for A Future for Hyrule6/12/2012 c1 
2Dreamss
Wow. This story was very well written...And I like the personality you gave Ganondorf. 2 thumbs up.
2DreamssWow. This story was very well written...And I like the personality you gave Ganondorf. 2 thumbs up.
1/23/2012 c1 8Phyllis Joy Wolfe
Wow. I nearly cried. Creative ending I must say. Enjoyed very much. ^_^
8Phyllis Joy WolfeWow. I nearly cried. Creative ending I must say. Enjoyed very much. ^_^
11/6/2011 c1 1Theodore Hastings
I'm not sure if you're aware of this, but you've written a story about change.
Ganon is a man living in the past. In Wind Waker he lives with his regrets of not being strong enough. Not being able to "grasp the Wind of Hyrule", which is a metaphor in and of itself. He has lived in his past for so many centuries that he has come to hate his desire for Hyrule. He hates the Triforce, he hates the Sea, he hates the change. Ganon lives so much in the past that he cannot tell the difference between Zelda and Link of his time, and the two children with him now. They all look the same to him.
Link symbolizes the reality of Ganon's situation: that the world has changed, and Hyrule is forever lost underneath the sea. His plans will be defeated, just like it has been so many times before, and the princess will be rescued. The world will always change, but the interactions between the three Chosen by the Gods will remain immortal and unaltered.
Zelda is the happy medium between the two extremes. She wishes change back to Ganon's world, yet also wants to remain the same. She is caught defending both sides; an interesting perspective, seeing how she is almost always completely on Link's side. One could say that she is the reason this change from Sea to Land is allowed to happen, for she does nothing to stop it.
Finally Ganon gets his wish granted, and now the roles are reversed. Suddenly Ganon is the one who symbolizes reality, and Link is the one in denial. Ganon no longer lets his past control him, which is seen when he spares Link's life out of pity. Link on the other hand, is lead solely by his desire for things to go back to the way it was.
Through a minor tweak in a video game's plot line, you have developed a unique and fascinating message: that sometimes the only way to move forward, is to take a step back. Ganon is no longer the horrible tyrant of Ocarina of Time, even though he intended to be. This is the kind of story professionals write! It has a superficial plot that anyone can understand (what if Ganon won the final battle) but holds a deeper meaning that is universal to every reader (change is inevitable). These are the kinds of stories I try to write, and they are the kind of stories I love to read. Even though you are only fourteen, you truly have the potential to write amazing things, far beyond the limited range of fanfiction. I have favorited this story as well as you. I truly look forward to whatever you write; you are definitely one of my favorite writers here, and it almost makes me embarrassed that you're five years my junior.
Sincerely,
Theodore "Theo" Hastings
1Theodore HastingsI'm not sure if you're aware of this, but you've written a story about change.
Ganon is a man living in the past. In Wind Waker he lives with his regrets of not being strong enough. Not being able to "grasp the Wind of Hyrule", which is a metaphor in and of itself. He has lived in his past for so many centuries that he has come to hate his desire for Hyrule. He hates the Triforce, he hates the Sea, he hates the change. Ganon lives so much in the past that he cannot tell the difference between Zelda and Link of his time, and the two children with him now. They all look the same to him.
Link symbolizes the reality of Ganon's situation: that the world has changed, and Hyrule is forever lost underneath the sea. His plans will be defeated, just like it has been so many times before, and the princess will be rescued. The world will always change, but the interactions between the three Chosen by the Gods will remain immortal and unaltered.
Zelda is the happy medium between the two extremes. She wishes change back to Ganon's world, yet also wants to remain the same. She is caught defending both sides; an interesting perspective, seeing how she is almost always completely on Link's side. One could say that she is the reason this change from Sea to Land is allowed to happen, for she does nothing to stop it.
Finally Ganon gets his wish granted, and now the roles are reversed. Suddenly Ganon is the one who symbolizes reality, and Link is the one in denial. Ganon no longer lets his past control him, which is seen when he spares Link's life out of pity. Link on the other hand, is lead solely by his desire for things to go back to the way it was.
Through a minor tweak in a video game's plot line, you have developed a unique and fascinating message: that sometimes the only way to move forward, is to take a step back. Ganon is no longer the horrible tyrant of Ocarina of Time, even though he intended to be. This is the kind of story professionals write! It has a superficial plot that anyone can understand (what if Ganon won the final battle) but holds a deeper meaning that is universal to every reader (change is inevitable). These are the kinds of stories I try to write, and they are the kind of stories I love to read. Even though you are only fourteen, you truly have the potential to write amazing things, far beyond the limited range of fanfiction. I have favorited this story as well as you. I truly look forward to whatever you write; you are definitely one of my favorite writers here, and it almost makes me embarrassed that you're five years my junior.
Sincerely,
Theodore "Theo" Hastings
9/24/2011 c1 Lilly Sheikah
I really like this! I love it when people show a different side to such a bad character. And I also highly enjoy the soft spot Ganondorf has for Zelda ;) Great writing!
I really like this! I love it when people show a different side to such a bad character. And I also highly enjoy the soft spot Ganondorf has for Zelda ;) Great writing!
9/18/2011 c1 8TwilightWakerofTime
That was very good. :) I loved it. I like how Ganondorf felt such sympathy for Link. I'm almost disappointed that this is a oneshot...
There's just one constructive point of critique I'd like to give you. Decide what point of view you'll be writing in for the whole story, and stick with it. It's just that at the beginning (and throughout most of the story) it was from Ganondorf's point of view, with his thoughts and his feelings. But then you added in one paragraph of Link's thoughts, and it seemed a bit out of place. It's okay to change points of view, just don't make it so sudden. ;) But other than that, I noticed no grammar or spelling errors and your writing style is great. Fantastic work!
Anyway - you said this was from another project of yours? Is there any chance you might publish that here any time soon?
8TwilightWakerofTimeThat was very good. :) I loved it. I like how Ganondorf felt such sympathy for Link. I'm almost disappointed that this is a oneshot...
There's just one constructive point of critique I'd like to give you. Decide what point of view you'll be writing in for the whole story, and stick with it. It's just that at the beginning (and throughout most of the story) it was from Ganondorf's point of view, with his thoughts and his feelings. But then you added in one paragraph of Link's thoughts, and it seemed a bit out of place. It's okay to change points of view, just don't make it so sudden. ;) But other than that, I noticed no grammar or spelling errors and your writing style is great. Fantastic work!
Anyway - you said this was from another project of yours? Is there any chance you might publish that here any time soon?