for Daskar's Daughter7/25/2012 c7 Guest
Please write before I hire assasins(They're exspensive donchya know)
Please write before I hire assasins(They're exspensive donchya know)
12/18/2011 c6 
3v.ren55
Getting exciting and your descriptions are getting better! 'hatred pouring out of her eyes' shivers me timbers.
3v.ren55Getting exciting and your descriptions are getting better! 'hatred pouring out of her eyes' shivers me timbers.
11/20/2011 c4 21Ceu Praca
I think it's awesome so far! :D You're doing a great job with this one, Tiria. Luke and Martin are in the same place, bu don't know it! It's ironic, funny, and suspenseful. Thanks for making Ranguvar Foeseeker live, Tiria.
21Ceu PracaI think it's awesome so far! :D You're doing a great job with this one, Tiria. Luke and Martin are in the same place, bu don't know it! It's ironic, funny, and suspenseful. Thanks for making Ranguvar Foeseeker live, Tiria.
10/16/2011 c2 4Kai the Mad
I assume Theran is Vilu's daughter. Different, I must say, since I've only ever seen characters related to Cluny or Martin and Rose, and it's a nice change to see another canon character get a relative.
I also have this bizarre feeling that Theran and Badrang are going to meet up eventually and depending on Theran's age and whether or not they're related, I'm going to see Canon/Oc, but that's just me. I happen to really like Badrang.
Now onto a real critique:
You're using apostrophes instead of quotation marks, not THAT big of a deal, but to some people it can be very annoying to see something like this. Also, your chapters are very short, and not very well detailed, however where it IS described is very easy to see in your head.
So really you just need a little more detail and to use quotation marks around dialogue.
Other than that, I'm looking forward to seeing more of this story.
~Kai
4Kai the MadI assume Theran is Vilu's daughter. Different, I must say, since I've only ever seen characters related to Cluny or Martin and Rose, and it's a nice change to see another canon character get a relative.
I also have this bizarre feeling that Theran and Badrang are going to meet up eventually and depending on Theran's age and whether or not they're related, I'm going to see Canon/Oc, but that's just me. I happen to really like Badrang.
Now onto a real critique:
You're using apostrophes instead of quotation marks, not THAT big of a deal, but to some people it can be very annoying to see something like this. Also, your chapters are very short, and not very well detailed, however where it IS described is very easy to see in your head.
So really you just need a little more detail and to use quotation marks around dialogue.
Other than that, I'm looking forward to seeing more of this story.
~Kai