7/14/2012 c4 28An Angel Flying with broken wings
Good job Rinu

5/3/2012 c2 People
I really like how this is going. Your idea makes me smile at how he found him and the way they're conversing at each other. It seems like you have their personality in your hands...

However, there IS one big problem in this story. You grammar needs some work. I want to enjoy a good story without having to struggle reading it. Some words were misspelled, other words were completely replaced, punctuation was missing in a TON of sentences, etc. Without proper grammar and run-ons, I feel like they never stop talking. The mood and tone would be hard to grasp because of the distracting, incorrect grammar. :/

I understand if you have a few mistakes, but this is giving me a small headache... Is English your primary language? If not, then you have an excuse, but I hope you're improving at it.

Don't get me wrong; I love your idea. :) Continue updating; however, PLEASE improve the grammar. Just the grammar. ;)

10/23/2011 c2 4Reflective Reviewer 7
I'm Hooked! Please update soon, this story has me enthralled! ^_^

RR7