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5MagicMissile
Great update! Incredible. I thought she was going to fight duplicate Kasumis. I like how the direction is turning out, and surprisingly, the notion of Kasumi being reborn into a baby doesn't seem so far-fetched. Its real creative and i'd like to see how this new turn of event will take into play.
5MagicMissileGreat update! Incredible. I thought she was going to fight duplicate Kasumis. I like how the direction is turning out, and surprisingly, the notion of Kasumi being reborn into a baby doesn't seem so far-fetched. Its real creative and i'd like to see how this new turn of event will take into play.
4/4 c17 MagicMissile
Somehow, this chapter seemed more entertaining and engaging than I thought it'd be. In fact, I could almost feel and sympathize with Kaya more. Also, I love how you added the "only you can save her" twist. It felt really dramatic, and with the buildup of Phillip's revealed history, it was a nice touch! The fight scenes with Kaya explaining her fear of using Emerald Flash was awesome too. Aside from grammar errors and mistakes here and there, you put up a great chapter. As always, I look forward to your future updates, and please update when you can!
Somehow, this chapter seemed more entertaining and engaging than I thought it'd be. In fact, I could almost feel and sympathize with Kaya more. Also, I love how you added the "only you can save her" twist. It felt really dramatic, and with the buildup of Phillip's revealed history, it was a nice touch! The fight scenes with Kaya explaining her fear of using Emerald Flash was awesome too. Aside from grammar errors and mistakes here and there, you put up a great chapter. As always, I look forward to your future updates, and please update when you can!
3/5 c16 MagicMissile
Finally, an update! Now, time for some criticism (booo!). The introduction was quite entertaining, but the start of Tir's perspective was rather peculiar.
Here is what you wrote:
"I was sitting and hugging my knees to my chest. I was surrounded in darkness. I recognized this place as the place where I usually had a chat with Souleater.
Now, that I was here, Souleater must be coming soon."
Don't get me wrong, the sentences work, but when you put three sentences with two different main ideas in mind, things get a little confusing.
The two main ideas are:
1. Tir was sitting and hugging his knees to his chest.
2. Tir was surrounded by darkness and recognized it as Souleater's domain, and that Souleater would be coming soon.
So instead of writing three sentences with two different main ideas, you can make one (the lesser of the two) into an auxiliary verb where Tir is sitting, hugging his knees, and surrounded by darkness.
"I was sitting, hugging my knees to my chest, surrounded in a familar darkness. I recognized this place as the place where I usually had a chat with Souleater. Souleater must be coming soon."
Lastly, the "Now, that I was here" in the quote, "Now, that I was here, Souleater must be coming soon" is somewhat redundant because the readers already know Tir is physically there, and therefore, there is no point to clarify it again in the same sentence unless doing so for recalling purposes only.
Anyway, great chapter (as I do enjoy the creativity of this story), and when I picture Philip, he's like a spitting image of Ted! Please update when you can.
Finally, an update! Now, time for some criticism (booo!). The introduction was quite entertaining, but the start of Tir's perspective was rather peculiar.
Here is what you wrote:
"I was sitting and hugging my knees to my chest. I was surrounded in darkness. I recognized this place as the place where I usually had a chat with Souleater.
Now, that I was here, Souleater must be coming soon."
Don't get me wrong, the sentences work, but when you put three sentences with two different main ideas in mind, things get a little confusing.
The two main ideas are:
1. Tir was sitting and hugging his knees to his chest.
2. Tir was surrounded by darkness and recognized it as Souleater's domain, and that Souleater would be coming soon.
So instead of writing three sentences with two different main ideas, you can make one (the lesser of the two) into an auxiliary verb where Tir is sitting, hugging his knees, and surrounded by darkness.
"I was sitting, hugging my knees to my chest, surrounded in a familar darkness. I recognized this place as the place where I usually had a chat with Souleater. Souleater must be coming soon."
Lastly, the "Now, that I was here" in the quote, "Now, that I was here, Souleater must be coming soon" is somewhat redundant because the readers already know Tir is physically there, and therefore, there is no point to clarify it again in the same sentence unless doing so for recalling purposes only.
Anyway, great chapter (as I do enjoy the creativity of this story), and when I picture Philip, he's like a spitting image of Ted! Please update when you can.
2/5 c15 MagicMissile
The alternating of PoV's in this story gets pretty intriguing. I haven't thought much about it until now to realize that it does add more depth and mystery to each character as you learn more or less about them. The Void rune didn't come by surprise but Kasumi's death did (it reminds me of Gremio's death, unless she'll stay dead!). More story progression. Surprisingly, the emergence of the Void rune has got me thinking questions regarding Misty and her true self. And yes, I do enjoy reading this story.
The alternating of PoV's in this story gets pretty intriguing. I haven't thought much about it until now to realize that it does add more depth and mystery to each character as you learn more or less about them. The Void rune didn't come by surprise but Kasumi's death did (it reminds me of Gremio's death, unless she'll stay dead!). More story progression. Surprisingly, the emergence of the Void rune has got me thinking questions regarding Misty and her true self. And yes, I do enjoy reading this story.
1/8 c14 MagicMissile
So the Soul-Eater is currently a hot babe? Tir slapped her sideways too. .
And more story progression. I wonder what Misty has been up to during all these chapters.
So the Soul-Eater is currently a hot babe? Tir slapped her sideways too. .
And more story progression. I wonder what Misty has been up to during all these chapters.
1/5 c14 kris.gemini
Hi, it's me again. I'm very sorry that I read your fan fiction without review it because I used mobile.
To be honest, this chapter is the conversation between Tir and his rune Soul Eater. I'm very impressed. I like it. Keep it up.
Oh, I'm the one choose Sasarai as Tengou Star even I haven't played III, IV and V yet.
Hi, it's me again. I'm very sorry that I read your fan fiction without review it because I used mobile.
To be honest, this chapter is the conversation between Tir and his rune Soul Eater. I'm very impressed. I like it. Keep it up.
Oh, I'm the one choose Sasarai as Tengou Star even I haven't played III, IV and V yet.
12/13/2012 c13 MagicMissile
Aww, I was hoping it meant world domination. Wonder what'll happen next. I'm quite curious now, haha.
Aww, I was hoping it meant world domination. Wonder what'll happen next. I'm quite curious now, haha.
12/13/2012 c12 MagicMissile
When Misty goes crazy I can't help but crack up. The crazy grinning and laughter reminds me too much of the Joker.
When Misty goes crazy I can't help but crack up. The crazy grinning and laughter reminds me too much of the Joker.
12/13/2012 c11 MagicMissile
A jail break-out, an evil plot device, and a mystery true rune. So something big must be brewing!
A jail break-out, an evil plot device, and a mystery true rune. So something big must be brewing!
12/13/2012 c10 MagicMissile
Yep, lol Sasuke to the rescue. I had a feeling it'd be him. Lol max sakura (naruto reference much?). The battle was of no surprise, but does that mean Kasumi is possessed?! Also, I dunno. I like Kaya's personality.
Yep, lol Sasuke to the rescue. I had a feeling it'd be him. Lol max sakura (naruto reference much?). The battle was of no surprise, but does that mean Kasumi is possessed?! Also, I dunno. I like Kaya's personality.
12/13/2012 c9 MagicMissile
So now Misty is after Kaya and someone is after Kaya? I got a feeling it's Sasuke. Hm...
So now Misty is after Kaya and someone is after Kaya? I got a feeling it's Sasuke. Hm...
12/12/2012 c8 MagicMissile
Hm, I just remembered that the souleater doesn't let Tir age. Strange...I kind of prefer Kaya over Misty now. That bitterness burns so harddd!
Hm, I just remembered that the souleater doesn't let Tir age. Strange...I kind of prefer Kaya over Misty now. That bitterness burns so harddd!
12/10/2012 c7 MagicMissile
*Gasp* You are not the father. I didn't see that one coming for sure. And what a surprise, Nash and Sierra. Hm...where could Kasumi be. Oh...yeah, I liked how you personified the souleater. It reminded me of bleach for like no apparent reason.
*Gasp* You are not the father. I didn't see that one coming for sure. And what a surprise, Nash and Sierra. Hm...where could Kasumi be. Oh...yeah, I liked how you personified the souleater. It reminded me of bleach for like no apparent reason.
12/9/2012 c6 MagicMissile
This chapter is a little confusing a bit. I thought the pink scarf and eavesdropping incident was in the past? If that is not true, then this is the present in which Misty has actually left. Alright.
This chapter is a little confusing a bit. I thought the pink scarf and eavesdropping incident was in the past? If that is not true, then this is the present in which Misty has actually left. Alright.
12/9/2012 c5 MagicMissile
Shucks. I wonder what kind of rune is that. Hm... this must be her turning point.
Shucks. I wonder what kind of rune is that. Hm... this must be her turning point.