations).
At the time of deadline, have some serious wound which would kill you within five minutes. After deadline passes, someone heals this wound so that you still live. But it would work only if you had somebody with shinigami eyes. And it's impractical for so many people, even if it works.
~+ Even though only one name is written in the Death Note, if it influences and causes other humans that are not written in it to die, the victim's cause of death will be a heart attack.
Interesting rule. Rarely mentioned.
~+ The Shinigami King was so impressed by me that he promised to make me a Shinigami when I die. Even suggested he might abdicate in favour of me. Imagine that - Near, King of the Gods of Death. Has a nice ring to it.
Impressive. Good luck.
4Reader-anonymous-writerSo, Near, is misspelling rule retroactive?
Why doesn't Sidoh drop Death Note in humans' world to get chocolate, like Ryuk gets apples?
~+ One way or the other, I will cease to be L at the conclusion of this case.
Near's wish with Shinigami?
~+ The human whose name is written in this note shall die.
Change name; stop being human; erase the name from the note; or return to life after death. Logical.
~+ You cannot kill humans with less than 12 minutes of life left (in human calculations).
At the time of deadline, have some serious wound which would kill you within five minutes. After deadline passes, someone heals this wound so that you still live. But it would work only if you had somebody with shinigami eyes. And it's impractical for so many people, even if it works.
~+ Even though only one name is written in the Death Note, if it influences and causes other humans that are not written in it to die, the victim's cause of death will be a heart attack.
Interesting rule. Rarely mentioned.
~+ The Shinigami King was so impressed by me that he promised to make me a Shinigami when I die. Even suggested he might abdicate in favour of me. Imagine that - Near, King of the Gods of Death. Has a nice ring to it.
Impressive. Good luck.
10/20/2011 c9 1RAB Skulduggery
this was a great story! just one thing i didn't catch: are Near and Linda an official couple now? other than that, I loved it!
1RAB Skulduggerythis was a great story! just one thing i didn't catch: are Near and Linda an official couple now? other than that, I loved it!
10/17/2011 c9 28Daga Uchiha
I loved your story is one of the best I've read ...
I love the way you write and describe the attitudes of the characters ... I also love Nate & Linda ...
Love the story
I congratulate you ...
28Daga UchihaI loved your story is one of the best I've read ...
I love the way you write and describe the attitudes of the characters ... I also love Nate & Linda ...
Love the story
I congratulate you ...
10/9/2011 c9 4Ailytha Akemeti
This is bloody amazing. You don't get nearly enough recognition. The best Death Note story I've seen- you stick to the horrendous mindplay that got me hooked into the series very well.
4Ailytha AkemetiThis is bloody amazing. You don't get nearly enough recognition. The best Death Note story I've seen- you stick to the horrendous mindplay that got me hooked into the series very well.