for Love and War7/5/2012 c9 
2Thelittlemonster17
Dude, this story is in third person. First person is using only one persons view point. Meaning thoughts and diolouge that a character says is usually described with the word I. Second person is using the word you. And third is using the word(s) he and/or she. In this story you tend to accidentally write in first person. I suggest you go over your chapters and fix the places where the view point is switched.
2Thelittlemonster17Dude, this story is in third person. First person is using only one persons view point. Meaning thoughts and diolouge that a character says is usually described with the word I. Second person is using the word you. And third is using the word(s) he and/or she. In this story you tend to accidentally write in first person. I suggest you go over your chapters and fix the places where the view point is switched.
6/17/2012 c10 1chantierra10
I have to say i am very pleased this the first story i have read for this cuple and im already loving it! 3 :D XOXO
1chantierra10I have to say i am very pleased this the first story i have read for this cuple and im already loving it! 3 :D XOXO
5/1/2012 c8 Lily.the.flower
ahhh, The message didn't display my email... well, you can contact me via fanfiction, I guess
ahhh, The message didn't display my email... well, you can contact me via fanfiction, I guess
5/1/2012 c9 Lily.the.flower
Hello!
I can help you with your POVs. Send me an email to
I'm willing to help because I find your story interesting.
Hello!
I can help you with your POVs. Send me an email to
I'm willing to help because I find your story interesting.
2/17/2012 c8 5Jolly jamacian janitor
they don't even have to dress up for role play, just stroll on into eachothers tents and have silly sex talk, also I don't trust philip... too many p's in his name, thats NEVER a good sign. I love how John is the only one who truely understands Sherlock's need to upstand everyone in a conversation. OH MY GOD JOHN WAS SHOT, PRECIOUS PRECIOUS JOHN, sorry had to seeth when I read that one., but it gave Sherlock the perfect oppertunity to show how musclely he could be, carrying his man all heroic but really he's dying inside, because... John was shot... un-fatally and SHERLOCK CARES 3 awwweee. Personal shout out? thankyouthankyou, beautiful love scene and it's immediately followed up by injury *CLAPS RIDICULOUSLY ENTHUSIATIC*
John's words caused heat to travel to Sherlock's cheeks, but he pushed the blush away. "That is romantic twaddle, Watson. There can be no 'feelings' save lust before you even know who I am," Sherlock stated, though if he were honest, he had felt much the same way. Since Watson first showed Sherlock his intelligence, Sherlock's feelings had become stronger and stronger.
John laughed slightly, "May we just lay here? No more talking?"
Johns sweet and subtle way of saying shut-up, you know you love me.
-Jolly Jamacian Janitor
it's as consistantly gorgeous as always Savannah, and as such great material it is my duty to read/and scriggle (scream giggle) I'm not sure how to pronouce that BUT I WILL CONTINUE DOING SO. Lovely work madam, I exceed excitement when I say KEEP IT UP MY LOVELY SLASH BROTHER FROM ANOTHER MOTHER. OR SISTER FROM ANOTHERE MISTER.
5Jolly jamacian janitorthey don't even have to dress up for role play, just stroll on into eachothers tents and have silly sex talk, also I don't trust philip... too many p's in his name, thats NEVER a good sign. I love how John is the only one who truely understands Sherlock's need to upstand everyone in a conversation. OH MY GOD JOHN WAS SHOT, PRECIOUS PRECIOUS JOHN, sorry had to seeth when I read that one., but it gave Sherlock the perfect oppertunity to show how musclely he could be, carrying his man all heroic but really he's dying inside, because... John was shot... un-fatally and SHERLOCK CARES 3 awwweee. Personal shout out? thankyouthankyou, beautiful love scene and it's immediately followed up by injury *CLAPS RIDICULOUSLY ENTHUSIATIC*
John's words caused heat to travel to Sherlock's cheeks, but he pushed the blush away. "That is romantic twaddle, Watson. There can be no 'feelings' save lust before you even know who I am," Sherlock stated, though if he were honest, he had felt much the same way. Since Watson first showed Sherlock his intelligence, Sherlock's feelings had become stronger and stronger.
John laughed slightly, "May we just lay here? No more talking?"
Johns sweet and subtle way of saying shut-up, you know you love me.
-Jolly Jamacian Janitor
it's as consistantly gorgeous as always Savannah, and as such great material it is my duty to read/and scriggle (scream giggle) I'm not sure how to pronouce that BUT I WILL CONTINUE DOING SO. Lovely work madam, I exceed excitement when I say KEEP IT UP MY LOVELY SLASH BROTHER FROM ANOTHER MOTHER. OR SISTER FROM ANOTHERE MISTER.
2/5/2012 c1 12Molahsurey
This is really good writing! I like it a lot. Just one thing though...instead of saying 'his self' say 'himself'. ^_^
12MolahsureyThis is really good writing! I like it a lot. Just one thing though...instead of saying 'his self' say 'himself'. ^_^
2/5/2012 c8 280icrazy80
This was really good, I like how you included John's leg injury. I wonder sense it was an enemy that came up to him and shot him if he would have to make a report or something about the incident. To give them clues on how to find the guy. John and Sherlock's kissing was sweet, make sure you update soon please. I'm glad you're feeling better now and are out of the hospital :D
280icrazy80This was really good, I like how you included John's leg injury. I wonder sense it was an enemy that came up to him and shot him if he would have to make a report or something about the incident. To give them clues on how to find the guy. John and Sherlock's kissing was sweet, make sure you update soon please. I'm glad you're feeling better now and are out of the hospital :D
1/1/2012 c7 5Jolly jamacian janitor
John can really rebound. Damn man, thats too funny. I can't describe through the internet the hilarity of Mary insignificance. God she litterally got two letters to live in and half a chapter of grief. I loved it, it honestly didn't get grossly sentimental about her death and if you had've we'd all read it (but not really care). Her death was convenient if anything else and you left us on some kind of cliff hanger.
We all know their going to have (dirty gay sex) else where,
BUT WHERE!
Thank you SAVANNAH keep writing
5Jolly jamacian janitorJohn can really rebound. Damn man, thats too funny. I can't describe through the internet the hilarity of Mary insignificance. God she litterally got two letters to live in and half a chapter of grief. I loved it, it honestly didn't get grossly sentimental about her death and if you had've we'd all read it (but not really care). Her death was convenient if anything else and you left us on some kind of cliff hanger.
We all know their going to have (dirty gay sex) else where,
BUT WHERE!
Thank you SAVANNAH keep writing
1/1/2012 c7 80icrazy80
Dude when I saw you updated to chapter 5 I was like "Aweeeessssssooooommmmmeeee" and so I read it and I loved it. Then I saw that you updated to chapter 7 and I as like. * faints * of course then I woke up and read chapter 6 and 7. Thank-you so much for updating this story is fantastic! Update soon and Happy 2012 ! *~*~*
Dude when I saw you updated to chapter 5 I was like "Aweeeessssssooooommmmmeeee" and so I read it and I loved it. Then I saw that you updated to chapter 7 and I as like. * faints * of course then I woke up and read chapter 6 and 7. Thank-you so much for updating this story is fantastic! Update soon and Happy 2012 ! *~*~*
12/30/2011 c3 Jolly jamacian janitor
YAYA, thank you very much for your blessed work. It does rotate from 3rd to 1st person, but I'm enjoying it to damn much to get hung up over perspective. I love it, I anticipate the next chapter with just... a ** load of anxiety. THIS IS AWESOME. And it happens sometimes people forsake their own stories but don't ever leave love and war unfinished. It's brilliant, thank you again.
YAYA, thank you very much for your blessed work. It does rotate from 3rd to 1st person, but I'm enjoying it to damn much to get hung up over perspective. I love it, I anticipate the next chapter with just... a ** load of anxiety. THIS IS AWESOME. And it happens sometimes people forsake their own stories but don't ever leave love and war unfinished. It's brilliant, thank you again.
12/23/2011 c3 280icrazy80
Lol I was like "YES!" when I saw that you updated this. Ha, sorry for the same review twice last chapter that was an accident. This is outstanding lol I'm so happy you updated you, its like an extra awesome early Christmas present ^.^ Thank-you for dedicating this chapter to me :D Also, thank you so very much for making new chapter on your fantastic story and for getting to work on the next. Happy Holidays! As your present I am giving you the "Best Shwatsonlock Writer" award. Congratulations and a Happy New Year!
280icrazy80Lol I was like "YES!" when I saw that you updated this. Ha, sorry for the same review twice last chapter that was an accident. This is outstanding lol I'm so happy you updated you, its like an extra awesome early Christmas present ^.^ Thank-you for dedicating this chapter to me :D Also, thank you so very much for making new chapter on your fantastic story and for getting to work on the next. Happy Holidays! As your present I am giving you the "Best Shwatsonlock Writer" award. Congratulations and a Happy New Year!
11/19/2011 c2 80icrazy80
Llllooovvvveeeee it. Dude seriously update soon you had a brilliant idea, I wonder what those M chapters well be about. Hmmm?
;) U P D A T E. S O O N. (as in right now or this week. Or on Thanksgiving like you were giving us a Turkey. You should make a Thanksgiving chapter ) 3 update please. I though this was 4 chapters when it ended at the second I was like ='(
Llllooovvvveeeee it. Dude seriously update soon you had a brilliant idea, I wonder what those M chapters well be about. Hmmm?
;) U P D A T E. S O O N. (as in right now or this week. Or on Thanksgiving like you were giving us a Turkey. You should make a Thanksgiving chapter ) 3 update please. I though this was 4 chapters when it ended at the second I was like ='(