for A Chink In The Armour4/6 c1 annieathome1
This was wonderful! Someone is Brendan's saying: as a gay guy...openly loving another man...you and Ste...everyone says you're lovers! The initial violent reaction was expected but your introspective follow up chat was brilliant. How typical for Bren to say: 'I'm not gay, I just sleep with people who aren't women.' And just his simple statement - talk to me, if...and then the list. and how he'd rather sit up all night talking to you than visit your gravesite - how powerful. and the line about - you don't know how great things can be - how encouraging. and the brief but needed: 'you're not alone.' and finally: 'if you can do friendships, you can do relationships.' Oh how I wish Steven could be hearing all the heartfelt advice/admissions Brendan was giving. and oh how I wish high schoolers everywhere could have this conveyed to them ... very well put! lovely for the storyline, lovely for the real world.
This was wonderful! Someone is Brendan's saying: as a gay guy...openly loving another man...you and Ste...everyone says you're lovers! The initial violent reaction was expected but your introspective follow up chat was brilliant. How typical for Bren to say: 'I'm not gay, I just sleep with people who aren't women.' And just his simple statement - talk to me, if...and then the list. and how he'd rather sit up all night talking to you than visit your gravesite - how powerful. and the line about - you don't know how great things can be - how encouraging. and the brief but needed: 'you're not alone.' and finally: 'if you can do friendships, you can do relationships.' Oh how I wish Steven could be hearing all the heartfelt advice/admissions Brendan was giving. and oh how I wish high schoolers everywhere could have this conveyed to them ... very well put! lovely for the storyline, lovely for the real world.
12/13/2011 c1 
1blueeyedprincess100
Hey I LOVE YOUR STORY. I had a thought you could do a sequel where Jason feels like he want to kill himself again. Remember that episode he ran in front of the car. He could speak to Brendan instead or have him get hit by the car and Brendan is there to speak to him.
1blueeyedprincess100Hey I LOVE YOUR STORY. I had a thought you could do a sequel where Jason feels like he want to kill himself again. Remember that episode he ran in front of the car. He could speak to Brendan instead or have him get hit by the car and Brendan is there to speak to him.
9/3/2011 c1 131FemaleSpock
The fic itself is good; the story is very interesting and the characterisation is well done. However, there are quite a few grammatical errors, perhaps you could get your next fic beta-ed?
131FemaleSpockThe fic itself is good; the story is very interesting and the characterisation is well done. However, there are quite a few grammatical errors, perhaps you could get your next fic beta-ed?
9/1/2011 c1 22Empathist
The passages about self-harm were moving and insightful, and delicately handled. The idea that Jason should go to Brendan for advice is interesting and surprising, and Brendan's initial reaction is the one that we (but not Jason) would expect, so it was intriguing to see Brendan's thought process in coming round to the decision to talk to Jason again.
A very unusual, imaginative story.
22EmpathistThe passages about self-harm were moving and insightful, and delicately handled. The idea that Jason should go to Brendan for advice is interesting and surprising, and Brendan's initial reaction is the one that we (but not Jason) would expect, so it was intriguing to see Brendan's thought process in coming round to the decision to talk to Jason again.
A very unusual, imaginative story.
8/31/2011 c1 17GirlWednesday
This piece of serious writing shows your potential as a writer you have managed to write about two topics suicide and self halm with tact and sensitivity which I have written about suicide myself and I found it extremely difficult as you need to make it readable as not to upset the reader.
You have potrayed the emotion of fear angst and lonlieness perfectly. Admittedly this story did come as a shock after reading your previous fics however its still good all the same . Good luck with any future work
17GirlWednesdayThis piece of serious writing shows your potential as a writer you have managed to write about two topics suicide and self halm with tact and sensitivity which I have written about suicide myself and I found it extremely difficult as you need to make it readable as not to upset the reader.
You have potrayed the emotion of fear angst and lonlieness perfectly. Admittedly this story did come as a shock after reading your previous fics however its still good all the same . Good luck with any future work
8/31/2011 c1 2HollyoaksBitchh
Jason n brendan, I like it actually :) wil their b more chapters? Xx hope so :) xx
2HollyoaksBitchhJason n brendan, I like it actually :) wil their b more chapters? Xx hope so :) xx