for An Ostensible Invitation4/4/2012 c3 GingerPygmy99
OMGGGGGG AMAZING !
i just spent the last hour reading this whole thing (im a slow reader) and it was just superb! u described every little detail and feeling without it becoming boring, and hermione taking the lead was definatley funny to read
fab X
OMGGGGGG AMAZING !
i just spent the last hour reading this whole thing (im a slow reader) and it was just superb! u described every little detail and feeling without it becoming boring, and hermione taking the lead was definatley funny to read
fab X
1/10/2012 c1 
4Nmoreblack
This story is fantastic. I've read a few AU versions of Slughorn's party, but this is by far the best written and most realistic. You have the characters down perfectly, especially their interactions. I find some authors are good at getting in Ron and Hermione's heads, but they don't always capture the dialogue between the two as well. This is perfection. You don't resort to fluff and you don't have Ron turn into this romantic hero who always says the right things. Just like in canon, you set him up to say something perfect and romantic and he trips over his own feet. Alternatively, I love that Hermione gets Ron two books for Christmas. The essential nature of their relationship- that they're incapable of acting outside of their own natures, despite their desperation to be together- is something you write perfectly.
4NmoreblackThis story is fantastic. I've read a few AU versions of Slughorn's party, but this is by far the best written and most realistic. You have the characters down perfectly, especially their interactions. I find some authors are good at getting in Ron and Hermione's heads, but they don't always capture the dialogue between the two as well. This is perfection. You don't resort to fluff and you don't have Ron turn into this romantic hero who always says the right things. Just like in canon, you set him up to say something perfect and romantic and he trips over his own feet. Alternatively, I love that Hermione gets Ron two books for Christmas. The essential nature of their relationship- that they're incapable of acting outside of their own natures, despite their desperation to be together- is something you write perfectly.
1/9/2012 c3 66TMBlue
*melts down to liquid*
This. was. fantastic.
I am SO glad I found it!
/Ron perked up; that almost sounded like they had a secret together.
I LOVE this, and once again, such a wonderfully Ron thing for him to think about! Having a secret with her would be something they'd share exclusively, which, in any way he can imagine it, is a completely fantastic prospect!
/"It means…it means that this is…out of the ordinary."
OH. Hermione, you wonderfully sly girl! This is great. I love that they're both all nervous and trying to dance around really saying anything at all. I think that's exactly how it would be :)
/It seemed it was forbidden to say anything in an uncomplicated and direct manner, because then it would all be over.
EXACTLY.
/"You wouldn't have to, he's already in the club," he said, his calm tone belying his frantically thumping heart. He was playing thick now, he supposed, but he couldn't help himself. This was starting to get bloody terrifying.
LOVE LOVE LOVE. Especially that last line!
/It appeared that it hadn't necessarily been Luna, specifically, who'd made her jealous. It'd been some general sense of insecurity, a feeling that what he wanted was the opposite of her, which was mad.
AW! OH man. Yes. YES. This is Hermione, yes. And all of the next paragraph, about her insecurities in general. Perfect.
/but it never took much for him to hurtle back into the constant, dull background hum of self-doubt
Wonderful description of Ron!
/Thank goodness, at least, that the days of his voice breaking with vicious unpredictability were finally gone.
"vicious"!
/Hermione gave a heavy sigh that was clearly designed to prevent any further temptations of mirth.
Hah! Love it.
/He wondered if he really knew her.
I don't know why, but this is absolutely beautiful.
/He wondered (again) if he was going to have more chances to know her better, because this was—
/"Brilliant," Ron declared thickly, nuzzling her neck, pressing his swollen, hot mouth against her throat.
Brilliant? Sure was!
Thank you, THANK YOU for making my day :)
66TMBlue*melts down to liquid*
This. was. fantastic.
I am SO glad I found it!
/Ron perked up; that almost sounded like they had a secret together.
I LOVE this, and once again, such a wonderfully Ron thing for him to think about! Having a secret with her would be something they'd share exclusively, which, in any way he can imagine it, is a completely fantastic prospect!
/"It means…it means that this is…out of the ordinary."
OH. Hermione, you wonderfully sly girl! This is great. I love that they're both all nervous and trying to dance around really saying anything at all. I think that's exactly how it would be :)
/It seemed it was forbidden to say anything in an uncomplicated and direct manner, because then it would all be over.
EXACTLY.
/"You wouldn't have to, he's already in the club," he said, his calm tone belying his frantically thumping heart. He was playing thick now, he supposed, but he couldn't help himself. This was starting to get bloody terrifying.
LOVE LOVE LOVE. Especially that last line!
/It appeared that it hadn't necessarily been Luna, specifically, who'd made her jealous. It'd been some general sense of insecurity, a feeling that what he wanted was the opposite of her, which was mad.
AW! OH man. Yes. YES. This is Hermione, yes. And all of the next paragraph, about her insecurities in general. Perfect.
/but it never took much for him to hurtle back into the constant, dull background hum of self-doubt
Wonderful description of Ron!
/Thank goodness, at least, that the days of his voice breaking with vicious unpredictability were finally gone.
"vicious"!
/Hermione gave a heavy sigh that was clearly designed to prevent any further temptations of mirth.
Hah! Love it.
/He wondered if he really knew her.
I don't know why, but this is absolutely beautiful.
/He wondered (again) if he was going to have more chances to know her better, because this was—
/"Brilliant," Ron declared thickly, nuzzling her neck, pressing his swollen, hot mouth against her throat.
Brilliant? Sure was!
Thank you, THANK YOU for making my day :)
1/9/2012 c2 TMBlue
ALL OF THIS:
/There seemed to be a yawning chasm between the moment she'd invited him and the moment he would be forced to go downstairs and meet her, with absolutely nothing bridging it
"yawning chasm" - what an excellent phase!
/panic tinkling in his heart like falling icicles
Awesome comparison :)
/Considering there were just too many available answers to that question, Ron decided to ignore it.
This is so perfectly Ron, and quite hilarious :)
/"Don't think so, mate. Not unless there's been a recent redefinition of what 'friend' means, in which case I'm afraid I can't see you anymore," Harry joked
I just love Harry so very much :D
/not to mention he'd managed to become noticeably inebriated in the short time since they'd last spoken to him.
HAH!
/he wasn't trying to be rude, after all, it was just his height…
OH, perfect Ron yet again 3
ALL OF THIS:
/There seemed to be a yawning chasm between the moment she'd invited him and the moment he would be forced to go downstairs and meet her, with absolutely nothing bridging it
"yawning chasm" - what an excellent phase!
/panic tinkling in his heart like falling icicles
Awesome comparison :)
/Considering there were just too many available answers to that question, Ron decided to ignore it.
This is so perfectly Ron, and quite hilarious :)
/"Don't think so, mate. Not unless there's been a recent redefinition of what 'friend' means, in which case I'm afraid I can't see you anymore," Harry joked
I just love Harry so very much :D
/not to mention he'd managed to become noticeably inebriated in the short time since they'd last spoken to him.
HAH!
/he wasn't trying to be rude, after all, it was just his height…
OH, perfect Ron yet again 3
10/9/2011 c3 2maritera
So...this is brilliant in a touching, sexy, AND hilarious way. I love that you managed to do all three, and still be so in tune with Hermione and Ron's characters.
I think it was GREAT that this came completely from Ron's perspective, since this storyline has so much to do with Ron's insecurities.
This just means you should write another story from Hermione's POV. Juuuuust saying. :)
2mariteraSo...this is brilliant in a touching, sexy, AND hilarious way. I love that you managed to do all three, and still be so in tune with Hermione and Ron's characters.
I think it was GREAT that this came completely from Ron's perspective, since this storyline has so much to do with Ron's insecurities.
This just means you should write another story from Hermione's POV. Juuuuust saying. :)
9/22/2011 c3 tikincloks
Well this is just perfect! I loved every bit, how Hermione wouldnt be treated that way, the way she kept taking the plunge and the last scene was just brilliant
Well this is just perfect! I loved every bit, how Hermione wouldnt be treated that way, the way she kept taking the plunge and the last scene was just brilliant
9/18/2011 c3 Guest
I think the third chapter should be rated M or more...NOT T.
I think the third chapter should be rated M or more...NOT T.
9/15/2011 c3 ObsessedRHShipper
Great ending, although it keeps me wanting to see what they would do next.
Great ending, although it keeps me wanting to see what they would do next.
9/15/2011 c1 ObsessedRHShipper
Yay! I'm glad to Hermione for pushing the subject and Luna for taking things into her own hands.
Yay! I'm glad to Hermione for pushing the subject and Luna for taking things into her own hands.