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1AangandKatarfan
Great job on the story so far, I liked it alot, please keep going and update real, real, real, soon thanks.
1AangandKatarfanGreat job on the story so far, I liked it alot, please keep going and update real, real, real, soon thanks.
1/4 c10 TMNT lover
Great job so far... I love it.
Update soon please!
Great job so far... I love it.
Update soon please!
6/5/2012 c8 16LilNinjaWolf
I wonder what's in store for them now. I really like Raja. It's noble he wants to protect Leo from the Rebels getting to him, but it's also very Leo-like for Leo want to project Raja too. At least they're all together, but I worry what they Rebels have up their sleeve next. Update soon please! :)
16LilNinjaWolfI wonder what's in store for them now. I really like Raja. It's noble he wants to protect Leo from the Rebels getting to him, but it's also very Leo-like for Leo want to project Raja too. At least they're all together, but I worry what they Rebels have up their sleeve next. Update soon please! :)
4/26/2012 c8 88BubblyShell22
I think Raph's jealous because Leo thinks of Raja as a brother, and Raph doesn't like that. I can't believe Don and Mikey don't see that like I do. Oh, and you switched abruptly to third person again. You might want to fix that. Good job on this chapter. I'll be eagerly awaiting an update.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
88BubblyShell22I think Raph's jealous because Leo thinks of Raja as a brother, and Raph doesn't like that. I can't believe Don and Mikey don't see that like I do. Oh, and you switched abruptly to third person again. You might want to fix that. Good job on this chapter. I'll be eagerly awaiting an update.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
4/26/2012 c7 BubblyShell22
Whoa. Not good. I hope they can get out of this mess. You seem to switch from first person to third person a few times. You might want to fix that. But other than that, I really liked this chapter. Good job.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
Whoa. Not good. I hope they can get out of this mess. You seem to switch from first person to third person a few times. You might want to fix that. But other than that, I really liked this chapter. Good job.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
2/15/2012 c7 6Icecreampopstar
*insert dramatic music* whoa, not gonna lie, Raja growling and roaring...HAWTNESS haha im sucha freak XD
6Icecreampopstar*insert dramatic music* whoa, not gonna lie, Raja growling and roaring...HAWTNESS haha im sucha freak XD
2/7/2012 c6 88BubblyShell22
Whoa. That was awesome. I know Raja doesn't want to do anything to Leo, but I can see his intentions. Then again, I can see where Leo's coming from, too. We all know Leo won't give up that easily even if he has been drugged. It's just not in him to do that. Great job on this. I'll be eagerly awaiting an update.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
88BubblyShell22Whoa. That was awesome. I know Raja doesn't want to do anything to Leo, but I can see his intentions. Then again, I can see where Leo's coming from, too. We all know Leo won't give up that easily even if he has been drugged. It's just not in him to do that. Great job on this. I'll be eagerly awaiting an update.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
2/7/2012 c5 BubblyShell22
Awesome chapter. I can see Raja bonding with Mikey like that and Raph being very stand offish. He's just the type not to trust anyone. I'm glad Splinter talked with him, too, and tried to get him to stay. Nicely done on this.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
Awesome chapter. I can see Raja bonding with Mikey like that and Raph being very stand offish. He's just the type not to trust anyone. I'm glad Splinter talked with him, too, and tried to get him to stay. Nicely done on this.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
2/6/2012 c4 BubblyShell22
Wow. I really liked the flashbacks and the backstory on how Leo met Raja. That was awesome. I really like where this is going and can't wait to read more of this. Nicely done. Raja is an interesting character.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
Wow. I really liked the flashbacks and the backstory on how Leo met Raja. That was awesome. I really like where this is going and can't wait to read more of this. Nicely done. Raja is an interesting character.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
2/6/2012 c3 BubblyShell22
Whoa. That's awesome. Raja sounds like an interesting character. I really like him. But Leo needs to tell his family what's going on. He can't hide this from them. Nicely done.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
Whoa. That's awesome. Raja sounds like an interesting character. I really like him. But Leo needs to tell his family what's going on. He can't hide this from them. Nicely done.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
2/6/2012 c2 BubblyShell22
Wow. An even more interesting chapter. Once again, you do seem to have punctuation mistakes. I think you rush through this too much and forget to really proofread your work. My advice would be to check your work and read it over before you post it. That can help you find mistakes easier. Or, if you don't have time to do that, I suggest maybe getting a beta reader who will help you improve your work. This story is good though, and I can't wait to see what else happens within it. Good job.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
Wow. An even more interesting chapter. Once again, you do seem to have punctuation mistakes. I think you rush through this too much and forget to really proofread your work. My advice would be to check your work and read it over before you post it. That can help you find mistakes easier. Or, if you don't have time to do that, I suggest maybe getting a beta reader who will help you improve your work. This story is good though, and I can't wait to see what else happens within it. Good job.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
2/6/2012 c1 BubblyShell22
This is an interesting start. However you have a lot of punctuation errors where you have forgotten to put certain punctuation marks in. This is especially rampant when you have characters talking and have no punctuation except for the question marks. When people are talking, you should have a comma before the quotes in some instances such as: "Hey," I said and sat down. If there is no indication of who is speaking, you should have a period such as: "Like things are going to change around here." Another mistake I see is this one: I chuckled lightly. "Yeah but with our luck, it won't be good." Way to think positive, Leo. You've also forgotten a period after sensei offered.
I'm not saying this is a bad story. In fact, it's a very good one, but I think there are a lot of errors that need to be fixed. I will continue to read it though since you have a really good start here. Good job.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
This is an interesting start. However you have a lot of punctuation errors where you have forgotten to put certain punctuation marks in. This is especially rampant when you have characters talking and have no punctuation except for the question marks. When people are talking, you should have a comma before the quotes in some instances such as: "Hey," I said and sat down. If there is no indication of who is speaking, you should have a period such as: "Like things are going to change around here." Another mistake I see is this one: I chuckled lightly. "Yeah but with our luck, it won't be good." Way to think positive, Leo. You've also forgotten a period after sensei offered.
I'm not saying this is a bad story. In fact, it's a very good one, but I think there are a lot of errors that need to be fixed. I will continue to read it though since you have a really good start here. Good job.
The Bubbly One,
Shell
1/23/2012 c5 TMNTLittleTomboy
Raphie doesn't like Raja. But he'll warm up to him. Update soon!
Raphie doesn't like Raja. But he'll warm up to him. Update soon!
1/22/2012 c4 6Icecreampopstar
Hahaha "BOO!" my fav part, lil pussies runnin away LMFAO pardon the language :P oh and dnt know if i have mentioned it but...I have a crush on Raja now! XD
6IcecreampopstarHahaha "BOO!" my fav part, lil pussies runnin away LMFAO pardon the language :P oh and dnt know if i have mentioned it but...I have a crush on Raja now! XD