for Sentimental Hearts5/8 c17 
6Nuna Hatem
I kept reading and re-reading this chapter. I truly and honestly think it's one of your VERY best ones. I feel so bad for Sirius :'( I got a knot in my stomach and goose bumps. I really think it's important for an author to finish the chapter off with a perfect sentence and you did that. The ending brought tears to my eyes. I hope to see more Sirius-Cissy confrontations but perhaps Sirius could be nicer in one? Btw I wanted to point out how this was the second best part in the chapter (the first best being the second to last sentence); ""Are you all right?" Narcissa asked. "We never meant to draw you away from your friends. I won't pretend I appreciate them, but I don't want you to get hurt."
For a moment Sirius just gaped at her. Then he blinked, and shook his head. "Don't be such a bleeding heart," he said. "It doesn't suit you." His voice was hoarse."
This showed that yes, Cissy DOES care about her family name. But she also genuinely cares about Sirius. And I'm extremely happy that he realized it as well. Fan-freaking-tastic job!
6Nuna HatemI kept reading and re-reading this chapter. I truly and honestly think it's one of your VERY best ones. I feel so bad for Sirius :'( I got a knot in my stomach and goose bumps. I really think it's important for an author to finish the chapter off with a perfect sentence and you did that. The ending brought tears to my eyes. I hope to see more Sirius-Cissy confrontations but perhaps Sirius could be nicer in one? Btw I wanted to point out how this was the second best part in the chapter (the first best being the second to last sentence); ""Are you all right?" Narcissa asked. "We never meant to draw you away from your friends. I won't pretend I appreciate them, but I don't want you to get hurt."
For a moment Sirius just gaped at her. Then he blinked, and shook his head. "Don't be such a bleeding heart," he said. "It doesn't suit you." His voice was hoarse."
This showed that yes, Cissy DOES care about her family name. But she also genuinely cares about Sirius. And I'm extremely happy that he realized it as well. Fan-freaking-tastic job!
5/7 c15 Nuna Hatem
I'm extremely glad that Narcissa got a chance to speak to Sirius. As the story develops, I really hope they'll have a somewhat affectionate relationship! Great chapter!
I'm extremely glad that Narcissa got a chance to speak to Sirius. As the story develops, I really hope they'll have a somewhat affectionate relationship! Great chapter!
5/7 c14 Nuna Hatem
First of all... THAT WAS AMAZING.
I loved that Bella went to see Cissy and the others off. That was so sweet. She really seems to be taking her promise to Cissy seriously, which is good. Cissy doesn't need her sister abandoning her on top of everything else she's dealing with.
Cassie is certainly insightful. I'm glad that she isn't just letting Cissy hide away everything, it isn't good for her. I'm glad she has such a good friend. I just loved how she described Lucius and Cissy together :') It was adorable! As natural as breathing? That's too cute. Sorry, but I had to get the gushing out lol.
GO LUCIUS. Seriously, I was getting really pissed of. I mean, Cissy didn't even say anything extreme she just told Sirius that they needed to talk. James came in, they argued for a bit then Mckinnon came in going all prefect on Cissy. But haha Lucius is a prefect too, so there!
Sorry, my childishness came out. Overall, just loved this chapter!
First of all... THAT WAS AMAZING.
I loved that Bella went to see Cissy and the others off. That was so sweet. She really seems to be taking her promise to Cissy seriously, which is good. Cissy doesn't need her sister abandoning her on top of everything else she's dealing with.
Cassie is certainly insightful. I'm glad that she isn't just letting Cissy hide away everything, it isn't good for her. I'm glad she has such a good friend. I just loved how she described Lucius and Cissy together :') It was adorable! As natural as breathing? That's too cute. Sorry, but I had to get the gushing out lol.
GO LUCIUS. Seriously, I was getting really pissed of. I mean, Cissy didn't even say anything extreme she just told Sirius that they needed to talk. James came in, they argued for a bit then Mckinnon came in going all prefect on Cissy. But haha Lucius is a prefect too, so there!
Sorry, my childishness came out. Overall, just loved this chapter!
5/7 c13 Nuna Hatem
THAT WAS AMAZING.
My mind is such a jumble of thoughts (all extremely positive) right now. This was just so... wow. Ok so I'm happy that she wrote to Cassie. It's absolutely impossible to keep such things inside you for too long without exploding, I know that. It's good she's letting someone she trusts know. The beginning was adorable- what's not to love with Cissy and Lucius? They're adorable. I can practically see, Cissy twirling in her stunning red dress, Lucius in black with everyone staring at them with looks of shock and interest.
Bellatrix... Oh wow. Her and her Bellatrix-ness is so overwhelming. I'm loving it, haha. It was interesting to see her reaction to Andromeda; ""Don't say her name!" Bellatrix suddenly screeched, and Narcissa let a startled cry escape her. The family's attention switched to her, for a second. Cygnus crossed the room towards her as she leaned against the wall shaking, and seized her shoulders firmly to support her; Bella hovered, unsure and tense, a hand half-extended. Then she whirled towards Alphard again, her hair flying. "This has nothing to do with her!" she spat."
That paragraph had quite the impact on me. I got goose bumps and my eyes almost popped out of my head. I felt so bad for Cissy, this is emotionally draining on her. I adore ADORE her and Cygnus's relationship. It's adorable. And this line rocked; ""Keep your opinion to yourself for once, sister."" Go Cygnus!
Alphard's extreme shock was heartbreaking, honestly. I felt so bad for him. He just seemed like he truly couldn't believe Bella was a part of this organisation. It's sad. SO this was amazing chapter. Like, really amazing. Great job!
THAT WAS AMAZING.
My mind is such a jumble of thoughts (all extremely positive) right now. This was just so... wow. Ok so I'm happy that she wrote to Cassie. It's absolutely impossible to keep such things inside you for too long without exploding, I know that. It's good she's letting someone she trusts know. The beginning was adorable- what's not to love with Cissy and Lucius? They're adorable. I can practically see, Cissy twirling in her stunning red dress, Lucius in black with everyone staring at them with looks of shock and interest.
Bellatrix... Oh wow. Her and her Bellatrix-ness is so overwhelming. I'm loving it, haha. It was interesting to see her reaction to Andromeda; ""Don't say her name!" Bellatrix suddenly screeched, and Narcissa let a startled cry escape her. The family's attention switched to her, for a second. Cygnus crossed the room towards her as she leaned against the wall shaking, and seized her shoulders firmly to support her; Bella hovered, unsure and tense, a hand half-extended. Then she whirled towards Alphard again, her hair flying. "This has nothing to do with her!" she spat."
That paragraph had quite the impact on me. I got goose bumps and my eyes almost popped out of my head. I felt so bad for Cissy, this is emotionally draining on her. I adore ADORE her and Cygnus's relationship. It's adorable. And this line rocked; ""Keep your opinion to yourself for once, sister."" Go Cygnus!
Alphard's extreme shock was heartbreaking, honestly. I felt so bad for him. He just seemed like he truly couldn't believe Bella was a part of this organisation. It's sad. SO this was amazing chapter. Like, really amazing. Great job!
5/7 c12 Nuna Hatem
That was such an intense chapter. It was really interesting to see Cissy going to see Bella- it shows that she isn't just a lady. She has a voice, and she made it heard. I loved it. I'm also glad that Bella listened to her and even promised they would still be sisters. It was sweet. And this one line was just amazing, it actually gave me goose bumps; "Squeezing Bella's cold fingers, she remembered that secrecy and bitterness had already cost her a sibling." It was just... wow. You wowed me!
That was such an intense chapter. It was really interesting to see Cissy going to see Bella- it shows that she isn't just a lady. She has a voice, and she made it heard. I loved it. I'm also glad that Bella listened to her and even promised they would still be sisters. It was sweet. And this one line was just amazing, it actually gave me goose bumps; "Squeezing Bella's cold fingers, she remembered that secrecy and bitterness had already cost her a sibling." It was just... wow. You wowed me!
5/4 c17 The Hapless Quill
Azzie, you marvellous person. These FEELS.
I really liked the confrontation with Sirius, his friends and Snape, to conclude the mystery of the pranking. Lucius' charm is so infectious! I loved your dialogue from him, "I can assure you that the word of Lucius Malfoy is one always carefully listened to, even while presenting a theory that might sound… dubious… to the outsider." You choose his words so carefully, that they really do suit and characterise him perfectly!
I also love the interaction with Lucius and Narcissa - you've written the transition from a flustered, almost awkward crush pair into a comfortable and passionate couple with light-hearted banter, which was never attempted before. I also love how you're progressing their relationship slowly and gradually; with staying overnight at a manor being a scene only really for engaged couples, you can tell that they both want things to become more serious and move further.
Cassie and Narcissa! I am so glad that you've re-created the ease of their friendship again. I also really appreciate how you're characterising Cassie - she's become 'flippant', and has a social issue of her own that she needs Narcissa to help her with, similarily to how Narcissa needed Cassie there in the past.
And, finally, the Sirius and Narcissa interaction. Sirius' own isolation from his family is shown from his suppressed fears and tenacity as he responds with aggression to Narcissa, but you can also see the regrets being concealed aswell. The one thing I did truly love is that you didn't make Narcissa understand, as some authors automatically would - she doesn't realise that Sirius doesn't want to be a part of the family anymore, and she cannot appreciate that Sirius has been different with his reliefs for a long time.
This was absolutely fantastic! Well done!
Azzie, you marvellous person. These FEELS.
I really liked the confrontation with Sirius, his friends and Snape, to conclude the mystery of the pranking. Lucius' charm is so infectious! I loved your dialogue from him, "I can assure you that the word of Lucius Malfoy is one always carefully listened to, even while presenting a theory that might sound… dubious… to the outsider." You choose his words so carefully, that they really do suit and characterise him perfectly!
I also love the interaction with Lucius and Narcissa - you've written the transition from a flustered, almost awkward crush pair into a comfortable and passionate couple with light-hearted banter, which was never attempted before. I also love how you're progressing their relationship slowly and gradually; with staying overnight at a manor being a scene only really for engaged couples, you can tell that they both want things to become more serious and move further.
Cassie and Narcissa! I am so glad that you've re-created the ease of their friendship again. I also really appreciate how you're characterising Cassie - she's become 'flippant', and has a social issue of her own that she needs Narcissa to help her with, similarily to how Narcissa needed Cassie there in the past.
And, finally, the Sirius and Narcissa interaction. Sirius' own isolation from his family is shown from his suppressed fears and tenacity as he responds with aggression to Narcissa, but you can also see the regrets being concealed aswell. The one thing I did truly love is that you didn't make Narcissa understand, as some authors automatically would - she doesn't realise that Sirius doesn't want to be a part of the family anymore, and she cannot appreciate that Sirius has been different with his reliefs for a long time.
This was absolutely fantastic! Well done!
5/2 c17 1Cissy.BlackM
Hola, hola! Lamento haber tardado tanto para responder, pero estaba muy ocupada. Amo tu fic de verdad! Te felicito, tienes una manera de escribir impecable, espero el proximo capitulo con ansias y que aunque el ff sea censura T haya algo 'sexy' jajajaja. Bueno actualiza pronto!
Saludos.
1Cissy.BlackMHola, hola! Lamento haber tardado tanto para responder, pero estaba muy ocupada. Amo tu fic de verdad! Te felicito, tienes una manera de escribir impecable, espero el proximo capitulo con ansias y que aunque el ff sea censura T haya algo 'sexy' jajajaja. Bueno actualiza pronto!
Saludos.
1/1 c16 50SKINNYxLOVE
OKAY
i read this when you first posted it, but i was too tired to review. so i'm reviewing now. i just want to say that i really loved this chapter, though i think i say that to every chapter of this story? hah, oh well! it's true. i love them all! when i say this, i mean it this time: it will be a short review. i'm sorry. [
i like the problems that the prefects are having with the pranksters, and how it's causing slight problems between Lucius & Narcissa. i think it's about time, as i'm not sure they've really had any problems yet! not that this is a very huge problem, but it DID cause Narcissa to get a little defensive and on edge. but it was nice how they resolved their problem. ]
the bit with Narcissa and Sirius was also cute - she was very concerned and he just didn't care. but i like how she's still not willing to just give up on him yet.
the ending was... um, i'm sensing something serious is going to happen soon. ;] that's all.
50SKINNYxLOVEOKAY
i read this when you first posted it, but i was too tired to review. so i'm reviewing now. i just want to say that i really loved this chapter, though i think i say that to every chapter of this story? hah, oh well! it's true. i love them all! when i say this, i mean it this time: it will be a short review. i'm sorry. [
i like the problems that the prefects are having with the pranksters, and how it's causing slight problems between Lucius & Narcissa. i think it's about time, as i'm not sure they've really had any problems yet! not that this is a very huge problem, but it DID cause Narcissa to get a little defensive and on edge. but it was nice how they resolved their problem. ]
the bit with Narcissa and Sirius was also cute - she was very concerned and he just didn't care. but i like how she's still not willing to just give up on him yet.
the ending was... um, i'm sensing something serious is going to happen soon. ;] that's all.
1/1 c16 The Hapless Quill
Oh my gosh, Azzie, you are just perfect. Thank you! Thank you! This was a wonderful birthday present! Ahhhhhh, my mind is a load of contented mush.
And this was a perfect chapter to have dedicated to me! The first scene with Narcissa reading the article about the tortured muggle-borns was actually quite darkening, because it just shows us how ... new Voldemort's antics would have seemed to the Hogwarts students of that year. Obviously he hasn't revealed himself to society yet, and there's only this sense of speculation, anxiety, mistrust left behind and it's all being condensed so that it really is a state of war. Although Cissy can be classed as an 'insider' of sorts, because her sister is invovled with these antics, it frightens her just as the next person. There's been this history of dispute against muggle-borns and muggles, but no-one has ever taken a dramatic move to abolish them before ... amazing!
The Cissy and Cassy interaction ... it's just fantastic that Cissy now has that constant in her life. Cassy is someone that she has chose as a friend, instead of being paired with by reputation and status. It's so balanced how Cissy feels as if she knows Cassy, and then at irregular moments is just left completely in the dark. I loved how you wrote that contrast! Cissy's thoughts just seem so plausible, because a girl her age is constantly denying herself as a person. Regarding herself as selfish, mistrustful of the way that Cassy sees things in a different way that she, Cissy, does.
I love the suspense of the pranks! It really shows has kind of progressed from his family tradition, of keeping his head down and focussing on being studious; he's not afraid to parade the fact that he contradicts his family's beliefs, traditions and religion.
And, of course, the Lucissa interaction is as wonderful as ever! I hope you don't mind me saying this, but I just love how you almost inadvertently employ this consistent 1950s/60s/70s reactions toward Women. It's evident that the Blacks have trained Narcissa from their generation-long traditions to never speak when it is not her turn, never to interrupt a man and to kind of always conceal her true feelings, and to never overload them on other members of her family's social circle. I just thought it was exceptionally clever how you included that into this chapter!
A fantastic, fantastic, fantastic chapter Azzie! Well done!
Oh my gosh, Azzie, you are just perfect. Thank you! Thank you! This was a wonderful birthday present! Ahhhhhh, my mind is a load of contented mush.
And this was a perfect chapter to have dedicated to me! The first scene with Narcissa reading the article about the tortured muggle-borns was actually quite darkening, because it just shows us how ... new Voldemort's antics would have seemed to the Hogwarts students of that year. Obviously he hasn't revealed himself to society yet, and there's only this sense of speculation, anxiety, mistrust left behind and it's all being condensed so that it really is a state of war. Although Cissy can be classed as an 'insider' of sorts, because her sister is invovled with these antics, it frightens her just as the next person. There's been this history of dispute against muggle-borns and muggles, but no-one has ever taken a dramatic move to abolish them before ... amazing!
The Cissy and Cassy interaction ... it's just fantastic that Cissy now has that constant in her life. Cassy is someone that she has chose as a friend, instead of being paired with by reputation and status. It's so balanced how Cissy feels as if she knows Cassy, and then at irregular moments is just left completely in the dark. I loved how you wrote that contrast! Cissy's thoughts just seem so plausible, because a girl her age is constantly denying herself as a person. Regarding herself as selfish, mistrustful of the way that Cassy sees things in a different way that she, Cissy, does.
I love the suspense of the pranks! It really shows has kind of progressed from his family tradition, of keeping his head down and focussing on being studious; he's not afraid to parade the fact that he contradicts his family's beliefs, traditions and religion.
And, of course, the Lucissa interaction is as wonderful as ever! I hope you don't mind me saying this, but I just love how you almost inadvertently employ this consistent 1950s/60s/70s reactions toward Women. It's evident that the Blacks have trained Narcissa from their generation-long traditions to never speak when it is not her turn, never to interrupt a man and to kind of always conceal her true feelings, and to never overload them on other members of her family's social circle. I just thought it was exceptionally clever how you included that into this chapter!
A fantastic, fantastic, fantastic chapter Azzie! Well done!
12/14/2012 c11 6Nuna Hatem
Wow, I loved this chapter! It was lovely, the way you described their date, and how surprisingly daring Narcissa was. It was sort of funny, seeing how long it took her to convince herself to ask for a bite of cake. Nonetheless, it was perfectly written out and I'm really excited to read the next chapter!
6Nuna HatemWow, I loved this chapter! It was lovely, the way you described their date, and how surprisingly daring Narcissa was. It was sort of funny, seeing how long it took her to convince herself to ask for a bite of cake. Nonetheless, it was perfectly written out and I'm really excited to read the next chapter!
12/13/2012 c5 Nuna Hatem
This is a fantastic story. Your writing skills as an author are beautiful. Every word, every sentence is perfectly phrased. Wonderful job, and I cannot wait to read more :)
This is a fantastic story. Your writing skills as an author are beautiful. Every word, every sentence is perfectly phrased. Wonderful job, and I cannot wait to read more :)
12/12/2012 c15 The Hapless Quill
Ahhhhhhhh ... Azzie, I'm so sorry! I've been a ridiculously unfaithful reviewer with the amount of time that it's taken me to review this wonderful, wonderful chapter.
This chapter was actually quite poignant. The scene between Sirius and Narcissa showed just how much they're going to struggle, but what I liked about it was that even though Sirius had been sorted into Gryffindor and that factor did not fall into Cissy's beliefs, you still showed the banterish history between them, and that would have been adorable if it had not been so terribly heart-wrenchingly sad.
All the love in the world! Fantastic job, Azzie! It was well worth the wait!
Ahhhhhhhh ... Azzie, I'm so sorry! I've been a ridiculously unfaithful reviewer with the amount of time that it's taken me to review this wonderful, wonderful chapter.
This chapter was actually quite poignant. The scene between Sirius and Narcissa showed just how much they're going to struggle, but what I liked about it was that even though Sirius had been sorted into Gryffindor and that factor did not fall into Cissy's beliefs, you still showed the banterish history between them, and that would have been adorable if it had not been so terribly heart-wrenchingly sad.
All the love in the world! Fantastic job, Azzie! It was well worth the wait!
11/29/2012 c15 50SKINNYxLOVE
oh, wow. you're so sweet to half-dedicate this chapter to me. x3 you're perf, azzieeee
i enjoyed this chapter for a few different reasons. one being the black family dynamics. i thought you handled them quite well. naturally, walburga and orion got their knickers into a twist over the sorting with sirius. a howler was expected. but i liked cygnus' letter to narcissa (and lucky me, i got to read it twice. ;] ) i really thought it was nice how well he could read his daughter, despite their distance. his words were very encouraging and calming - especially the end bit where he reminds her that the events in her own personal life matter as well. i'm sure that that was reassuring for her, as i feel like her self-esteem and self-worth and self-confidence tend to be more towards the low end.
in addition to that, i thought it was great how cissy took her father's advice! (if it had been bellatrix, well... i don't think it would have ended quite the same. xP ) she also wasn't overly sweet to sirius when she did finally approach him; and she also didn't let his bratty antics get to her too much. by the end of their meeting, it seems as if sirius was warming up to cissy a little bit... ] it was very cute, their interaction. their banter was very entertaining as well! ;]
now onto the subject of lucissa (because when DON'T i have something to say about them?)... please don't hate me for this, but... i always thought that lucius was kind of pushy towards narcissa. i still love him, and her, and them together - don't think i don't! but this chapter changed my views on him a lot. if he does happen to be over the top in some way, i realize now that it's more or less for narcissa's benefit. he's protective of her, that much is obvious - and i've always liked that about him. ] but this chapter made me realize that he's trying to do two things: lifting narcissa up, metaphorically (think "both of us" by b.o.b. featuring taylor swift) and trying to get her to open up to him. at least that's what i see. i don't know how i was blind to it before. narcissa, however, despite lucius' exhaustive attempts (i had to, no regrets), is still a guarded girl. she doesn't trust completely - but you can tell that she WANTS to. she wants to believe lucius was he says that "it will be all right". but the problem is that she doesn't trust herself, which stems from her self-doubt, and therefore... she can't trust others. i also have to say that i like how long you've kept her a pillar - she's crumbling slowly, but hasn't fallen yet (minus the minor breakdown at grimmald place.) most authors, i feel, have her cave too easily and become this weeping sap that relies on a man like bella swan... -_-
ANYWAY. GREAT chapter! i very much enjoyed it. x3 you're terrific!
50SKINNYxLOVEoh, wow. you're so sweet to half-dedicate this chapter to me. x3 you're perf, azzieeee
i enjoyed this chapter for a few different reasons. one being the black family dynamics. i thought you handled them quite well. naturally, walburga and orion got their knickers into a twist over the sorting with sirius. a howler was expected. but i liked cygnus' letter to narcissa (and lucky me, i got to read it twice. ;] ) i really thought it was nice how well he could read his daughter, despite their distance. his words were very encouraging and calming - especially the end bit where he reminds her that the events in her own personal life matter as well. i'm sure that that was reassuring for her, as i feel like her self-esteem and self-worth and self-confidence tend to be more towards the low end.
in addition to that, i thought it was great how cissy took her father's advice! (if it had been bellatrix, well... i don't think it would have ended quite the same. xP ) she also wasn't overly sweet to sirius when she did finally approach him; and she also didn't let his bratty antics get to her too much. by the end of their meeting, it seems as if sirius was warming up to cissy a little bit... ] it was very cute, their interaction. their banter was very entertaining as well! ;]
now onto the subject of lucissa (because when DON'T i have something to say about them?)... please don't hate me for this, but... i always thought that lucius was kind of pushy towards narcissa. i still love him, and her, and them together - don't think i don't! but this chapter changed my views on him a lot. if he does happen to be over the top in some way, i realize now that it's more or less for narcissa's benefit. he's protective of her, that much is obvious - and i've always liked that about him. ] but this chapter made me realize that he's trying to do two things: lifting narcissa up, metaphorically (think "both of us" by b.o.b. featuring taylor swift) and trying to get her to open up to him. at least that's what i see. i don't know how i was blind to it before. narcissa, however, despite lucius' exhaustive attempts (i had to, no regrets), is still a guarded girl. she doesn't trust completely - but you can tell that she WANTS to. she wants to believe lucius was he says that "it will be all right". but the problem is that she doesn't trust herself, which stems from her self-doubt, and therefore... she can't trust others. i also have to say that i like how long you've kept her a pillar - she's crumbling slowly, but hasn't fallen yet (minus the minor breakdown at grimmald place.) most authors, i feel, have her cave too easily and become this weeping sap that relies on a man like bella swan... -_-
ANYWAY. GREAT chapter! i very much enjoyed it. x3 you're terrific!
10/30/2012 c14 The Hapless Quill
I think this is one of the most poignant and emotional chapters you've ever written, Azzie - second only to the Andromeda scene, of course!
Bella coming to see Cissy off from the platform was actually quite a contrast to the character that we've grown to know, but all the more amazing because of this deviance. It seemed to me as if Bella was almost determined to protect her family if she could not guarantee protection for herself.
Cassandra was quiet, her fingertips still resting against Narcissa's face. Then she dropped her hand. "She has to be stopped," she said in a low voice. "They'll be stopped anyway. Better her relatives than the Aurors."
"She won't stop. She's married now, the family cannot force her into anything."
As well as being two brilliantly-written sentences, I also sensed a hidden message here; "She's married now". It just conveys to me that that was the true reason that Bella married Rodolphus, disguised under her family encouraging her to marry and become a lady, etc. It's so that when she became that one-step more rebellious, they wouldn't have the power to stop her.
Cissy's desperation when it came to Sirius was heart-shattering, honestly; a really sentimental scene. ""But you can't!" She lunged forward without even realizing, grabbing his shoulders as he turned away, pulling him to face her. "Sirius, don't do this," she begged. "What are you playing at? We can fix this, I'm sure, but we need you with us, on our side…"
It seems that Sirius was (and always had been) Cissy's favourite cousins, and when she was exclaiming inside her mind that he was only a boy, it gave the sense that she was genuinly frightened for him.
MAGNIFICENT. *Pulls out handkerchief and applaudes loudly* A wonderful job!
I think this is one of the most poignant and emotional chapters you've ever written, Azzie - second only to the Andromeda scene, of course!
Bella coming to see Cissy off from the platform was actually quite a contrast to the character that we've grown to know, but all the more amazing because of this deviance. It seemed to me as if Bella was almost determined to protect her family if she could not guarantee protection for herself.
Cassandra was quiet, her fingertips still resting against Narcissa's face. Then she dropped her hand. "She has to be stopped," she said in a low voice. "They'll be stopped anyway. Better her relatives than the Aurors."
"She won't stop. She's married now, the family cannot force her into anything."
As well as being two brilliantly-written sentences, I also sensed a hidden message here; "She's married now". It just conveys to me that that was the true reason that Bella married Rodolphus, disguised under her family encouraging her to marry and become a lady, etc. It's so that when she became that one-step more rebellious, they wouldn't have the power to stop her.
Cissy's desperation when it came to Sirius was heart-shattering, honestly; a really sentimental scene. ""But you can't!" She lunged forward without even realizing, grabbing his shoulders as he turned away, pulling him to face her. "Sirius, don't do this," she begged. "What are you playing at? We can fix this, I'm sure, but we need you with us, on our side…"
It seems that Sirius was (and always had been) Cissy's favourite cousins, and when she was exclaiming inside her mind that he was only a boy, it gave the sense that she was genuinly frightened for him.
MAGNIFICENT. *Pulls out handkerchief and applaudes loudly* A wonderful job!