for Temptation10/17/2011 c3 
6Rei Uta
Hmm...
I rather liked the way you described Dr Sloth to sound like an almost, normal individual. It provides reason as to why DeSoni would be taken in.
Furthermore, I like the way you made DeSoni sound like he was actually having fun with the whole process and how he hacked into Jhudora's bank account. xD
That one gave me a little laugh. xD
6Rei UtaHmm...
I rather liked the way you described Dr Sloth to sound like an almost, normal individual. It provides reason as to why DeSoni would be taken in.
Furthermore, I like the way you made DeSoni sound like he was actually having fun with the whole process and how he hacked into Jhudora's bank account. xD
That one gave me a little laugh. xD
10/17/2011 c2 Rei Uta
I like the way the dark voice slowly convinced DeSoni to act out of character and the insults against Rocky. It plays out logically and the way DeSoni tried to defend Rocky but failing to do so after some time actually hints that the effects of the ring are slowly starting to work on him.
Great job!
I like the way the dark voice slowly convinced DeSoni to act out of character and the insults against Rocky. It plays out logically and the way DeSoni tried to defend Rocky but failing to do so after some time actually hints that the effects of the ring are slowly starting to work on him.
Great job!
10/17/2011 c1 Rei Uta
Poor DeSoni...
The way you wrote really expressed all of DeSoni's negative emotions and the reasons behind them nicely. In fact, I like the way you made him blame himself and used all those names in the front. They same to futher emphasis the negative state of his mind.
Great job!
Poor DeSoni...
The way you wrote really expressed all of DeSoni's negative emotions and the reasons behind them nicely. In fact, I like the way you made him blame himself and used all those names in the front. They same to futher emphasis the negative state of his mind.
Great job!
10/8/2011 c2 7KatiaSwift
Uh-oh.
DESONI! NOOOOOOOO! YOU CAN'T DO THIS! *falls to the ground weeping* well, still... I won't be THAT dramatic, but you get the idea. ;-) He really is acting like Terra... in a way. Sort of. His mind is being corrupted! GET THAT RING OFF HIM!
Oh, this is getting better and better by the second! THANK YOU!
Don't let the rabid mutant Feepits bite!
~Katia, Your Biggest Fan~
7KatiaSwiftUh-oh.
DESONI! NOOOOOOOO! YOU CAN'T DO THIS! *falls to the ground weeping* well, still... I won't be THAT dramatic, but you get the idea. ;-) He really is acting like Terra... in a way. Sort of. His mind is being corrupted! GET THAT RING OFF HIM!
Oh, this is getting better and better by the second! THANK YOU!
Don't let the rabid mutant Feepits bite!
~Katia, Your Biggest Fan~
10/7/2011 c1 KatiaSwift
YESSSSSSS! FINALLY! ANOTHER DESONI STORY! I HAVE BEEN WAITING FOR THIS MOMENT... well, ever since I discovered who DeSoni was. I'm so happy!
Pretty angsty... I like it, though! Is this the first chapter, or a oneshot? I hope it's just the first chapter, 'cause I like it already... DeSoni's introduction was great. Reminds me of the beginning of the Teen Titans episode "Aftershock, Part II" (if you've ever seen it- if not, I recommend it highly) with Terra's introduction.
Thanks so, so much, again, for this great story! I'm working on more fanart, but the homework is adding up... ;-)
Thanks again! I'm so happy... I think I'll do a little dance! ;-D
Don't let the rabid mutant Feepits bite!
~Katia~
YESSSSSSS! FINALLY! ANOTHER DESONI STORY! I HAVE BEEN WAITING FOR THIS MOMENT... well, ever since I discovered who DeSoni was. I'm so happy!
Pretty angsty... I like it, though! Is this the first chapter, or a oneshot? I hope it's just the first chapter, 'cause I like it already... DeSoni's introduction was great. Reminds me of the beginning of the Teen Titans episode "Aftershock, Part II" (if you've ever seen it- if not, I recommend it highly) with Terra's introduction.
Thanks so, so much, again, for this great story! I'm working on more fanart, but the homework is adding up... ;-)
Thanks again! I'm so happy... I think I'll do a little dance! ;-D
Don't let the rabid mutant Feepits bite!
~Katia~