for The Camping Trip6/5/2012 c1 
4Rocketfist
I like the character atmosphere and tension you create, but for something so thought out, DANG MAN. Do you at least READ your story to make sure grammar is good to go before you post?
4RocketfistI like the character atmosphere and tension you create, but for something so thought out, DANG MAN. Do you at least READ your story to make sure grammar is good to go before you post?
4/24/2012 c1 7dragonbeast99
Hehe, you know there is disaster on the way when you have to stick Ragna and Jin together! Nice work dude! Its not written to bad, just a little more improvement with grammar and such and this would be perfect. Good work.
7dragonbeast99Hehe, you know there is disaster on the way when you have to stick Ragna and Jin together! Nice work dude! Its not written to bad, just a little more improvement with grammar and such and this would be perfect. Good work.
2/7/2012 c1 BIBOTOT
The "I" is written in capital form. Also, cut your paragraph when in conversation. That way it'll be much easier o follow.
The "I" is written in capital form. Also, cut your paragraph when in conversation. That way it'll be much easier o follow.