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7/24/2012 c1 Guest
Make more of this and the rio one plz or I will find you and turture you till you agree to do it
Make more of this and the rio one plz or I will find you and turture you till you agree to do it
6/9/2012 c7 
2Half Dime
Cute; although I personally would've let Alvin die in Brittany's arms, make Brittany go crazy blaming his suicide on her, and then begin the sequal in the psyco-ward in which Brittnay now lives.
Anyway, good job! I really apprieciated the way you put emotion into your story. It was really sad... I loved it.
2Half DimeCute; although I personally would've let Alvin die in Brittany's arms, make Brittany go crazy blaming his suicide on her, and then begin the sequal in the psyco-ward in which Brittnay now lives.
Anyway, good job! I really apprieciated the way you put emotion into your story. It was really sad... I loved it.
6/9/2012 c7 1AFictionalMind
Fantastic! Glad more on this story is in the works! I love the Alvittany in this and hope to see more. As weird as it sounds to say this, It is so sweet when Alvin isn't well and Brittany comforts him, like in this story. Not sure how much that helps, if at all. But that is my "review length" short version. Ready and waiting to see the sequel!
1AFictionalMindFantastic! Glad more on this story is in the works! I love the Alvittany in this and hope to see more. As weird as it sounds to say this, It is so sweet when Alvin isn't well and Brittany comforts him, like in this story. Not sure how much that helps, if at all. But that is my "review length" short version. Ready and waiting to see the sequel!
6/9/2012 c7 Dianne
Me: Hiyah! It's me, Dianne!
Kelly: And me!
Me: *rolls eyes* I thought I told you to stay in the car!
Kelly: Yeah, but when have I ever really listened to what you have to say?
Me: oO... Right... So, about your story! Please right more! I hate suspense! And-?
Kelly: What's suspense?
Me: Oh, not now! The adults are talking!
Kelly: *rolling her eyes* Jerk!
Me: So, as I was saying, more stories! Pronto!
Alvin: *dashes into the room is soaking wet* yeah, and preferably one without me or anyone I know dying!
Me: oO... ALVIN? What're you doin' here?
Alvin: Duh, VOTING! What's it look like! By the way, you would not BELIEVE the trouble I went through to get here!
Simon:*dashes into the room, panting and out of breath* Alvin! I told you Dianne didn't want you in here!
Me: oO... SIMON?
Theodore: *comes running into the room* Guys! Wait up! *looks around the room*. Whoa! This place is HUGE! Why didn't you want me to come?
Me: oO... THEODO- ah, forget it. *hang my head in shame* Simon, didn't I put you in charge?
Simon: Y-Yes, but he escaped!
Me: Escaped? How?
Simon: Well, he asked me to go to the bathroom! So-?
Me: I get it, I get it! Please don't say it! *shudders* I guess that explains why you're all wet!
Alvin: what? It's raining outside!
Me: oh, so you didnt-
Alvin: No! No! Heck, no! I snuck out through the window!
Me: oh, well, that's a relief! I almost thought you-
Kelly:*jumps up to cover my mouth* ex- may on the etails- day, Dianne! There are younger views and a very confused Theodore in the audience!
Me: Aww, good thinking, Kelly! Just one little question, if Alvin didn't... Y'know... Then why is he soaking wet and you guys are dry?
Simon: that's an excellent question. Unlike or dimwitted brother, we wore our rain jackets!
Alvin: Like I said, it's raining outside!
Me: *rolling my eyes* I see.
Alvin: Uh, Dianne, I'm not feeling so good! ... Aah! Aah! AAAAAHH! ACHOOOOOOO!
Me: Well, that's what you get for runnin' in the rain! You're probably catchin' a cold. *sighs* alright, we've gotta get Alvin home, does anyone have anything else to say?
All:*shaking their heads*
Me: good! *Kisses my own hand* Mmwaah! Good night everybody! *Looking at Alvin* And you, my friend, are officially grounded!
Alvin: *sniffles* Y-You can't do that! You're not the boss!
Simon: You've gotta lotta nerve for someone who needs a ride home!
Theodore: Besides, Dianne may not be able to ground you, but would you rather be grounded by Dianne or Dave? At least she allows you to watch T.V.!
This one was really short compared to the other ones! Sorry about that, Kelly helped me with his one!
All joking aside, we really do want you to keep writing! You're awesome! And you can put someone dying in there if you want, we just thought it would be something Alvin would say! I'm confident I will see soon! Very soon!
-Dianne and Kelly
By the way- Kelly wanted me to make it seem Alvin flushed himself down the toilet! Could you tell?
Me: Hiyah! It's me, Dianne!
Kelly: And me!
Me: *rolls eyes* I thought I told you to stay in the car!
Kelly: Yeah, but when have I ever really listened to what you have to say?
Me: oO... Right... So, about your story! Please right more! I hate suspense! And-?
Kelly: What's suspense?
Me: Oh, not now! The adults are talking!
Kelly: *rolling her eyes* Jerk!
Me: So, as I was saying, more stories! Pronto!
Alvin: *dashes into the room is soaking wet* yeah, and preferably one without me or anyone I know dying!
Me: oO... ALVIN? What're you doin' here?
Alvin: Duh, VOTING! What's it look like! By the way, you would not BELIEVE the trouble I went through to get here!
Simon:*dashes into the room, panting and out of breath* Alvin! I told you Dianne didn't want you in here!
Me: oO... SIMON?
Theodore: *comes running into the room* Guys! Wait up! *looks around the room*. Whoa! This place is HUGE! Why didn't you want me to come?
Me: oO... THEODO- ah, forget it. *hang my head in shame* Simon, didn't I put you in charge?
Simon: Y-Yes, but he escaped!
Me: Escaped? How?
Simon: Well, he asked me to go to the bathroom! So-?
Me: I get it, I get it! Please don't say it! *shudders* I guess that explains why you're all wet!
Alvin: what? It's raining outside!
Me: oh, so you didnt-
Alvin: No! No! Heck, no! I snuck out through the window!
Me: oh, well, that's a relief! I almost thought you-
Kelly:*jumps up to cover my mouth* ex- may on the etails- day, Dianne! There are younger views and a very confused Theodore in the audience!
Me: Aww, good thinking, Kelly! Just one little question, if Alvin didn't... Y'know... Then why is he soaking wet and you guys are dry?
Simon: that's an excellent question. Unlike or dimwitted brother, we wore our rain jackets!
Alvin: Like I said, it's raining outside!
Me: *rolling my eyes* I see.
Alvin: Uh, Dianne, I'm not feeling so good! ... Aah! Aah! AAAAAHH! ACHOOOOOOO!
Me: Well, that's what you get for runnin' in the rain! You're probably catchin' a cold. *sighs* alright, we've gotta get Alvin home, does anyone have anything else to say?
All:*shaking their heads*
Me: good! *Kisses my own hand* Mmwaah! Good night everybody! *Looking at Alvin* And you, my friend, are officially grounded!
Alvin: *sniffles* Y-You can't do that! You're not the boss!
Simon: You've gotta lotta nerve for someone who needs a ride home!
Theodore: Besides, Dianne may not be able to ground you, but would you rather be grounded by Dianne or Dave? At least she allows you to watch T.V.!
This one was really short compared to the other ones! Sorry about that, Kelly helped me with his one!
All joking aside, we really do want you to keep writing! You're awesome! And you can put someone dying in there if you want, we just thought it would be something Alvin would say! I'm confident I will see soon! Very soon!
-Dianne and Kelly
By the way- Kelly wanted me to make it seem Alvin flushed himself down the toilet! Could you tell?
5/13/2012 c6 AFictionalMind
Very sweet story. Nice chapter here! Very cute! My thoughts here are this chapter felt slightly hurried (which is also another way of asking can we see another chapter or at least a sequel?) Very nice! Hoping to read more from you! :)
Very sweet story. Nice chapter here! Very cute! My thoughts here are this chapter felt slightly hurried (which is also another way of asking can we see another chapter or at least a sequel?) Very nice! Hoping to read more from you! :)
5/13/2012 c6 Mickiecuteknight
This was a good story and I hope you do a sequel to this. Maybe someone else finding out what he did and the consequences of his actions.
I'm glad you decided to let him live.
This was a good story and I hope you do a sequel to this. Maybe someone else finding out what he did and the consequences of his actions.
I'm glad you decided to let him live.
5/13/2012 c6 Dianne
Me: Aww, thank you! That was really nice of you to say.
Alvin: Suck up...
Me: Hey, remember what Mom said about manners?
Alvin: *rolls eyes* Sorry.
Me: That's better. Now, onto the story. I, personally thought it was the cutest thing I've ever seen! And Alvin here almost wet his pants when he saw Brittany pounding on his chest! He thought he was dead there for a minute.
Alvin: Hey! Your sister freaked out, too!
Me: Yeah, but Kelly's almost eight years old!
Kelly: Don't worry, Alvin; there's nuthin' to be afraid of! *Kelly takes Alvin's hand.*
Alvin: *groans.*
Me: *chuckles* Hey! Nobody asked you to come, you know! And, look at the bright side, at least you have someone to ride with in the BACK seat!
Alvin: No way! I get shot gun!
Simon: On the contrary, I'm riding shot gun, bro!
Alvin: What? Why?
Simon: Because I'm bigger than you!
Alvin: Oh, yeah! Well-
Me: Alright, both of you knock it off or KELLY'S sitting in the front seat!
Simon and Alvin: *nod sheepishly*
Me: Good... Now is there anything you'd like to say before we leave?
Kelly: Yes. I just wanna say thank you for letting my bestest friend Alvin live! I know this may not even mean anything to you, but he's my best friend. Now, I can admit that he can be annoying sometimes-
Alvin: Hey!
Kelly: I'm not finished! He may be a little annoying some times, but I can always trust him to give me advice, and be there for me when I'm sad and laugh with me when I'm happy! I know that he's only acting now, but for that short time that I did think he was actually going to die, I freaked! I didn't know what I would do without him! He's like a big brother to me and I love him! *Hugs Alvin*
All(except Kelly): Awwwww!
Me: Now that was really nice! One question though.
Kelly:*let's go of Alvin* What?
Me: Which Alvin are YOU talking about?
Alvin: Hey!
Me: Just kidding, Al! Alright, you guys, let's go! Mom's gonna freak when she finds out we're gone
Alvin: By the way, Dianne, where's Theodore?
Me: He's at home! He's the only one who listens out of you three!
Hey! Sorry about that one too! We had yet another discussion! But before we started reading, I prepared my sister for the worst. I told her to be prepared because Alvin might die. So read on and we both sighed in relief! And that's where this came from! Sorry! Kelly wanted to do a review to, so I decided to kill two birds with one stone here!
Take care and WRITE MORE STORIES! You are an amazing author!
Dianne.
Ps- all the things that Kelly said were completely on her! Just so you know!
Me: Aww, thank you! That was really nice of you to say.
Alvin: Suck up...
Me: Hey, remember what Mom said about manners?
Alvin: *rolls eyes* Sorry.
Me: That's better. Now, onto the story. I, personally thought it was the cutest thing I've ever seen! And Alvin here almost wet his pants when he saw Brittany pounding on his chest! He thought he was dead there for a minute.
Alvin: Hey! Your sister freaked out, too!
Me: Yeah, but Kelly's almost eight years old!
Kelly: Don't worry, Alvin; there's nuthin' to be afraid of! *Kelly takes Alvin's hand.*
Alvin: *groans.*
Me: *chuckles* Hey! Nobody asked you to come, you know! And, look at the bright side, at least you have someone to ride with in the BACK seat!
Alvin: No way! I get shot gun!
Simon: On the contrary, I'm riding shot gun, bro!
Alvin: What? Why?
Simon: Because I'm bigger than you!
Alvin: Oh, yeah! Well-
Me: Alright, both of you knock it off or KELLY'S sitting in the front seat!
Simon and Alvin: *nod sheepishly*
Me: Good... Now is there anything you'd like to say before we leave?
Kelly: Yes. I just wanna say thank you for letting my bestest friend Alvin live! I know this may not even mean anything to you, but he's my best friend. Now, I can admit that he can be annoying sometimes-
Alvin: Hey!
Kelly: I'm not finished! He may be a little annoying some times, but I can always trust him to give me advice, and be there for me when I'm sad and laugh with me when I'm happy! I know that he's only acting now, but for that short time that I did think he was actually going to die, I freaked! I didn't know what I would do without him! He's like a big brother to me and I love him! *Hugs Alvin*
All(except Kelly): Awwwww!
Me: Now that was really nice! One question though.
Kelly:*let's go of Alvin* What?
Me: Which Alvin are YOU talking about?
Alvin: Hey!
Me: Just kidding, Al! Alright, you guys, let's go! Mom's gonna freak when she finds out we're gone
Alvin: By the way, Dianne, where's Theodore?
Me: He's at home! He's the only one who listens out of you three!
Hey! Sorry about that one too! We had yet another discussion! But before we started reading, I prepared my sister for the worst. I told her to be prepared because Alvin might die. So read on and we both sighed in relief! And that's where this came from! Sorry! Kelly wanted to do a review to, so I decided to kill two birds with one stone here!
Take care and WRITE MORE STORIES! You are an amazing author!
Dianne.
Ps- all the things that Kelly said were completely on her! Just so you know!
5/6/2012 c5 Guest
Hurry and make it
I HATE suspense
Lol
Thnks
Hurry and make it
I HATE suspense
Lol
Thnks
4/23/2012 c5 legendkiller6666
if him dying would b a semi-good ending i rather hav him live if its semi-good whats the point of having him die since i cant really c anything semi-good happening since the base of this story was Brittany being so ** that she wished Alvin 2 kill himself. so i vote 4 Alvin 2 live
if him dying would b a semi-good ending i rather hav him live if its semi-good whats the point of having him die since i cant really c anything semi-good happening since the base of this story was Brittany being so ** that she wished Alvin 2 kill himself. so i vote 4 Alvin 2 live
4/22/2012 c5 Reish95
i think he should live. this just doesn't seem like the story for him to die in. i love it so far though! can't wait to see what happens!
-Reish
i think he should live. this just doesn't seem like the story for him to die in. i love it so far though! can't wait to see what happens!
-Reish