for Hunted Down4/30 c33 Randomer
I love your story and I get excited when their's a new chapter XD, but I feel like it's focused on Violet, Seth and Jewel a lot more than the others...Not trying to be mean cause they're awesome characters but yeah...please don't get this the wrong way :\
I love your story and I get excited when their's a new chapter XD, but I feel like it's focused on Violet, Seth and Jewel a lot more than the others...Not trying to be mean cause they're awesome characters but yeah...please don't get this the wrong way :\
3/6 c31 erykaluvsdogs
OMG • this is awesome please update i just luv ash and dawn your awsome:)
OMG • this is awesome please update i just luv ash and dawn your awsome:)
1/27 c14 Blacky-boy
even my little doggy likes your story
she's now sitting next to me reading this XD
even my little doggy likes your story
she's now sitting next to me reading this XD
1/20 c30 Anon
Yeah sorry about that outburst.
Yeah sorry about that outburst.
1/14 c30 Anon
YOU NEED TO FUCCKKING UPDATE HIGH SCHOOL SECRETS!
YOU NEED TO FUCCKKING UPDATE HIGH SCHOOL SECRETS!
1/13 c30 
3Crumpetz1
What? How?, well what a criss cross. Last Chapter They all lost their Powers and were switched with each other, now Heather has a power and they got their powers back and they found Ash and Dawn but they aren't allowed to fall in love with the assignment, That's Torture for Ash right there :D. Overall Good chapter and i liked the double twist in the story, Wonder whats going to happen Next? Keep up the Good work :D
3Crumpetz1What? How?, well what a criss cross. Last Chapter They all lost their Powers and were switched with each other, now Heather has a power and they got their powers back and they found Ash and Dawn but they aren't allowed to fall in love with the assignment, That's Torture for Ash right there :D. Overall Good chapter and i liked the double twist in the story, Wonder whats going to happen Next? Keep up the Good work :D
1/1 c29 Anon
Oh, **K!
Oh, **K!
1/1 c29 Cutiepiepo2
NOOOOO they took there powers ihope they get them back and that everything goes ba k to the story
NOOOOO they took there powers ihope they get them back and that everything goes ba k to the story
12/31/2012 c29 4PokemonFreak90
Wow, you took my idea and made it even better than I could've thought! Best chapter yet!
And Happy New Year!
4PokemonFreak90Wow, you took my idea and made it even better than I could've thought! Best chapter yet!
And Happy New Year!
12/31/2012 c29 Guest
Btw I was thinking that the snap from a branch could be a Pokemon tha has the power to bring ash back to life and that he would owe the Pokemon in return by letting the pokemon trave
With ash as his accomplice and the pokemon could be mewtwo because mewtwo also has aura powers. Either mewtwo or lucario but mewtwo would be better because then a legendary can bring people back to life, only if he thought that there aura was worthy enough :)
Btw I was thinking that the snap from a branch could be a Pokemon tha has the power to bring ash back to life and that he would owe the Pokemon in return by letting the pokemon trave
With ash as his accomplice and the pokemon could be mewtwo because mewtwo also has aura powers. Either mewtwo or lucario but mewtwo would be better because then a legendary can bring people back to life, only if he thought that there aura was worthy enough :)
12/31/2012 c29 Guest
That's was a wierd but good chapter. I liked how all the powers were exchanged and jewel turned bad. If they all go after ash and dawn, I think a good idea would be dawn gets attacked and captured and ash just flips, because he can't let his emotions get in the way of his aura ability that he gets angry and something inside of his snaps. Instead of a blue sure he gets a gold flame aura around him and his eyes glow yellow instead of blue. His power magnifies that much that even dawns uncle is scared of ash. All the teens bar violet and dawn watch in awe as ash becomes super charged with sure and power. However violet knows that ash let anger corrupt his power and she knows what's going to happen, even though she had heard of this in folk law and legends of the aura predecessors, and dawn is scared because she has never seen this side to ash before. All of team plasma or however they are, have freight in there eyes as they watch ash turn and look at them. Then in the blink of an eye, ash teleports infront of Damian and hits him in the side of the head with a gold aura sphere that is 5x the size of a normal one. Damn gets sent flying threw 10 trees and until a crater, 6ft underground. Most of team plasma scatter at the new found power but the scientist and he leader who stand there ground but are wiery of there actions against such a foe. Ash then looks at his 'friends' and 'lover' but is corrupted by his power and doesn't have any recognision of who they are, he slowly walks but to Gary and punches him in the face and sends him back 10 yards. All the teens stand there in complete Horner as the boy that seemed so harmless and kind punched his oldest friend in the face. Everyone runs over to Gary and stands in the way so that ash can't get through to him. Violet tries to reason with ash to get him to see what is happening and who he is hurting. This seems to get throughh to ash but not for very long as he finds himself chuckling meniacly saying "the old ash that you all loved is dead. This is the power of a god" in an echoey voice. Dawn who could have only watched the events that's just for played, finds herself crying at the new found ash and the only way she can hope to bring him back is make him realise her. She charges over to ash and and jumps and tackles him into a passionate hug when he only looks at her, her head deep into his chest crying away to herself repeating "ash this isn't you, come back to me ash...ASH!?, plz your hurting everyone and ... ME!". Ash then finds him true self, and ends up returning back to this normal state with out the godly god aura armour around him. He returns dawns embrace and then whispers in her to "thank you for saving me". Ash then falls unconscious onto the floor where dawn finds herself jumping down to catch him in mid fall and place his head on her lap. After about a minute for everyone to process what just happened and how scared team plasma got, they realised that dawns uncle came out of the hole in pure horror and angry being shown through his eyes and his actions. He walks over to ash and throws dawn to the side before anyone knows he is there. Dawns uncle then starts chanting some thing under his breathe and the teens find them self frozen but able to see and hear. Dawns uncle looks at ash and says, "you my boy are the only aura guardian to be able to unlock the true power of aura without your aura being corrupt. There is no way I can steal your powers as they would kill me in seconds" he said with a laugh, he then continued " the only thing I can do is kill you and hope you stay dead so that you don't interfere it's mine and team plasma's plans. Dawn and the others hear this and the all look sad and tears threatening to fall, but dawn does cry. Her uncle sees her and undoes the spell on her, he says to her " I know you loved this boy very much and the least I can do is let you say goodbye to him before he dies, I'm only bing nice to you is because this is the oly boy that can ever defeat me. You might as well say good by to your saviour." he barks. Dawn runs over to ash and crys on his chest and says to her uncle " I won't let you KILL him, he means everything to me." she said between hiccups, " if you try to kil him, I'll kill you" she said regaining her composure as she stands up to look her uncle in the eye. He then shouts "stand down" and dawn finds herself on the floor next to ash as she watches him sleep peacefully. Her uncles stand over the top of ash and and draws his knife and lunges at ash's heart with one Clean sweep and stabs him in the chest where his heart lies. Ash found himself being forced to wake up and eye his assassin, then then turds his head side ways to find all the teen crying and dawn have a mental breakdown in her head. Ash then whispers to dawn "I know you and I wanted to be together, but if Can't controll my emotions when It comes to my power, I could have killed you. I'm sorry I couldnt b-b-be a better boyfriend for you and us B-be t-together for as long as we w-wanted" ash stained out as he felt his blood and air leaving him with every word.
He then continued by saying one last sentence "dawn, I love you and I always will love yo-u-u" he said as he his eyes grew heavy and shut tightly.
Dawns uncle laughed meniacly then disappeared into the forest where all of team plasma had gone. However as soon as he vanished so did the effect of the spell and everyone raced over to where ash's corpse was laid. All the teens eyes streamed with tears as they watched there friends get killed and couldn't do anything about it. But 1 girl with blue hair couldn't comprehend the fact of what just happened, she found herself wide eyed shaking ash's shoulders telling him to "wake up" and how this was a 'dream' before she realised that the one person she loved the most since they first saw each other was gone. Dawn screamed as loud as she could while tears poured out of her eyed like waterfalls, she screamed "why" into the sky as she buried her head into ash chest where the knife still was. May and misty walked behind her with tears down there cheecks and put a hand on her shoulders, she shook them off hoping this was a vision ash was showing her and that they were still in the cave just after they had kissed, but sadly no this wasn't the case. The all stood around ash's body while dawn was on her knees, with her head in her hands and sobbing away when they heard a click of a branch snap behind them, they all turned around to find a ...
I'm so sorry that this isnt a review but I though of an idea you could implement and ended up writing pretty much a story with basically no chat involved. But hopefully you can get a few ideas from my little story and use them in chapters to come or so. I'm sorry again And plz dot fame me Or rage at me for wasting reviewing, but I thought of Ideas that could help :)
That's was a wierd but good chapter. I liked how all the powers were exchanged and jewel turned bad. If they all go after ash and dawn, I think a good idea would be dawn gets attacked and captured and ash just flips, because he can't let his emotions get in the way of his aura ability that he gets angry and something inside of his snaps. Instead of a blue sure he gets a gold flame aura around him and his eyes glow yellow instead of blue. His power magnifies that much that even dawns uncle is scared of ash. All the teens bar violet and dawn watch in awe as ash becomes super charged with sure and power. However violet knows that ash let anger corrupt his power and she knows what's going to happen, even though she had heard of this in folk law and legends of the aura predecessors, and dawn is scared because she has never seen this side to ash before. All of team plasma or however they are, have freight in there eyes as they watch ash turn and look at them. Then in the blink of an eye, ash teleports infront of Damian and hits him in the side of the head with a gold aura sphere that is 5x the size of a normal one. Damn gets sent flying threw 10 trees and until a crater, 6ft underground. Most of team plasma scatter at the new found power but the scientist and he leader who stand there ground but are wiery of there actions against such a foe. Ash then looks at his 'friends' and 'lover' but is corrupted by his power and doesn't have any recognision of who they are, he slowly walks but to Gary and punches him in the face and sends him back 10 yards. All the teens stand there in complete Horner as the boy that seemed so harmless and kind punched his oldest friend in the face. Everyone runs over to Gary and stands in the way so that ash can't get through to him. Violet tries to reason with ash to get him to see what is happening and who he is hurting. This seems to get throughh to ash but not for very long as he finds himself chuckling meniacly saying "the old ash that you all loved is dead. This is the power of a god" in an echoey voice. Dawn who could have only watched the events that's just for played, finds herself crying at the new found ash and the only way she can hope to bring him back is make him realise her. She charges over to ash and and jumps and tackles him into a passionate hug when he only looks at her, her head deep into his chest crying away to herself repeating "ash this isn't you, come back to me ash...ASH!?, plz your hurting everyone and ... ME!". Ash then finds him true self, and ends up returning back to this normal state with out the godly god aura armour around him. He returns dawns embrace and then whispers in her to "thank you for saving me". Ash then falls unconscious onto the floor where dawn finds herself jumping down to catch him in mid fall and place his head on her lap. After about a minute for everyone to process what just happened and how scared team plasma got, they realised that dawns uncle came out of the hole in pure horror and angry being shown through his eyes and his actions. He walks over to ash and throws dawn to the side before anyone knows he is there. Dawns uncle then starts chanting some thing under his breathe and the teens find them self frozen but able to see and hear. Dawns uncle looks at ash and says, "you my boy are the only aura guardian to be able to unlock the true power of aura without your aura being corrupt. There is no way I can steal your powers as they would kill me in seconds" he said with a laugh, he then continued " the only thing I can do is kill you and hope you stay dead so that you don't interfere it's mine and team plasma's plans. Dawn and the others hear this and the all look sad and tears threatening to fall, but dawn does cry. Her uncle sees her and undoes the spell on her, he says to her " I know you loved this boy very much and the least I can do is let you say goodbye to him before he dies, I'm only bing nice to you is because this is the oly boy that can ever defeat me. You might as well say good by to your saviour." he barks. Dawn runs over to ash and crys on his chest and says to her uncle " I won't let you KILL him, he means everything to me." she said between hiccups, " if you try to kil him, I'll kill you" she said regaining her composure as she stands up to look her uncle in the eye. He then shouts "stand down" and dawn finds herself on the floor next to ash as she watches him sleep peacefully. Her uncles stand over the top of ash and and draws his knife and lunges at ash's heart with one Clean sweep and stabs him in the chest where his heart lies. Ash found himself being forced to wake up and eye his assassin, then then turds his head side ways to find all the teen crying and dawn have a mental breakdown in her head. Ash then whispers to dawn "I know you and I wanted to be together, but if Can't controll my emotions when It comes to my power, I could have killed you. I'm sorry I couldnt b-b-be a better boyfriend for you and us B-be t-together for as long as we w-wanted" ash stained out as he felt his blood and air leaving him with every word.
He then continued by saying one last sentence "dawn, I love you and I always will love yo-u-u" he said as he his eyes grew heavy and shut tightly.
Dawns uncle laughed meniacly then disappeared into the forest where all of team plasma had gone. However as soon as he vanished so did the effect of the spell and everyone raced over to where ash's corpse was laid. All the teens eyes streamed with tears as they watched there friends get killed and couldn't do anything about it. But 1 girl with blue hair couldn't comprehend the fact of what just happened, she found herself wide eyed shaking ash's shoulders telling him to "wake up" and how this was a 'dream' before she realised that the one person she loved the most since they first saw each other was gone. Dawn screamed as loud as she could while tears poured out of her eyed like waterfalls, she screamed "why" into the sky as she buried her head into ash chest where the knife still was. May and misty walked behind her with tears down there cheecks and put a hand on her shoulders, she shook them off hoping this was a vision ash was showing her and that they were still in the cave just after they had kissed, but sadly no this wasn't the case. The all stood around ash's body while dawn was on her knees, with her head in her hands and sobbing away when they heard a click of a branch snap behind them, they all turned around to find a ...
I'm so sorry that this isnt a review but I though of an idea you could implement and ended up writing pretty much a story with basically no chat involved. But hopefully you can get a few ideas from my little story and use them in chapters to come or so. I'm sorry again And plz dot fame me Or rage at me for wasting reviewing, but I thought of Ideas that could help :)
12/29/2012 c28 Anon
I am...kinda confused right know.
I am...kinda confused right know.
12/29/2012 c27 Anon
Oh no Jewel was captured!
Oh no Jewel was captured!