for The Ranger Unmasked6/30/2012 c21 
13Cretha Loesing
"Most gracious Lord Elrond," he said through a curtain of golden hair. "I ask your permission to make a humble proposition."
this is going to be interesting!
I've been at camp, so I just got to reading a bunch of chapters now- you make me interested! Now I'm curious if Adrian is even human- this is getting really interesting.
And for those who read my review- READ THIS STORY! It's the best Legomance I've read yet.
Cretha Loesing
13Cretha Loesing"Most gracious Lord Elrond," he said through a curtain of golden hair. "I ask your permission to make a humble proposition."
this is going to be interesting!
I've been at camp, so I just got to reading a bunch of chapters now- you make me interested! Now I'm curious if Adrian is even human- this is getting really interesting.
And for those who read my review- READ THIS STORY! It's the best Legomance I've read yet.
Cretha Loesing
6/26/2012 c21 3Elf from Downunder
Adrian and Legolas seem like they'll never become friends at this rate.
I wonder if Elrond will make BOTH of them still travel with the Fellowship in order to get along. ;)
3Elf from DownunderAdrian and Legolas seem like they'll never become friends at this rate.
I wonder if Elrond will make BOTH of them still travel with the Fellowship in order to get along. ;)
6/24/2012 c20 Elf from Downunder
Yes, isn't Adrian so infuriating? But I think he has a scarred past ... something that makes him the way he is.
I wonder if the elleth in this chapter will appear in more chapters ...
Update soon!
Yes, isn't Adrian so infuriating? But I think he has a scarred past ... something that makes him the way he is.
I wonder if the elleth in this chapter will appear in more chapters ...
Update soon!
6/24/2012 c20 8She Elf of Hidden Lore
Okay so this story has gotten me curious and I want to follow it. I saw that it said romance on the presentation but I am not sure if it means Legolas and the ranger. He is a man right? But Legolas was interested in that elleth before so I don't know. I personally don't favor slash much but I want to know what happens so I'm following :)
8She Elf of Hidden LoreOkay so this story has gotten me curious and I want to follow it. I saw that it said romance on the presentation but I am not sure if it means Legolas and the ranger. He is a man right? But Legolas was interested in that elleth before so I don't know. I personally don't favor slash much but I want to know what happens so I'm following :)
6/24/2012 c19 3Elf from Downunder
I have a feeling that Adrian will surprise Legolas :) I wonder how this competition will turn out, and how the Fellowship will react!
3Elf from DownunderI have a feeling that Adrian will surprise Legolas :) I wonder how this competition will turn out, and how the Fellowship will react!
6/24/2012 c9 haku
hmm i can tell a lady that fancies legolas wrote this - i will say it does make him sound a bit...ummm...full of himself. but he does have awesome hair XD
hmm i can tell a lady that fancies legolas wrote this - i will say it does make him sound a bit...ummm...full of himself. but he does have awesome hair XD
5/29/2012 c18 Elf from Downunder
The ending was so unexpected! I wonder how it'll turn out? Good luck with the updating (and studying)! ;)
The ending was so unexpected! I wonder how it'll turn out? Good luck with the updating (and studying)! ;)
4/27/2012 c17 3Elf from Downunder
Ohhh ... this is getting interesting! Please continue! :)
I wonder who Adrian really is?
3Elf from DownunderOhhh ... this is getting interesting! Please continue! :)
I wonder who Adrian really is?
4/23/2012 c16 Cretha Loesing
I like your story...
However, on one note (there is no need to correct this if you don't want to) is dork a Lotr-appropriate word?
Nevermind, on second thoughts, it would be hard to replace that.
However here are some ideas:
Cad (player/two-timer guy)
Scum
Slug
Coxcombe (guy who's stuck-up)
Here's the Website I got it from
h t t p : / / a n s w e r s . y a h o o . c o m / q u e s t i o n / i n d e x ? q i d = 2 0 0 8 0 8 3 1 1 3 2 5 0 9 A A P d 0 B x
There's a lot of them on there.
I like your story...
However, on one note (there is no need to correct this if you don't want to) is dork a Lotr-appropriate word?
Nevermind, on second thoughts, it would be hard to replace that.
However here are some ideas:
Cad (player/two-timer guy)
Scum
Slug
Coxcombe (guy who's stuck-up)
Here's the Website I got it from
h t t p : / / a n s w e r s . y a h o o . c o m / q u e s t i o n / i n d e x ? q i d = 2 0 0 8 0 8 3 1 1 3 2 5 0 9 A A P d 0 B x
There's a lot of them on there.
4/23/2012 c16 3JustBlossom
This is an interesting story so far... I'm thinking that this 'Adrian' fella is actually a girl... but I'm hoping this won't turn into a romance. My one problem is that Legolas is majorly OOC. He's way too vain, bratty and pretty stupid. And he seems to have anger issues. All of those traits are not like Legolas at all, and that's kind of annoying. And then Adrian is a total jerk. If Adrian really is a she, than I guess you were going for opposites attract (Legolas' extreme handsomeness and suaveness + Adrian(na)'s extreme ugliness and gruffness)
But maybe I'm totally wrong about the Adrian(na) thing. :P But either way, although Adrian isn't a Mary Sue, he seems to be tipping off the opposite end of the scale. He's SO unlikeable I really couldn't care less for what happens to him. Which is not a thing you want your readers to feel. I'm starting to feel the same way about uber-OOC Legolas.
I suggest you give Adrian some decent characteristics and clean up Legolas' OOCness. Oh, and make the chapters longer. It's kind of pointless and frustrating when they're only 200 words long.
Okay, that was a lot of criticism, so I hope you aren't offended. Whatever you do, don't give up! Just keep writing and you will get better! Good luck!
3JustBlossomThis is an interesting story so far... I'm thinking that this 'Adrian' fella is actually a girl... but I'm hoping this won't turn into a romance. My one problem is that Legolas is majorly OOC. He's way too vain, bratty and pretty stupid. And he seems to have anger issues. All of those traits are not like Legolas at all, and that's kind of annoying. And then Adrian is a total jerk. If Adrian really is a she, than I guess you were going for opposites attract (Legolas' extreme handsomeness and suaveness + Adrian(na)'s extreme ugliness and gruffness)
But maybe I'm totally wrong about the Adrian(na) thing. :P But either way, although Adrian isn't a Mary Sue, he seems to be tipping off the opposite end of the scale. He's SO unlikeable I really couldn't care less for what happens to him. Which is not a thing you want your readers to feel. I'm starting to feel the same way about uber-OOC Legolas.
I suggest you give Adrian some decent characteristics and clean up Legolas' OOCness. Oh, and make the chapters longer. It's kind of pointless and frustrating when they're only 200 words long.
Okay, that was a lot of criticism, so I hope you aren't offended. Whatever you do, don't give up! Just keep writing and you will get better! Good luck!
4/23/2012 c16 3Elf from Downunder
Yay! Legolas' back! Or is he? ;) I loved the ending!
the "Aren't you happy to see me?" line from ... Adrian?
Update soon!
3Elf from DownunderYay! Legolas' back! Or is he? ;) I loved the ending!
the "Aren't you happy to see me?" line from ... Adrian?
Update soon!
4/16/2012 c15 Elf from Downunder
Awesome as chapter! Great description of the night sky!
Don't we just love Legolas? Let's see how he can pull himself together!
Can't wait until you update!
Awesome as chapter! Great description of the night sky!
Don't we just love Legolas? Let's see how he can pull himself together!
Can't wait until you update!