for If today was your last day7/23/2012 c1 
1Yuki082
this sounds really good but i feel like it would be better if you either cut your summary a little at the end or cut it all together and just put in a little extra scene at the beginning. you wouldnt even have to specify that it was merlin he was taking care of you could have them all in the room when she freaks out or just specify at the end exactly what morgana did after you reveal its merlin who's comatose
Yuki
1Yuki082this sounds really good but i feel like it would be better if you either cut your summary a little at the end or cut it all together and just put in a little extra scene at the beginning. you wouldnt even have to specify that it was merlin he was taking care of you could have them all in the room when she freaks out or just specify at the end exactly what morgana did after you reveal its merlin who's comatose
Yuki
10/15/2011 c1 schnabel
please, please - I really think that summary is interesting, and I'm really not a grammar nazi - but please make at least an effort of spelling the names of the main characters right ... otherwise it's just hard to read.
please, please - I really think that summary is interesting, and I'm really not a grammar nazi - but please make at least an effort of spelling the names of the main characters right ... otherwise it's just hard to read.
10/15/2011 c3 reviewingcookie
Wow! I love this story! There aren't a lot of stories out there that centre on arthur so I think this is great!x
Wow! I love this story! There aren't a lot of stories out there that centre on arthur so I think this is great!x
10/15/2011 c2 k.jasperson
ok so that was a good start but you sould continu it
ok so that was a good start but you sould continu it
10/15/2011 c2 Arnia
please write more! I really like it!
please write more! I really like it!
10/14/2011 c2 Gwen
Great Chapter! I love it!:-)
Great Chapter! I love it!:-)
10/14/2011 c2 LyssaGibbs15
Ooooooo! I love the bromantic love coming from Arthur! It made me "awwwwww"
Can't wait for more,
Lyssa :-)
Ooooooo! I love the bromantic love coming from Arthur! It made me "awwwwww"
Can't wait for more,
Lyssa :-)
10/14/2011 c2 LyssaGibbs15
Ooooooo! I love the bromantic love coming from Arthur! It made me "awwwwww"
Can't wait for more,
Lyssa :-)
Ooooooo! I love the bromantic love coming from Arthur! It made me "awwwwww"
Can't wait for more,
Lyssa :-)
10/12/2011 c1 PeacefulHeart
Great beginning, I can't wait for the rest. You have come a long way since your first story. You always had good ideas and a wonderful imagination and this is coming out better and better. The only tips I would give you are you have a tendency to use phrases like "the unknown person" or just "the person". I understand you are going for a bit of mystery, but it reads (at least to me)clumsy and distracting. Better to use creative words to describe the character like you did in the last sentence.
I envy you your talent. I never think anything I write is good enough to put out there.
Great beginning, I can't wait for the rest. You have come a long way since your first story. You always had good ideas and a wonderful imagination and this is coming out better and better. The only tips I would give you are you have a tendency to use phrases like "the unknown person" or just "the person". I understand you are going for a bit of mystery, but it reads (at least to me)clumsy and distracting. Better to use creative words to describe the character like you did in the last sentence.
I envy you your talent. I never think anything I write is good enough to put out there.
10/12/2011 c1 Candi
Aww! Poor Merlin! Please update soon!
Aww! Poor Merlin! Please update soon!