for A Broken Trust1/4 c1 
53Flames101
I really enjoyed this. Rossi's quick acceptance of Emily being back in the show felt a bit strange to me... So this story sort of filled in the blanks for me.
Loved the details at the beginning about the setting and then how you wrote Emily coming into the bar. I really could picture it all in my head.
Nice job!
53Flames101I really enjoyed this. Rossi's quick acceptance of Emily being back in the show felt a bit strange to me... So this story sort of filled in the blanks for me.
Loved the details at the beginning about the setting and then how you wrote Emily coming into the bar. I really could picture it all in my head.
Nice job!
10/29/2011 c1 66Graveygraves
Sorry it has taken so long to read this, but I think you made a great use of the prompt and I am really interested in Rossi's reaction as I haven't read many.
66GraveygravesSorry it has taken so long to read this, but I think you made a great use of the prompt and I am really interested in Rossi's reaction as I haven't read many.
10/1/2011 c1 106nebula2
A very insightful piece. I think you captured Rossi very well and like this reaction from him. While I think he'd except things better than Reid and Morgan I can see him still being hurt by being kept in the dark.
I like your use of the prompt. It flowed into the story very well. Also, great job at painting the setting and atmosphere for the story. I had to read over the description of Dave indicating to Emily taking the seat next to him a couple of times but that was an issue with me not you. Most of the bars I've been have stools without arms, so here I was trying to figure out how he could rest his elbow on the seat - lol - silly me. My brain was skipping over the word arm I guess.
I liked the ending and Emily's thoughts about taking baby-steps. It shows her awareness of how things are affecting those in her life and not just thinking about herself.
Forgive me for pointing these out here and not in a PM(I'm being lazy) but:
- The teams worked - was that suppose to be team?
- their team the relied - that
- Dave stopped her by hold - holding
106nebula2A very insightful piece. I think you captured Rossi very well and like this reaction from him. While I think he'd except things better than Reid and Morgan I can see him still being hurt by being kept in the dark.
I like your use of the prompt. It flowed into the story very well. Also, great job at painting the setting and atmosphere for the story. I had to read over the description of Dave indicating to Emily taking the seat next to him a couple of times but that was an issue with me not you. Most of the bars I've been have stools without arms, so here I was trying to figure out how he could rest his elbow on the seat - lol - silly me. My brain was skipping over the word arm I guess.
I liked the ending and Emily's thoughts about taking baby-steps. It shows her awareness of how things are affecting those in her life and not just thinking about herself.
Forgive me for pointing these out here and not in a PM(I'm being lazy) but:
- The teams worked - was that suppose to be team?
- their team the relied - that
- Dave stopped her by hold - holding
9/30/2011 c1 p95000
One thing I like about Rossi he always tells it like it is whether you like or not. I could see this happening between Emily and Rossi.
One thing I like about Rossi he always tells it like it is whether you like or not. I could see this happening between Emily and Rossi.