for Bridge over River Rijn11/21/2011 c8 Proudfanatic8844
wow, a story without conflict, you can colour me "SURPRISED", HAHA, sorry for the real bad pun, and I'm genuinely surprised with this
btw, the reference to Series 1 of Doctor Who was awesome! it is great that other people remember the original series that are under 25 years of age ^^
one problem though, I enjoy some smut in stories, but not really with MLP fanfics unless the the storyline calls for it (like Rainbow and Twilight's first time and when Fluttershy murdered that pony), and the overall storyline might have done without the scene with Fluttershy and Katrijn (though I see that you had to make their relationship official, but I hope you use this storyline in future parts of Bonds of Eternity or future sequels, unlike you left Sweetie Bell's Narcotic abuse and Apple Bloom's near death experience and recovery in the "Old World" unresolved, at least so far), with it you put me in a real tough position with myself, like Vinyl, I'm a recovering sex addict, and I use MLP to try and regain some of my lost innocence and as a method for my therapy, and you wrote that so good that I was tempted to clop, I enjoyed the writing, that was a given being it was you who wrote it, but hated the sheer will it took for me not to clop to it
overall, great instalment, and cannot wait to read more
PS: sorry for spilling more than I needed again, but I regret nothing, and it feels good to get some of it off my chest before I go more insane than I already am, and besides you said "Go ahead and add me on Steam if you've got it if you want to talk about anything i've written. Or anything at all. Go on, don't be shy. I don't bite. ... Hard." on your page, and I take emphasis on "Or anything at all. Go on, don't be shy. I don't bite. ... Hard." and I need somepony to listen, even if you do not read it, and also I don't have a stream account or intend on making one, so this will have to do, at least for now (Vinyl Scratch Grin) (facehoof for making that comment stealing that from you, sorry again)
wow over 2000 characters... I never write this much for any other reviews but the ones I send you
wow, a story without conflict, you can colour me "SURPRISED", HAHA, sorry for the real bad pun, and I'm genuinely surprised with this
btw, the reference to Series 1 of Doctor Who was awesome! it is great that other people remember the original series that are under 25 years of age ^^
one problem though, I enjoy some smut in stories, but not really with MLP fanfics unless the the storyline calls for it (like Rainbow and Twilight's first time and when Fluttershy murdered that pony), and the overall storyline might have done without the scene with Fluttershy and Katrijn (though I see that you had to make their relationship official, but I hope you use this storyline in future parts of Bonds of Eternity or future sequels, unlike you left Sweetie Bell's Narcotic abuse and Apple Bloom's near death experience and recovery in the "Old World" unresolved, at least so far), with it you put me in a real tough position with myself, like Vinyl, I'm a recovering sex addict, and I use MLP to try and regain some of my lost innocence and as a method for my therapy, and you wrote that so good that I was tempted to clop, I enjoyed the writing, that was a given being it was you who wrote it, but hated the sheer will it took for me not to clop to it
overall, great instalment, and cannot wait to read more
PS: sorry for spilling more than I needed again, but I regret nothing, and it feels good to get some of it off my chest before I go more insane than I already am, and besides you said "Go ahead and add me on Steam if you've got it if you want to talk about anything i've written. Or anything at all. Go on, don't be shy. I don't bite. ... Hard." on your page, and I take emphasis on "Or anything at all. Go on, don't be shy. I don't bite. ... Hard." and I need somepony to listen, even if you do not read it, and also I don't have a stream account or intend on making one, so this will have to do, at least for now (Vinyl Scratch Grin) (facehoof for making that comment stealing that from you, sorry again)
wow over 2000 characters... I never write this much for any other reviews but the ones I send you
11/17/2011 c8 The Black Okami
Awwwwwwwww so heart warming, and Surprise didn't kill anyone! No lie I would group hugged the SHIT outta them lol. This was a nice break from cilivization ending crisis but tomarrow, we're right back to it I'm sure=P
Awwwwwwwww so heart warming, and Surprise didn't kill anyone! No lie I would group hugged the SHIT outta them lol. This was a nice break from cilivization ending crisis but tomarrow, we're right back to it I'm sure=P
11/17/2011 c8 The Black Okami
Awwwwwwwww so heart warming, and Surprise didn't kill anyone! No lie I would group hugged the SHIT outta them lol. This was a nice break from cilivization ending crisis but tomarrow, we're right back to it I'm sure=P
Awwwwwwwww so heart warming, and Surprise didn't kill anyone! No lie I would group hugged the SHIT outta them lol. This was a nice break from cilivization ending crisis but tomarrow, we're right back to it I'm sure=P
11/16/2011 c7 The Black Okami
Okay, the worst possible thing that could happen is that the diamond dogs try to help Surprise she freaks and kills them...right? Man what's up with the whole kill rainbow to make Pinkie happy? Surprise really must work on her match making skills
Okay, the worst possible thing that could happen is that the diamond dogs try to help Surprise she freaks and kills them...right? Man what's up with the whole kill rainbow to make Pinkie happy? Surprise really must work on her match making skills
11/16/2011 c7 TheBronyWolf
Woooo! First Doctor reference! William Hartnell was great he was such a dick to the teachers.
Woooo! First Doctor reference! William Hartnell was great he was such a dick to the teachers.
11/16/2011 c6 The Black Okami
Well, that was.. Interesting. I knew Fluttershy had something to drink but I didn't expect her to really want it like that, it's just something I wouldn't imagine for her to do. Though you handled it great and I can't wait for the next update=P
Well, that was.. Interesting. I knew Fluttershy had something to drink but I didn't expect her to really want it like that, it's just something I wouldn't imagine for her to do. Though you handled it great and I can't wait for the next update=P
311/16/2011 c5 Qteammuscle
Fluttershy- I laughed at that last line
Rarity- big city, trusting; she is getting drugged...
Pinkie- i suddenly don't feel as bad for her. She did have someone to talk to about it; that usually helps.
Fluttershy- I laughed at that last line
Rarity- big city, trusting; she is getting drugged...
Pinkie- i suddenly don't feel as bad for her. She did have someone to talk to about it; that usually helps.
11/15/2011 c5 The Black Okami
Aww such happy thoughts of adorable hiccupping Pinkie, and Flttuershy was drugged. What do they call it a roofy? Bah same sound now Fluttershy will pony napped and that will be the problem of this..Act! Yes from now on I will call the separate stories acts cuz they are kind of one big story. But yes now I can go to sleep satisfied=P and so help you if there is not a chapter when I awake a storm will be a brewin.
Aww such happy thoughts of adorable hiccupping Pinkie, and Flttuershy was drugged. What do they call it a roofy? Bah same sound now Fluttershy will pony napped and that will be the problem of this..Act! Yes from now on I will call the separate stories acts cuz they are kind of one big story. But yes now I can go to sleep satisfied=P and so help you if there is not a chapter when I awake a storm will be a brewin.
11/15/2011 c5 KevinGetz95
Omg Fluttershy, XD.
Anyway, this is a really great story, just like all your other ones, and I can't believe how quickly you write these chapters!
Omg Fluttershy, XD.
Anyway, this is a really great story, just like all your other ones, and I can't believe how quickly you write these chapters!
11/14/2011 c4 The Black Okami
Those two party ponies are either gonna get along very well or hate each other, there will be no middle ground for those two. Fluttershy on a date is going to be hilarious I'm sure
Those two party ponies are either gonna get along very well or hate each other, there will be no middle ground for those two. Fluttershy on a date is going to be hilarious I'm sure
11/14/2011 c3 Qteammuscle
Hmmm... There is way too much potential for conflict within this chapter... Now to play the waiting game...
Hmmm... There is way too much potential for conflict within this chapter... Now to play the waiting game...
11/14/2011 c2 The Black Okami
Learned somethin bout you jusr now, just because you don't write happy stories doesn't mean you don't know how. Damn son I felt like I was on vacation for a minute lol, not a bad way to start a morning=P
Learned somethin bout you jusr now, just because you don't write happy stories doesn't mean you don't know how. Damn son I felt like I was on vacation for a minute lol, not a bad way to start a morning=P
11/13/2011 c2 DreadedCandiru2
Even if this is the "Nothing bad happens" story you promised/threatened us with and even if the worst is that Pinkie admits that ponies will, after all, like the real her better, there's still a huge problem in the future: Vinyl is going to have two Pegasus ponies fighting to the death for her affections.
Even if this is the "Nothing bad happens" story you promised/threatened us with and even if the worst is that Pinkie admits that ponies will, after all, like the real her better, there's still a huge problem in the future: Vinyl is going to have two Pegasus ponies fighting to the death for her affections.
11/13/2011 c1 The Black Okami
Damn man I feel bad for Pinkie I want her to be happy but you love misery to much to let that happen dontcha? Btw you should put the complete symbol on the other stories.
Damn man I feel bad for Pinkie I want her to be happy but you love misery to much to let that happen dontcha? Btw you should put the complete symbol on the other stories.