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22Cardfighter By Heart
"DOCTOR! I USED TO BE AN ALCHEMIST YOU KNOW! I FOUGHT BAD GUYS! I COULD KICK YOUR **!"
Best line ever! I just started laughing when I read it. Don't know why just did!
22Cardfighter By Heart"DOCTOR! I USED TO BE AN ALCHEMIST YOU KNOW! I FOUGHT BAD GUYS! I COULD KICK YOUR **!"
Best line ever! I just started laughing when I read it. Don't know why just did!
9/23/2012 c2 11The Darkness Run-Away
I KNEW THE PICTURE HAD SOMETHING TO DO WITH IT!
I feel so smart ;w;
11The Darkness Run-AwayI KNEW THE PICTURE HAD SOMETHING TO DO WITH IT!
I feel so smart ;w;
3/31/2012 c5 TaIoRaFoReVeR523
This is pretty good with the exception of some errors. The ending was/is good; you allowed the reader to wonder in the end of what would have happened next.
You got potential, hone your writing skills and put it to good use, cuz you are a bettdr writer than I'll ever be~~and I'm Ok with that.
Keep it up.
This is pretty good with the exception of some errors. The ending was/is good; you allowed the reader to wonder in the end of what would have happened next.
You got potential, hone your writing skills and put it to good use, cuz you are a bettdr writer than I'll ever be~~and I'm Ok with that.
Keep it up.
3/14/2012 c5 lizzey
It was a good ending to a good beginning. I hope you Wright another story this one was great.
It was a good ending to a good beginning. I hope you Wright another story this one was great.
3/14/2012 c1 lizzey
The first chapter is good cant wait to read the rest.
The first chapter is good cant wait to read the rest.
2/9/2012 c5 Rayneydays
Good idea for a story, but it was really flat. Like I would have to put it down and stop reading sometimes.
It had a kind of awkward flow to and was more of a telling a less of a story.
You're on the verge of something great here, definitely keep at it to hone your skills.
Keep writing,
~Rayne~
Good idea for a story, but it was really flat. Like I would have to put it down and stop reading sometimes.
It had a kind of awkward flow to and was more of a telling a less of a story.
You're on the verge of something great here, definitely keep at it to hone your skills.
Keep writing,
~Rayne~
2/2/2012 c5 ACCOUNT IS NOW FULLY INACTIVE
Such a nice ending. I love this story, thankyou for writing it!
Such a nice ending. I love this story, thankyou for writing it!
1/31/2012 c5 3CrimsonAlchemist2
Luv it!:D its a reallly awesome story and you did a good job on it xD
3CrimsonAlchemist2Luv it!:D its a reallly awesome story and you did a good job on it xD
1/29/2012 c5 xAngelHeart
Aww happy ending! I loved this story! Thank you for making this story, and I hope to read more stories by you!
-xAngelHeart
Aww happy ending! I loved this story! Thank you for making this story, and I hope to read more stories by you!
-xAngelHeart