for Poison12/24/2011 c1 
24sefina
You got Shiori so well here. And I liked the way she saw Utena and Juri as being the same, how she uses Utena in that moment. Very nicely done.
24sefinaYou got Shiori so well here. And I liked the way she saw Utena and Juri as being the same, how she uses Utena in that moment. Very nicely done.
10/7/2011 c1 38Aurora-Borealis Coyote
This had a really strong impact. It can be hard to get into Shiori's head but this was really well done.
"Shiori hurts and Shiori can't bring herself to bring out any frustration she feels with Juri, so Utena has to do." Oh, that line is just...that's definitley a very accurate observation on Shiori, how even though she felt hatred towards Juri, she let the hatred build up. The end makes me feel like Shiori is making some kind of a plan. :)
38Aurora-Borealis CoyoteThis had a really strong impact. It can be hard to get into Shiori's head but this was really well done.
"Shiori hurts and Shiori can't bring herself to bring out any frustration she feels with Juri, so Utena has to do." Oh, that line is just...that's definitley a very accurate observation on Shiori, how even though she felt hatred towards Juri, she let the hatred build up. The end makes me feel like Shiori is making some kind of a plan. :)
10/3/2011 c1 6Onyx Gallan
An interesting start for a story or whatever piece this is. Let me know if you are updating. I don't know what the Utena is about, but I can tell you that you have a very strong beginning. I'm also curious as to what you meant when you italicized some of the words like hates, her, obvious, angry and that sort of thing. I can tell that Shiori (hope I spelled it right) dislikes this Utena character a lot. And the kiss kind of threw me off. Anyway, I hope this review helps you in someway. I look forward to reading more of it.
6Onyx GallanAn interesting start for a story or whatever piece this is. Let me know if you are updating. I don't know what the Utena is about, but I can tell you that you have a very strong beginning. I'm also curious as to what you meant when you italicized some of the words like hates, her, obvious, angry and that sort of thing. I can tell that Shiori (hope I spelled it right) dislikes this Utena character a lot. And the kiss kind of threw me off. Anyway, I hope this review helps you in someway. I look forward to reading more of it.
10/3/2011 c1 125Hikaru Morinaga
I don't know why, but the last line strikes a chord in me. I can FEEL her sense of accomplishing something, of her saying, "Take that!" without putting it into words. Her being defiant, saying to Juri, "I don't need you," without needing to say it.
In short I loved this.
125Hikaru MorinagaI don't know why, but the last line strikes a chord in me. I can FEEL her sense of accomplishing something, of her saying, "Take that!" without putting it into words. Her being defiant, saying to Juri, "I don't need you," without needing to say it.
In short I loved this.