for Red Moon Rising3/9 c20 Luna Goddess of the Night
Oh crap. Cat's out of the bag. Or should I say were...? Anyways, both chaps were great, save for a few punctuation errors. When an action is donewhile someone's speaking, no comma is needed. Only when there's a word that describes him speaking is when a comma is needed.
Personally, I think Mamoru needs to go through the Change into something. Let him suffer, then put him down. Also, some Rei and Minako would be nice. Update soon.
-Luna
Oh crap. Cat's out of the bag. Or should I say were...? Anyways, both chaps were great, save for a few punctuation errors. When an action is donewhile someone's speaking, no comma is needed. Only when there's a word that describes him speaking is when a comma is needed.
Personally, I think Mamoru needs to go through the Change into something. Let him suffer, then put him down. Also, some Rei and Minako would be nice. Update soon.
-Luna
3/9 c20 
21Kellybug
I just met my hero in this story! Way to go, Cayote-Father! I'm sorry, but, I've never much like Pluto. Time is too neutrral to be thought of as an ally.
21KellybugI just met my hero in this story! Way to go, Cayote-Father! I'm sorry, but, I've never much like Pluto. Time is too neutrral to be thought of as an ally.
2/18 c18 Luna Goddess of the Night
Definitely beautiful, darling. Sad, heartbreaking, yet beautiful. I am eager to know more. My only concrit is that the word you were searching for at one point was "weight" not "wait". Other than that, I hope to know more. Never give up on your writing. You should write and update, because you want to. Because it's your passion. Who cares who reviews or not? You write and update because you love the story. I've seen many a great writer give up, because they thought they weren't good enough. I can tell you that you are great. Update soon!
-Luna
Definitely beautiful, darling. Sad, heartbreaking, yet beautiful. I am eager to know more. My only concrit is that the word you were searching for at one point was "weight" not "wait". Other than that, I hope to know more. Never give up on your writing. You should write and update, because you want to. Because it's your passion. Who cares who reviews or not? You write and update because you love the story. I've seen many a great writer give up, because they thought they weren't good enough. I can tell you that you are great. Update soon!
-Luna
7/18/2012 c16 4PSVT
I guess late is certainly better than never, especially for a moment in the story as important as this.
In a way, it almost seems fitting that Ami's emotions would get the better of her-and yet, she has already accounted for exactly that. There are a few technical errors that could be resolved with a re-reading of the chapter (“body wait” instead of “body weight” for example), but nothing that lowers its impact. Indeed, Ami’s death at the hands of Mamoru, which was all her own fault, makes me more interested in the future of this story and in just how her children will exact their revenge against him. Given what Makoto has to deal with just in caring for them, and especially Saeko, the children are beyond pissed. Makoto would need the patience of a saint, at least, but I have a feeling she would survive that stage of their grief, even if only barely.
On a side note, you’ve definitely made Mamoru into one heck of a villain. I somewhat wonder what compelled him to become so evil, but Ami’s side of the story is far more interesting to me.
And lastly, I’m pretty sure the Ami being turned partly into a vampire and going into the desert to meet the Coyote father arc and its consequences that effectively disappeared is the part you referred to in your note. But, I’ll continue to stick around to see the story to the end regardless, though I’m curious to see what you would do to resolve that.
Thanks so much for this, and I hope to see more when you have the opportunity.
4PSVTI guess late is certainly better than never, especially for a moment in the story as important as this.
In a way, it almost seems fitting that Ami's emotions would get the better of her-and yet, she has already accounted for exactly that. There are a few technical errors that could be resolved with a re-reading of the chapter (“body wait” instead of “body weight” for example), but nothing that lowers its impact. Indeed, Ami’s death at the hands of Mamoru, which was all her own fault, makes me more interested in the future of this story and in just how her children will exact their revenge against him. Given what Makoto has to deal with just in caring for them, and especially Saeko, the children are beyond pissed. Makoto would need the patience of a saint, at least, but I have a feeling she would survive that stage of their grief, even if only barely.
On a side note, you’ve definitely made Mamoru into one heck of a villain. I somewhat wonder what compelled him to become so evil, but Ami’s side of the story is far more interesting to me.
And lastly, I’m pretty sure the Ami being turned partly into a vampire and going into the desert to meet the Coyote father arc and its consequences that effectively disappeared is the part you referred to in your note. But, I’ll continue to stick around to see the story to the end regardless, though I’m curious to see what you would do to resolve that.
Thanks so much for this, and I hope to see more when you have the opportunity.
5/4/2012 c15 Merry weather Louise
Playing along works fine as long as the story all comes together at the end ;)
I'm glad you explained Ami's motives and how she did plan ahead incase something like her death did happen. It makes her seem much more in character and more in control of the situation than any of us would ever know! Well except for you of course
I also enjoyed the brief moments with each of the senshi at the news of her death, though I didn't think Seiko would be the one flipping her lid! I always assumed that Ramon would be more the type to lose it but I do think you should expand more on the cubs and how they deal with the aftermath of such a tragedy! To loose both parents in such a short time!
I can't wait until your next update!
~ Merry weather Louise
Playing along works fine as long as the story all comes together at the end ;)
I'm glad you explained Ami's motives and how she did plan ahead incase something like her death did happen. It makes her seem much more in character and more in control of the situation than any of us would ever know! Well except for you of course
I also enjoyed the brief moments with each of the senshi at the news of her death, though I didn't think Seiko would be the one flipping her lid! I always assumed that Ramon would be more the type to lose it but I do think you should expand more on the cubs and how they deal with the aftermath of such a tragedy! To loose both parents in such a short time!
I can't wait until your next update!
~ Merry weather Louise
5/3/2012 c14 Merry weather Louise
Good story so far (I've read the others in this series too) but one thing that really bothers me is how Mamoru and all the anti-supernatural leagues are just plain evil. There's no depth to them and makes the story a bit more flatter where there could be intrigue and perhaps a way for the reader to sympathize or at least understand why they are doing what they do. Another factor that is a bit head-scratching is Amy's complete disregard of caution when infiltrating the hide-out. She was the tactian of the senshi and the most cautious and brilliant of them all but she still dives in head-first without much fore-thought? It boggeled me! But besides those two things, it's a wonderful story and I cannot simply wait for the next chapter! You couldn't possibly kill your main character like that without something up your sleeve right?
~Merry weather Louise :)
Good story so far (I've read the others in this series too) but one thing that really bothers me is how Mamoru and all the anti-supernatural leagues are just plain evil. There's no depth to them and makes the story a bit more flatter where there could be intrigue and perhaps a way for the reader to sympathize or at least understand why they are doing what they do. Another factor that is a bit head-scratching is Amy's complete disregard of caution when infiltrating the hide-out. She was the tactian of the senshi and the most cautious and brilliant of them all but she still dives in head-first without much fore-thought? It boggeled me! But besides those two things, it's a wonderful story and I cannot simply wait for the next chapter! You couldn't possibly kill your main character like that without something up your sleeve right?
~Merry weather Louise :)
4/29/2012 c13 PSVT
Welcome back! I hope you thoroughly enjoyed your trip and did manage to avoid getting into too much trouble. I was expecting you to return a lot later in the year, but I'll live. ;) Actually, I'm a bit late with this review as I wanted to do so right when I got the alert, but real life seems to get in the way when one is trying to graduate within a few months. Anyway, I'm happy to see the next update to this story, especially given that it ended with Oso's death and the revelation of that fact to Ami and her children. Yeah, I can imagine, from how I remember what she did when Usagi was stalking her, there is no chance in hell she would pass up an opportunity to take her revenge against Mamoru, even with her vow to not interfere. And, I can imagine how this would probably cause the plans of the other Nightstalkers to go awry. I wonder when Ami's vampire powers/debilities will kick in as she does so, and how that will affect things. As far as technical aspects go, I didn't notice too many errors here. The dialogue remains as emotive as before and the descriptions, though short, absolutely pull me into the story and give me a clear picture of what the characters are experiencing, which is what I like about your stories among other things. So, in total, it looks great, and as usual I can't wait for more.
Welcome back! I hope you thoroughly enjoyed your trip and did manage to avoid getting into too much trouble. I was expecting you to return a lot later in the year, but I'll live. ;) Actually, I'm a bit late with this review as I wanted to do so right when I got the alert, but real life seems to get in the way when one is trying to graduate within a few months. Anyway, I'm happy to see the next update to this story, especially given that it ended with Oso's death and the revelation of that fact to Ami and her children. Yeah, I can imagine, from how I remember what she did when Usagi was stalking her, there is no chance in hell she would pass up an opportunity to take her revenge against Mamoru, even with her vow to not interfere. And, I can imagine how this would probably cause the plans of the other Nightstalkers to go awry. I wonder when Ami's vampire powers/debilities will kick in as she does so, and how that will affect things. As far as technical aspects go, I didn't notice too many errors here. The dialogue remains as emotive as before and the descriptions, though short, absolutely pull me into the story and give me a clear picture of what the characters are experiencing, which is what I like about your stories among other things. So, in total, it looks great, and as usual I can't wait for more.
1/16/2012 c11 PSVT
So the attack that Setsuna portended would happen has happened and, short of a timeline-busting miracle, Oso will not be returning from Annapolis. However, he did show quite a bit of badassery before he was felled, and that was pretty cool to see even while knowing what would befall him. I wonder what would have happened to his plan for 'recruiting' normal humans into their fight had they the chance to spread the word around to the various regiments. I'm sure a lot of the 'Normals' would have been shocked at their existence in the first place, and I think that, ultimately, it would have backfired and attracted more people to the Red Brotherhood and Silver League than anything else. But, there's no way to figure that out now. Now, the focus turns to Ami, Saeko, and Ramon, and what they're going to do not just counter the near-overwhelming threat of those combined forces, but just to survive them. I'm looking forward to seeing what Ami's dual-nature as a werewolf and vampire brings her, as well as what special abilities Saeko and Ramon possess. Great stuff, as always, and I'll be all over the next update whenever you get back. Have a safe and awesome trip, and don't get into too much trouble! ;)
So the attack that Setsuna portended would happen has happened and, short of a timeline-busting miracle, Oso will not be returning from Annapolis. However, he did show quite a bit of badassery before he was felled, and that was pretty cool to see even while knowing what would befall him. I wonder what would have happened to his plan for 'recruiting' normal humans into their fight had they the chance to spread the word around to the various regiments. I'm sure a lot of the 'Normals' would have been shocked at their existence in the first place, and I think that, ultimately, it would have backfired and attracted more people to the Red Brotherhood and Silver League than anything else. But, there's no way to figure that out now. Now, the focus turns to Ami, Saeko, and Ramon, and what they're going to do not just counter the near-overwhelming threat of those combined forces, but just to survive them. I'm looking forward to seeing what Ami's dual-nature as a werewolf and vampire brings her, as well as what special abilities Saeko and Ramon possess. Great stuff, as always, and I'll be all over the next update whenever you get back. Have a safe and awesome trip, and don't get into too much trouble! ;)
12/26/2011 c10 PSVT
Yeah, it's been a while since I've reviewed... well, anything, but certainly this story. I apologize for that, and I hope not to fall so far behind in letting you know what I think. Anyway, I'm still reading, of course, and I'm still liking the story, although it did seem to slow down a bit when the plot focused on the circumstances of Oso's cancer and the way it affected Ami, Saeko, and Ramon. I still thoroughly enjoyed the psychological drama of that arc, but I personally would have had it occur simultaneously with the action occurring with Hotaru and our enemies. Or, at least, I'd have had a little more overlap. But, it's still wonderful stuff nonetheless, and I like that Ramon's treatment method for his father won out in the end. Chemotherapy is a horrible thing for a person to experience, and I'm lucky so far to not have to deal with that personally or intimately know anyone who does. It really is the rough equivalent of attempting to snipe with a nuclear bomb. Sure, you get the target, but the collateral damage is immense. Moving on, the twist of seeing a werewolf work with the Silver League and Red Brotherhood can only lead to some surely interesting action in the future. I'm sure that things will begin to come to a head as they have their conference, and with Pluto's warning I'm fairly sure I know what will happen, though you've delivered surprises before. So, I'm absolutely still reading this story and paying attention to this one and the others, and I can't wait to see how this one ends (though I might have to be patient, considering your upcoming trip and all).
Yeah, it's been a while since I've reviewed... well, anything, but certainly this story. I apologize for that, and I hope not to fall so far behind in letting you know what I think. Anyway, I'm still reading, of course, and I'm still liking the story, although it did seem to slow down a bit when the plot focused on the circumstances of Oso's cancer and the way it affected Ami, Saeko, and Ramon. I still thoroughly enjoyed the psychological drama of that arc, but I personally would have had it occur simultaneously with the action occurring with Hotaru and our enemies. Or, at least, I'd have had a little more overlap. But, it's still wonderful stuff nonetheless, and I like that Ramon's treatment method for his father won out in the end. Chemotherapy is a horrible thing for a person to experience, and I'm lucky so far to not have to deal with that personally or intimately know anyone who does. It really is the rough equivalent of attempting to snipe with a nuclear bomb. Sure, you get the target, but the collateral damage is immense. Moving on, the twist of seeing a werewolf work with the Silver League and Red Brotherhood can only lead to some surely interesting action in the future. I'm sure that things will begin to come to a head as they have their conference, and with Pluto's warning I'm fairly sure I know what will happen, though you've delivered surprises before. So, I'm absolutely still reading this story and paying attention to this one and the others, and I can't wait to see how this one ends (though I might have to be patient, considering your upcoming trip and all).
9/3/2011 c3 PSVT
I might be a bit late as usual with the first review considering you're three chapters in, but I have to say that I'm extremely happy to see the start of this story. There are two things I like most about this story, among the many things there are to enjoy.
The first is the uniqueness of the character's situations, being werewolves and vampires and other so-called 'creatures of the night'. That was the impetus for the conflict for the first two stories (and clearly this one as well), and some wonderful action scenes came out of that, namely the two fights between Ami and Usagi. Now that Mamoru is in charge of the Silver League, and Motoki in charge of the Red Brotherhood (now there's a surprise - I had no idea he would have been involved in such a capacity), I can foresee a similar battle looming in the distance. Though, I also have the feeling the outcome of that fight would hinge more on Saeko and Ramon than on Ami and Oso. But, either way, I have no doubts that it would be spectacular.
The second, and probably the thing I like even more, is the dynamics between the characters, particularly the interactions between Ami and Oso and the scenes involving Saeko and Ramon. Of course, now the children are older and in their teens, which indubitably brings a new dimension to their personalities, and I'm curious to see how they come across as the story progresses. Going back to Ami and Oso, I'm also very curious about how he deals with his cancer diagnosis in the context of the threat posed by Mamoru, et al. As much as he wants to help his wife, and I'm sure he'll fight as long as he can to ensure her safety, I ultimately can't see him doing much in the future with a malignant tumor. Still, I wholeheartedly look forward to reading how that prospect affects all of them as the story moves forward.
So, yeah, I'm thrilled to see this concluding story to the trilogy, as I strongly believe it's a wonderful tale. The only other thing I can wish for is that you somehow overcome the writer's block that you have with Matrix, as it's also quite interesting. I'm sure you'll eventually overcome it. Anyway, best of luck to you, and many thanks for yet another great story, one that I'll be intently following just like the others.
I might be a bit late as usual with the first review considering you're three chapters in, but I have to say that I'm extremely happy to see the start of this story. There are two things I like most about this story, among the many things there are to enjoy.
The first is the uniqueness of the character's situations, being werewolves and vampires and other so-called 'creatures of the night'. That was the impetus for the conflict for the first two stories (and clearly this one as well), and some wonderful action scenes came out of that, namely the two fights between Ami and Usagi. Now that Mamoru is in charge of the Silver League, and Motoki in charge of the Red Brotherhood (now there's a surprise - I had no idea he would have been involved in such a capacity), I can foresee a similar battle looming in the distance. Though, I also have the feeling the outcome of that fight would hinge more on Saeko and Ramon than on Ami and Oso. But, either way, I have no doubts that it would be spectacular.
The second, and probably the thing I like even more, is the dynamics between the characters, particularly the interactions between Ami and Oso and the scenes involving Saeko and Ramon. Of course, now the children are older and in their teens, which indubitably brings a new dimension to their personalities, and I'm curious to see how they come across as the story progresses. Going back to Ami and Oso, I'm also very curious about how he deals with his cancer diagnosis in the context of the threat posed by Mamoru, et al. As much as he wants to help his wife, and I'm sure he'll fight as long as he can to ensure her safety, I ultimately can't see him doing much in the future with a malignant tumor. Still, I wholeheartedly look forward to reading how that prospect affects all of them as the story moves forward.
So, yeah, I'm thrilled to see this concluding story to the trilogy, as I strongly believe it's a wonderful tale. The only other thing I can wish for is that you somehow overcome the writer's block that you have with Matrix, as it's also quite interesting. I'm sure you'll eventually overcome it. Anyway, best of luck to you, and many thanks for yet another great story, one that I'll be intently following just like the others.