for Someone to Love7/17/2012 c1 
1The Seven Horcruxes
Well, I can see why this came second! It's fantastic! I'm surprised it didn't come first! Number one must have snuck in there somehow, not that it detracts from this beautiful fic!
I have nothing to criticise, save for the fact that there isn't more! The characters are well developed, rounded: they all have flaws, which is tricky when you're writing in the persepective of a character who speaks about perceived flaws, the differentation is necessary and very well done here.
As a rather onorthadox suggestion, I would love to see a nice, long multichapter from the perspective of Susan: I think with the talents you have displayed here, you would do very well in constructing a believable world about characters we know very little about from the books. Maybe that's just the Harru/Susan shipper in me though, hoping you'll go down that route :P
Thank you very much for a fantastic read!
1The Seven HorcruxesWell, I can see why this came second! It's fantastic! I'm surprised it didn't come first! Number one must have snuck in there somehow, not that it detracts from this beautiful fic!
I have nothing to criticise, save for the fact that there isn't more! The characters are well developed, rounded: they all have flaws, which is tricky when you're writing in the persepective of a character who speaks about perceived flaws, the differentation is necessary and very well done here.
As a rather onorthadox suggestion, I would love to see a nice, long multichapter from the perspective of Susan: I think with the talents you have displayed here, you would do very well in constructing a believable world about characters we know very little about from the books. Maybe that's just the Harru/Susan shipper in me though, hoping you'll go down that route :P
Thank you very much for a fantastic read!
6/30/2012 c1 78Ralinde
Bittersweet and beautiful.
Poor Amelia, is must be hard to be the only one in the family without a love in her life, siblings and cousins are not the same, but you did a great job on making her acceptant of that fact. I love the way she interacts with Christopher and Anna (you're right, they did steal the show ;-)) and the part where she tries to make Anna say 'auntie Amelia' was very funny indeed. Just bribing her into that haha. Loved the reference to 'Auntie Am'.
The last part was really sad. I knew it was coming, but still. It's nice how you repeat the 'two months, one week and three days' because it accentuates the fact that she can't think about anything else anymore. Susan being born on her birthday is the best birthday present she could ever get and it softens the pain somewhat. A very suitable, bittersweet ending.
78RalindeBittersweet and beautiful.
Poor Amelia, is must be hard to be the only one in the family without a love in her life, siblings and cousins are not the same, but you did a great job on making her acceptant of that fact. I love the way she interacts with Christopher and Anna (you're right, they did steal the show ;-)) and the part where she tries to make Anna say 'auntie Amelia' was very funny indeed. Just bribing her into that haha. Loved the reference to 'Auntie Am'.
The last part was really sad. I knew it was coming, but still. It's nice how you repeat the 'two months, one week and three days' because it accentuates the fact that she can't think about anything else anymore. Susan being born on her birthday is the best birthday present she could ever get and it softens the pain somewhat. A very suitable, bittersweet ending.
6/29/2012 c1 46slightlysmall
Really, there should be a rule about letting us see how adorable kids are and then killing them off. Even if it's canon. Just saying... Anyway, you do a good job showing Amelia's misery and her envy for her brother as well as how that jealousy conflicted with genuine love. What a true sibling relationship. You do a fabulous job capturing the style of young children and "old maids". The repetition of 'two months one week and three days" works wonderfully and had me teary-eyed. And I love that Susan was born on her birthday, and that will make her birthdays better. Well done.
46slightlysmallReally, there should be a rule about letting us see how adorable kids are and then killing them off. Even if it's canon. Just saying... Anyway, you do a good job showing Amelia's misery and her envy for her brother as well as how that jealousy conflicted with genuine love. What a true sibling relationship. You do a fabulous job capturing the style of young children and "old maids". The repetition of 'two months one week and three days" works wonderfully and had me teary-eyed. And I love that Susan was born on her birthday, and that will make her birthdays better. Well done.
6/28/2012 c1 9MissSadieKane
This is a beautifully written oneshot. My favourite part is when Amelia is teaching her neice to talk. It's so cute. It's also really sad that those children died at such a young age.
I really like the amount of depth this goes into and I can really appreciate this because I find it difficult to do this for characters that hardly have any background in the books. All we know is that they were killed. I wasn't even sure what the relation was between Susan, Edgar and Amelia, when I first read the books. I really like how you've written them so I hope that's what it was like in cannon.
I know this is meant to be sibling rivalry, but there wasn't really much conflict. All I spotted was sort of more jokey conflict, like bribing the baby, and the letters. There were a lot of really lovely scenes between the three of them.
9MissSadieKaneThis is a beautifully written oneshot. My favourite part is when Amelia is teaching her neice to talk. It's so cute. It's also really sad that those children died at such a young age.
I really like the amount of depth this goes into and I can really appreciate this because I find it difficult to do this for characters that hardly have any background in the books. All we know is that they were killed. I wasn't even sure what the relation was between Susan, Edgar and Amelia, when I first read the books. I really like how you've written them so I hope that's what it was like in cannon.
I know this is meant to be sibling rivalry, but there wasn't really much conflict. All I spotted was sort of more jokey conflict, like bribing the baby, and the letters. There were a lot of really lovely scenes between the three of them.
1/3/2012 c1 40alohamora080
Oh Merlin, this made me cry. Loved the way you wrote the children and Auntie Amelia... oh, everything about it was absolutely lovely. Heart-wrenchingly beautiful. Wonderful, wonderful job!
40alohamora080Oh Merlin, this made me cry. Loved the way you wrote the children and Auntie Amelia... oh, everything about it was absolutely lovely. Heart-wrenchingly beautiful. Wonderful, wonderful job!
1/2/2012 c1 1vancabreuniter
This is so good. Even if you did have me tearing up in parts, I just love it! I like Amelia’s interactions with her family (first with Edgar’s, then with Richard’s). Little Anna & Christopher were so precious. I loved the “Aun-tee Thweeth” section. Bribing children with cookies & sweets it classic. My favorite part was at the end when Richard told her the new niece’s name, Susan Michaela. Wonderful!
1vancabreuniterThis is so good. Even if you did have me tearing up in parts, I just love it! I like Amelia’s interactions with her family (first with Edgar’s, then with Richard’s). Little Anna & Christopher were so precious. I loved the “Aun-tee Thweeth” section. Bribing children with cookies & sweets it classic. My favorite part was at the end when Richard told her the new niece’s name, Susan Michaela. Wonderful!
12/31/2011 c1 Abigail Alanna L
Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful, beautiful! Absolutely goregeous. The ending made me bawl like a baby.
Beautiful, beautiful, beautiful, beautiful! Absolutely goregeous. The ending made me bawl like a baby.
11/11/2011 c1 12bookworm1256
This was precious! It really had me tearing up and I have never cried reading fanfiction before (and i've read some pretty sad stuff). I usually don't venture much into other side characters, but I just adored this story. It was lovely and perfect and such a poignent angle of the war. The line where Richard tells Amilia to come meet her new niece and she wishes she could hold her OLD niece, oh, it was so heart-wrenching. You are a fantastic author and I'm thrilled to have stumbled across this. It's like finding a diamond among a load of polished rocks. Brilliant. :)
12bookworm1256This was precious! It really had me tearing up and I have never cried reading fanfiction before (and i've read some pretty sad stuff). I usually don't venture much into other side characters, but I just adored this story. It was lovely and perfect and such a poignent angle of the war. The line where Richard tells Amilia to come meet her new niece and she wishes she could hold her OLD niece, oh, it was so heart-wrenching. You are a fantastic author and I'm thrilled to have stumbled across this. It's like finding a diamond among a load of polished rocks. Brilliant. :)
11/3/2011 c1 Il'Diko
Not so sad how I imgaied it would be, loved it though and I'm thankfull for that. Because even if the darkest and most awfull things happen with you, you must go on. And Amelia kept going on!
Nice portray of a not so well known wizarding family, the beggining was very warm and homey...
Nice work!
(And I really promise to read on, but this damned real life has gotten me for the moment...).
Diko
Not so sad how I imgaied it would be, loved it though and I'm thankfull for that. Because even if the darkest and most awfull things happen with you, you must go on. And Amelia kept going on!
Nice portray of a not so well known wizarding family, the beggining was very warm and homey...
Nice work!
(And I really promise to read on, but this damned real life has gotten me for the moment...).
Diko
11/1/2011 c1 129MissingMommy
I think that the kids did in fact over take the show, just a little though. It was enough in the background to agree that Amelia and Edgar was really close.
I did notice that in the letter back to Edgar that you changed his son's name from Christopher to Edward. It does get pretty confusing but that's the only time you did such a thing.
Overall, I enjoyed it, and wish you good luck in the competition.
129MissingMommyI think that the kids did in fact over take the show, just a little though. It was enough in the background to agree that Amelia and Edgar was really close.
I did notice that in the letter back to Edgar that you changed his son's name from Christopher to Edward. It does get pretty confusing but that's the only time you did such a thing.
Overall, I enjoyed it, and wish you good luck in the competition.
10/29/2011 c1 26FloatingCloudBadger
Aw, that was lovely, and it was lovely to read about Amelia Bones, we don't hear much about her. I thought the characterisation was really good as well. One thing I would say is that I felt the bit about learning to talk dragged just a little bit, maybe it could be cut down a bit. But this was a great story anyway! :)
26FloatingCloudBadgerAw, that was lovely, and it was lovely to read about Amelia Bones, we don't hear much about her. I thought the characterisation was really good as well. One thing I would say is that I felt the bit about learning to talk dragged just a little bit, maybe it could be cut down a bit. But this was a great story anyway! :)
10/24/2011 c1 The Hapless Quill
This made my heart ache. The way you set up the scene beforehand, with the birthday and especially how she bonded with Anna, made the end conclusion so despairing ai felt as though it were actually true. You used great description in this piece, and I loved your portrayal of Amelia. The relationship between herself and Edgar was evidently a strong one, but you included an ounce of rilvary too. Excellent job, extremely well done!
This made my heart ache. The way you set up the scene beforehand, with the birthday and especially how she bonded with Anna, made the end conclusion so despairing ai felt as though it were actually true. You used great description in this piece, and I loved your portrayal of Amelia. The relationship between herself and Edgar was evidently a strong one, but you included an ounce of rilvary too. Excellent job, extremely well done!
10/24/2011 c1 74My Dear Professor McGonagall
*snuffle*
WAHHHHH. I knew this was going to be a sad story, or at least make me sniffle, and it did! I loved it. It was absolutely wonderful. I'm so sad...jsut...muhhh...THE LITTLE ONES XO
I hate Death Eaters...
74My Dear Professor McGonagall*snuffle*
WAHHHHH. I knew this was going to be a sad story, or at least make me sniffle, and it did! I loved it. It was absolutely wonderful. I'm so sad...jsut...muhhh...THE LITTLE ONES XO
I hate Death Eaters...