for My Immortal: The Rewrite5/6 c5 
16The Queen of Asgard
You, good lady, are my hero. I know you've probably gotten this from like...10,000 people, but honestly. You've taken a piece that has made me lose all faith in humanity and made it into something tolerable. Granted that Ebony is still a Mary Sue but honestly, that's totally not your fault. You cannot NOT make her into a normal human being. Oh well.
Anyway, keep up the fantastic work. I will be following this story with great interest from here on out.
Chewing on tea leaves for fiber,
The Queen of Asgard
16The Queen of AsgardYou, good lady, are my hero. I know you've probably gotten this from like...10,000 people, but honestly. You've taken a piece that has made me lose all faith in humanity and made it into something tolerable. Granted that Ebony is still a Mary Sue but honestly, that's totally not your fault. You cannot NOT make her into a normal human being. Oh well.
Anyway, keep up the fantastic work. I will be following this story with great interest from here on out.
Chewing on tea leaves for fiber,
The Queen of Asgard
5/5 c5 63thisisforyou
I admit that I had entirely forgotten about this story. It's been more than a year, hasn't it?
So while I've dropped out of the realm of Harry Potter fanfiction, I had to just say that the lines between Ebony and Draco - "You'd tell me if you were hiding something, right?" -"Just as much as you would." - were really quite poetic and lovely. Also I'm still very impressed by what you're doing to the original monstrosity.
Until the next time!
-for you
63thisisforyouI admit that I had entirely forgotten about this story. It's been more than a year, hasn't it?
So while I've dropped out of the realm of Harry Potter fanfiction, I had to just say that the lines between Ebony and Draco - "You'd tell me if you were hiding something, right?" -"Just as much as you would." - were really quite poetic and lovely. Also I'm still very impressed by what you're doing to the original monstrosity.
Until the next time!
-for you
5/5 c5 17theunhappytwins
'You ludicrous fools.' Duh.
But...will Voldemort wear high heels and make out with Hedwig? Tread carefully as you answer.
17theunhappytwins'You ludicrous fools.' Duh.
But...will Voldemort wear high heels and make out with Hedwig? Tread carefully as you answer.
4/30 c1 Guest
Don't worry about being worse than the original. That would require Paula Nancy Millstone Jennings levels of fail.
Seriously though, I'm intrigued.
Don't worry about being worse than the original. That would require Paula Nancy Millstone Jennings levels of fail.
Seriously though, I'm intrigued.
9/17/2012 c1 2TheSecretAdmirer
I admire your effort, but I don't think Joe herself could correct this. In fact, I think Shakespeare would give up on this project. I think you show promise, I just wish you'd apply your gift to anything other than this. I realize you did this on a challenge, but I have to be honest when I say that I don't think anyone is truly up to it. Having said that, keep me informed on future projects. If you give this story up in pursuit of something else, I'd be interested to read it.
xx
2TheSecretAdmirerI admire your effort, but I don't think Joe herself could correct this. In fact, I think Shakespeare would give up on this project. I think you show promise, I just wish you'd apply your gift to anything other than this. I realize you did this on a challenge, but I have to be honest when I say that I don't think anyone is truly up to it. Having said that, keep me informed on future projects. If you give this story up in pursuit of something else, I'd be interested to read it.
xx
8/20/2012 c1 504618011110
I just wanted to say you've done a great job making My Immortal into a passable story. There's only one problem. Ebony is a pureblood.
I just wanted to say you've done a great job making My Immortal into a passable story. There's only one problem. Ebony is a pureblood.
7/16/2012 c4 6DataTwoHearts
What in the name of Gallifrey is this? A rewrite of My Immortal? Oh myy. No seriously. Wow. But eh, I've got to say, you're actually making it readable as far as grammar and storytelling. Though the plotline is still rubbish. Cant be helped. This has got to be one of the best things I've seen in a long time! And I'm trying really hard not to laugh loudly in the library right now...
6DataTwoHeartsWhat in the name of Gallifrey is this? A rewrite of My Immortal? Oh myy. No seriously. Wow. But eh, I've got to say, you're actually making it readable as far as grammar and storytelling. Though the plotline is still rubbish. Cant be helped. This has got to be one of the best things I've seen in a long time! And I'm trying really hard not to laugh loudly in the library right now...
7/16/2012 c4 Guest
You cant- I just- It isnt that- Oh hell... You rewrite My Immortal? It just doesnt happen. Gods, this is great. I mean, I think I'm still scared from the original story but who knows? Maybe you can actually make this worth reading. Hehe. Good luck! Great start.
You cant- I just- It isnt that- Oh hell... You rewrite My Immortal? It just doesnt happen. Gods, this is great. I mean, I think I'm still scared from the original story but who knows? Maybe you can actually make this worth reading. Hehe. Good luck! Great start.
7/11/2012 c4 Erin Deer
OH MY GOD! I read the original My Immortal and it sucked skunk balls. But this, THIS is really good, and if I do say so myself, Draco seems very much in character, which makes me a very happy panda :)
OH MY GOD! I read the original My Immortal and it sucked skunk balls. But this, THIS is really good, and if I do say so myself, Draco seems very much in character, which makes me a very happy panda :)
6/26/2012 c4 3iwantsprezzatura
It feels like this story actually makes sense and considering how the original one made no sense at all, that really is a compliment. You're really doing great :D And I laughed so hard as she said "You little **!"
3iwantsprezzaturaIt feels like this story actually makes sense and considering how the original one made no sense at all, that really is a compliment. You're really doing great :D And I laughed so hard as she said "You little **!"
6/26/2012 c1 Moony
Congratulations! You mad My Immortal almost good! Be proud, for you may be the only person to ever attempt a rewrite, let alone make it halfway decent.
Congratulations! You mad My Immortal almost good! Be proud, for you may be the only person to ever attempt a rewrite, let alone make it halfway decent.