for Star Trek TOS : New Generations7/23/2012 c13 Trekkie2
This is cute. I think you misspelled one of your characters name wrong. Wow! I can remember that. Maybe Alzheimer's isn't setting in afterall. LOL! Thanks for the submission.
This is cute. I think you misspelled one of your characters name wrong. Wow! I can remember that. Maybe Alzheimer's isn't setting in afterall. LOL! Thanks for the submission.
3/14/2012 c12 Trekkie2
This is cute. Georgia's mother has more patience than I would have. Three extra kids for three months. Not a way. Thanks for the update.
This is cute. Georgia's mother has more patience than I would have. Three extra kids for three months. Not a way. Thanks for the update.
2/27/2012 c11 Trekkie2
Wonder what the old man is going to say about his 14 year old daughter dating? This was cute.
Wonder what the old man is going to say about his 14 year old daughter dating? This was cute.
2/27/2012 c10 Trekkie2
This was cute. Sorry, haven't reviewed in a while. The aches and pains of getting old.
This was cute. Sorry, haven't reviewed in a while. The aches and pains of getting old.
2/15/2012 c10 
14Vulcanblood
*bawls* I wish I could get a kiss. WHY DOES THE WHOLE MALE POPULATION IGNORE ME! Great story though! XD
14Vulcanblood*bawls* I wish I could get a kiss. WHY DOES THE WHOLE MALE POPULATION IGNORE ME! Great story though! XD
2/11/2012 c9 Trekkie2
I just realized I didn't review. Sorry! Hey, I like green. Ally is a McCoy, isn't she? This was cute, thanks.
I just realized I didn't review. Sorry! Hey, I like green. Ally is a McCoy, isn't she? This was cute, thanks.
2/1/2012 c8 Trekkie2
Cute chapter. Are you ever going to identify parents other than the obvious ones with the last names?
Cute chapter. Are you ever going to identify parents other than the obvious ones with the last names?
1/25/2012 c7 Trekkie2
This is cute. Had to google the song. I haven't heard it. You know, this might be better received if it was uploaded in the AU category. Kirk has plenty of children (and had given birth to plenty of children, don't know how that happens) there. LOL! Thanks.
This is cute. Had to google the song. I haven't heard it. You know, this might be better received if it was uploaded in the AU category. Kirk has plenty of children (and had given birth to plenty of children, don't know how that happens) there. LOL! Thanks.
1/12/2012 c6 Trekkie2
This is a funny chapter. My sister's gerbil got loose one night. I awoke to the feeling of something running up and down my back, and it was inside my nightgown. The mouse story brings back such...memories. When I lived in England, I swear they only had one kind of spider, the Wolf spider. I'd encounter at least one a week. Actually, I think my wonderful, unemployed, ** neighbor was responsible for their presence in and around my house. And snakes? Me no like snakes. Nope! Nope! Nope!
This is a funny chapter. My sister's gerbil got loose one night. I awoke to the feeling of something running up and down my back, and it was inside my nightgown. The mouse story brings back such...memories. When I lived in England, I swear they only had one kind of spider, the Wolf spider. I'd encounter at least one a week. Actually, I think my wonderful, unemployed, ** neighbor was responsible for their presence in and around my house. And snakes? Me no like snakes. Nope! Nope! Nope!
1/11/2012 c6 Balrog Herder
Ah, no. I'm sorry. Giving Georgia three common phobias doesn't remove her from the Mary-Sue-dom. Try remaking her completely. Also, you don't find mice or snakes or spiders loose on the Enterprise. Just think about it. A practically sterile tin can in deep space. Number of awful creepy-crawlies on board: zero. None. A starship is basically a submarine in space, and submarines are STERILE. And, if creatures like that ever came near Sickbay, McCoy would throw a royal fit and rant about health issues and health safety and then cuss whoever let the crawlies loose on the ship all the way back to Earth.
So, to sum up, Georgia is still a Mary-Sue, most of your scenarios are impossible and people are OOC. And I think people would appreciate it if you took the time to answer reviews, if not as a PM then at least as part of an A/N at the beginning of the next chapter.
Ah, no. I'm sorry. Giving Georgia three common phobias doesn't remove her from the Mary-Sue-dom. Try remaking her completely. Also, you don't find mice or snakes or spiders loose on the Enterprise. Just think about it. A practically sterile tin can in deep space. Number of awful creepy-crawlies on board: zero. None. A starship is basically a submarine in space, and submarines are STERILE. And, if creatures like that ever came near Sickbay, McCoy would throw a royal fit and rant about health issues and health safety and then cuss whoever let the crawlies loose on the ship all the way back to Earth.
So, to sum up, Georgia is still a Mary-Sue, most of your scenarios are impossible and people are OOC. And I think people would appreciate it if you took the time to answer reviews, if not as a PM then at least as part of an A/N at the beginning of the next chapter.
1/10/2012 c5 Trekkie2
I cut my hair once. My mother almost fainted when she saw it. Then she regrouped and had my sister style it. Thanks for the update.
I cut my hair once. My mother almost fainted when she saw it. Then she regrouped and had my sister style it. Thanks for the update.
12/22/2011 c3 Ghash
No no no. How old are you? Nicely written, but you're obvoisly young and untrained. Plot line is common to youngsters, grammar is great. Summary warns people to stay away. Seriously, "characters you would die for"? No no no. perhaps YOU would, but nobody else.
Mary Sue warnings written here and there, and Tribbles aren't pink. They come in black, white, brown and an infinite number of combinations of those three basic colours. Semak sounds like a Vulcan and how is that supposed to be possible? Spock is single. He was engaged for some time, but broke it off.
And who the heck has two feet long hair? Cutting it yourself with a pair of scissors in a small, dark closet will look horrible, it will. Trust me. If you don't, try it yourself.
Some characters sound OOC (Out Of Character). And there is such a thing as a Gamma shift. Gamma shift is like a night shift, few crewmembers at work,ship set to night mode etc.
No line breaks, italics or other indicator that says: This is an Author's Note.
You should read some of KCS' stories. She writes for Star Trek, and her stories are beautifully written, people are in-character, plot line is believeable. They're REALLY high-quality, fun/great to read and learning how to write from reading her stories is wonderful.
No no no. How old are you? Nicely written, but you're obvoisly young and untrained. Plot line is common to youngsters, grammar is great. Summary warns people to stay away. Seriously, "characters you would die for"? No no no. perhaps YOU would, but nobody else.
Mary Sue warnings written here and there, and Tribbles aren't pink. They come in black, white, brown and an infinite number of combinations of those three basic colours. Semak sounds like a Vulcan and how is that supposed to be possible? Spock is single. He was engaged for some time, but broke it off.
And who the heck has two feet long hair? Cutting it yourself with a pair of scissors in a small, dark closet will look horrible, it will. Trust me. If you don't, try it yourself.
Some characters sound OOC (Out Of Character). And there is such a thing as a Gamma shift. Gamma shift is like a night shift, few crewmembers at work,ship set to night mode etc.
No line breaks, italics or other indicator that says: This is an Author's Note.
You should read some of KCS' stories. She writes for Star Trek, and her stories are beautifully written, people are in-character, plot line is believeable. They're REALLY high-quality, fun/great to read and learning how to write from reading her stories is wonderful.