for Unexpected9/7/2011 c1 
13Miss Dare
Ahh, that was a sweet one! :) I felt so sorry for Peter, he seems to always be the one who get's hurt in all the stories - because he is so kind and generous. And here you give him a new beggining. I really enjoyed it!
And I LOVED that bit (hot and emotional!):
"Tell me to stop."
"No."
"I didn't bring you here for this."
"I know."
"You don't owe me anything."
Mike's lips fluttered against Peter's. "I want this. I do."
I really want to know now what happened in between - why did Jasper return to Edward, how is their relationship progressing? Bet it is not all roses! :) Please write :)
MD
13Miss DareAhh, that was a sweet one! :) I felt so sorry for Peter, he seems to always be the one who get's hurt in all the stories - because he is so kind and generous. And here you give him a new beggining. I really enjoyed it!
And I LOVED that bit (hot and emotional!):
"Tell me to stop."
"No."
"I didn't bring you here for this."
"I know."
"You don't owe me anything."
Mike's lips fluttered against Peter's. "I want this. I do."
I really want to know now what happened in between - why did Jasper return to Edward, how is their relationship progressing? Bet it is not all roses! :) Please write :)
MD
9/7/2011 c1 VAVikingGirl
I loved this fic. Talk about 'love for the unloved'. I liked the focus on Peter and your Mike being so sweet and innocent. I really hope that you will continue this after the contest, as this really felt like a first chapter to a good fic. I'm subbing to it, just in case. :)
I loved this fic. Talk about 'love for the unloved'. I liked the focus on Peter and your Mike being so sweet and innocent. I really hope that you will continue this after the contest, as this really felt like a first chapter to a good fic. I'm subbing to it, just in case. :)
9/7/2011 c1 twilightbloom
Great story!
Really like the way you developed the characters and the story in a short time frame; for me, that's one of the signs of great writing so, kudos to you.
I have a secret crush on Peter and really like the way you've made this character your own. Excellent little story-good luck!
Great story!
Really like the way you developed the characters and the story in a short time frame; for me, that's one of the signs of great writing so, kudos to you.
I have a secret crush on Peter and really like the way you've made this character your own. Excellent little story-good luck!
9/6/2011 c1 21JasperLuver48
omg this was so awesome! I loved it, poor Mike... I hate James so much for making Mike feel like ** and Poor Peter for loving Jasper so much and being broken...
This pairing is unusual but it works for me! Will there be more after the contest is over? If so, let me know!
xoxo
21JasperLuver48omg this was so awesome! I loved it, poor Mike... I hate James so much for making Mike feel like ** and Poor Peter for loving Jasper so much and being broken...
This pairing is unusual but it works for me! Will there be more after the contest is over? If so, let me know!
xoxo
9/6/2011 c1 4Melooza
I love that it was something as simple as breakfast that gave Mike hope. Sex wouldn't/won't solve his problem. I think these to can both help and heal one another.
Well done. :)
4MeloozaI love that it was something as simple as breakfast that gave Mike hope. Sex wouldn't/won't solve his problem. I think these to can both help and heal one another.
Well done. :)
9/6/2011 c1 17shoefreak37
Awwwww, Mike! How adorable was this? Very! What a unique pairing. Well done and good luck in the contest.
17shoefreak37Awwwww, Mike! How adorable was this? Very! What a unique pairing. Well done and good luck in the contest.
9/6/2011 c1 34ICMezzo
Interesting pairing. I'm glad that Peter could see that Mike was in trouble and be of assistance. Mike has long road ahead of him. Nice job. -ICM
34ICMezzoInteresting pairing. I'm glad that Peter could see that Mike was in trouble and be of assistance. Mike has long road ahead of him. Nice job. -ICM
9/6/2011 c1 flutterfli
Very sweet. Sounds like they both learned a little from each other. No one should be made to feel the way James did Mike. Thanks for sharing.
Very sweet. Sounds like they both learned a little from each other. No one should be made to feel the way James did Mike. Thanks for sharing.
9/6/2011 c1 Grizzo
Hey I liked this. Glad Peter decided to be honest with himself, therefore opening himself up to a possible great relationship with Mike. thx...gr
Hey I liked this. Glad Peter decided to be honest with himself, therefore opening himself up to a possible great relationship with Mike. thx...gr